Category: xx Archive FA16

What is this? juniorgirlblog

Thesis :

Based on current research, these acts of violence involve citizens who are also African American. In this paper, I will discuss how African American males are historically targets of these senseless acts.

Argument:Over the past year , there has been an increase in police involved shootings where many citizens, who are unarmed, are injured by the officers.

Definitions :

  • empowerment
  • discrimination
  • police brutality
  • overrated
  • violence
  • corruption
  •  oppression

Work Cited:

  1. ThinkProgress.” ThinkProgress. N.p., n.d. Web. 30 Oct. 2016.
  2. Williams, Janice. “Police Shooting Statistics 2016: Are More Black People Killed By Officers Than Other Races?” International Business Times. N.p., 26 Sept. 2016. Web. 30 Oct. 2016.

Safer Saws – anonymous

1A. Manufacturers

“When you’re cutting wood, if you accidentally run your hand into the blade, it’ll stop it so quickly that you just get a little nick instead of maybe taking some fingers off.”

1B. An ordinary saw would cause severe injury if your hand touched the blade, but this saw is different. It can save your fingers.

1C. This statement is factual, the blade will stop when touched by your finger.

1D. The statement by itself has no factual evidence and is casual at best. The only reason I know the sentence is factual is from the video that is part of the article.

2A. Customers

“To hold Bosch liable for not making a bad business decision that would cost them lots of money seems a bit unreasonable if not ludicrous.”

2B. Pinning the blame on Bosch for not incorporating this new technology is not fair considering it would be detrimental to their business.

2C. This a statement of opinion concluding holding Bosch liable is “unreasonable.”

2D. While poorly worded and not quite a rhetoric this is an opinion. The only problem I have with this statement is the jump from “a bit unreasonable” to “ludicrous”. The point he is trying to make becomes convoluted and a lot less stable when he tries to equate unreasonable to ludicrous.

3A. Industry Spokespeople

“SawStop is currently available in the marketplace to any consumer who chooses to purchase it.”

3B. SawStop can be purchased by any customer who wants it.

3C. This is a factual opinion, stating that anyone who feels the need to purchase this additional safety measure.

3D. This sentence is very subtly hinting at the fact that if the consumer wants to get the additional safety of SawStop it is “available” for purchase.

4A. Consumer Safety Advocates

“As I have stated many times before—and as is now reflected in the agency’s new strategic plan—one of the CPSC’s primary goals is a commitment to prevention.”

4B. The CPSC has a strategic plan which includes the goal to prevent future table saw injuries.

4C. This is a well versed clinical response to the safety advocates core values and goals.

4D. They claim they have gone over this many times and it should be common knowledge. Although they go on to say the agency is incorporating a “new strategic plan”. Is this new plan different than the original? At the end they do instill their primary goal is still the same, “commitment to prevention.”

5A. Injured Plaintiffs

“Wec says his permanent and “traumatic injury” could have been prevented if Bosch and its competitors had not rejected and fought against the safety technology.”

5B. This is a really opinionated statement, quoting “Wec”, saying his injury could of been prevented if only Bosch had not denied the new technology.

5C. This is a opinionated view from a victim that is obviously very biased. It sets out to demonize the big corporation that is “Bosch”.

5D. This claim is paraphrased and can be easily disputed. It gives off a personal and clearly biased vibe, and to me seems almost phony. There is no evidence and no face to put on the injury so for all intensive purposes its a fairy-tale.

6A. Personal Injury Lawyers

“Although SawStop safety technology has been around for more than ten years, not all table saw manufacturers have adopted it.”

6B. Although SawStop safety technology has been around for more than ten years, not all table saw manufacturers have adopted it.

6C. This is a clear cut statement verbalizing how long SawStop has been around and letting the reader know not everyone has adopted it.

6D. Not the most persuasive statement ever made but what it lacks in details it makes up for in simplicity. Sometimes a clear cut statement can be more influential than a million different metaphors and statistics.

7A. Government Officials

“The benefits of improving table saw safety clearly outweigh the costs.”

7B. There are many benefits of improving the table saw, cost should not be an issue.

7C. This is a opinionated claim. It insinuates that incorporating this new technology is a situation of morality. We shouldn’t negotiate price when it can save someone from traumatic injury.

7D. Again, not very well defined in the wording and reasoning. What are the benefits? What are the costs?

8A. News Reporters

“But as well as the technology works, the major tool companies have failed to put this kind of device on any of their table saws — even eight years after Gass offered to license it to them.”

8B. This technology is proven to work yet major tool companies refuse to use it, even after Gass offered them the license.

8C. This is another opinionated claim backed by some fact. The blame is directed toward these tool companies suggesting they are neglectful for not accepting the license.

8D. This statement is persuasive enough but gives no statistics to help convince the reader the companies are indeed neglectful. “Failed” is a strong word and was used pretty tactfully in this claim.

Blind Summary-theshocker69

Mammograms may be one of the most important and most utilized medical procedure utilized by women to avoid breast cancer. However, many doctors do not have the ability to be sure about the diagnosis that they give to their patients. Following the mammogram, if the tumor is malignant, the patient is sent for a biopsy to ensure it is malignant. If there is no tumor spotted then the patient leaves and continues their lives. For this reason, many women leave the hospital after receiving a false negative; unknowing of the cancer growing inside of them. For this reason, we need smarter routes of ensuring accurate mammogram results.

E02: Cows and Chips

The beach is often a popular vacation destination on the East Coast. One of the many popular activities for children on the beach is building sand castles, but how long do those sand castles last? The cool, calm waves creep up and wash away each and every sand castle before we know it. They come and go just as quick as money does. We slave to build a sand castle that is something worth while just to see it dissappear shortly after and we are left to build it again. This is the same way with money. We work extremely hard to earn something that we instantly spend and we are left to continue working to earn more money. This in the eyes of many is the harsh concept of money. Many questions that arise is what is money and the concept behind it? This is a major question for everyone around the world. As the famous “Stone Money” story stated, money is an item worth value for trade. In order to further explain the concept of money, we will look into how the US currency differs from the Yap’s and the public’s faith in the value of currency.

A05: Proposal+5 – anonymous

For my research essay I will be examining to what degree or if at all race plays in the justice system. This topic of debate cannot and should not be avoided; understanding all of its complex variables is critical in maintaining a functional society. The majority of the African American population (and other minorities) living in the U.S. today believe that racial profiling is as real as any war. Movements such as Black Lives Matter have taken off with incredible force and along with it a very strong influence. Is the brutality focused in on the black community? Or is the media portraying it that way just to get a story?

http://www.americanbar.org/publications/human_rights_magazine_home/human_rights_vol37_2010/fall2010/justice_for_all_challenging_racial_disparities_criminal_justice_system.html

The essential content of the article: This article gives present day statistics related to race and incarceration percentages. This is an extremely important topic of discussion when analyzing faults in the justice. The fact is 1 in 3 African American babies born will expierince incarceration in their life time at our current rates. This is a troubling statistic to hear but it is important to not take every statistic at face value

What it proves: “National surveys conducted by the U.S. Department of Justice find that while African Americans may be subject to traffic stops by police at similar rates to whites, they are three times as likely to be searched after being stopped.” It prove that whether it is done consciously or not there can be discriminations found in earlier stages of the processing of the law.

Visual Rewrite-31Savage

Good Dad

0:01-0:02 The ad opens up with a middle aged white male looking to his lift with his eyes opened wide as if he is surprised by something in that direction. He is looking from behind a hand carved gold object. The object looks like it could be a picture frame. The man has dirty blond hair with a receding hairline as if he is losing his hair. The man is only visible from his eyes to the top of his head. The gold frame takes up the bottom half of the scene. He looks to be standing with his back against a tan painted wall.

0:02-0:03 The camera zooms out to a full shot of the man and a portrait. The camera captures the area of the room where the man is standing. The man is holding a portrait of a white woman looking to her left, with a gold dress on. The portrait is half the size of the man. The man is holing the portrait with each hand on both sides of the frame. Only his lower body and hands are visible to the camera. He has on blue jeans with black and tan socks. He is standing against a wall between two windows that has tan curtains where the portrait would hang. The room seems to be a sitting room. There are two chairs to his left and right a few feet away from the windows.

0:03-0:05 The man is now in the family room inside a couch laying under the seat cushions. The view of the man is blocked by the couch cushions and wooden coffee table in front of the couch. The coffee table has 3 books on it. There is a tan lamp placed on a table to the right of the couch. There is also a mahogany leather chair with a dark brown leather ottoman to the right of the coffee table. The man is very noticeable under the cushions. He is making the couch cushions uneven creating a separation of the cushions and the couch. The left side of the mans face is visible from the cameras angle.

0:05 The man has tucked his head deeper into the couch as if he doesn’t want to be seen. He is still looking outward to see if something was coming.

0:05-0:06 The man is now in an adults bedroom standing on a white shelf.  His height is fully visible. He is wearing the same jeans and sock with a dark colored sweater and light blues dress shirt under it. He is standing tall with his back against the wall of a double door glass paneled closet. There is also a single door white closet directly in front of him. The room is light tan and white.

0:06  There is a person seated in a mahogany leather chair with a colorful knitted blanket with only their hand and foot exposed. The person has the same socks the man had on. The person is noticeable to anybody it that room. The room seems to be a entertainment room. There is a flat screen television on the wall. The television is mounted on the wall between a white shelf with pictures and books on it.

0:07 The person has pulled their exposed hand under the cover.

0:08-0:09 The camera is positioned to show the mans body from the legs down. He seems to be attempting to hide behind a curtain. He is in the same attire. The curtain is off white with a horizontal pattern at the bottom. There are Two tables visible in this scene.

0:09-0:11 The camera is now positioned to the mans left with his body visible from the shoulders up. The man is behind the curtains looking to his left as if he sees something in that direction. The man’s face is cleanly shaved like a Wall Street business man. He has a calm but alert facial expression.

0:11-0:13 The man is now in a hallway near the front door. The front door is wide open but he is not headed for the door. He looks like he is trying to step as lightly as possible. He is looking to his right up the stairs. His shoes are still off, that maybe because walking in the hallway with hardwood floors would make too much noise.

0:13-0:15 Someone is now standing in a black brick chimney with their lower body exposed. There are two bronze ornaments to the persons right and left. These ornaments are knee high to the person.

0:15 The man is now at the top of the stairs looking toward the room behind the steps. The camera is positioned in a room with the view of the stairs and the room directly across from the stairs. The room has a picture on the wall with two black wooden chairs a few feet away from the wall.

0:16 The man is now in the doorway across from the stairs looking in the same direction as before.

0:17 The man is now in the doorway of the room with the picture and black chairs looking into the room where the camera is positioned. He seems to be looking for someone.

0:18-0:19 He is in a laundry room balled up in a cabinet attempting to close the cabinet door. There are two laundry detergent bottles in front of the man. There are also folded laundry on the folding table.

0:20-0:21 He is standing behind a plant he is holding near a white door. There is a mirror to his left. The camera is positioned to capture most of his body except his feet. There is a room to his left where a brown piano sits under a window. There is also a small picture and lamp near the piano.

0:21-0:23 He is now in a kid’s room smiling into the room from behind a shelf of stuffed animals. The stuffed animals might belong to a little girl. There are many stuffed animals with girly colors in them. The paint on the wall is white with pink flowers. This further indicates that it’s a girls room. There is a baby doll on the bed out of focus of the camera.

0:23-0:25 This scene is in a upstairs hallway. There is a wooden cabinet against the wall. There is a little girl with pink and purple pajamas on running in the hallway. The girl is running in the direction of a room at the end of the hallway. She has long brown hair that sways behind her as she runs.

0:25-0:30 The man is in the room hiding under a pile of clothes. The closet looks like a storage closet because the shelves are full of white blankets and towels. There is also a vacuum cleaner to the right of the guy. The words Fatherhood.gov floats above the man’s head. There is also four logos and the number 877-4DAD411 at the bottom of the screen.

A06: Visual Rewrite – aaspiringwriter

“Now”

0:01
The ad starts in the middle of a scene, where we are put behind the counter of a diner with a quick zooming back of the camera. The footage looks a bit dull and faded with minimal washed out colours, makes you feel as if it’s a home recorded video or some low-budget film, that is recorded for a real purpose.

Looking at the marble countertop before us, it seems as if the footage was taken perhaps from the kitchen or the service window. This is made clear as some ketchup bottles, sugar server, menu holders seen somewhat closer to the camera along with empty glasses kept upside down in a tray and a red top bottle of Angostura bitters, commonly used as a cocktail flavour.

On the counter are two young boys (one black, one white) sitting with a man. Both young boys are dressed in similar sport jerseys. The man is wearing a white T-shirt and a black Jacket and it appears to be gym clothes with a lanyard hanging around his neck. Probably a whistle hangs from it. This could mean he is a school coach and may be asking the two young boys to finish their food by repeatedly pointing at their plate. Maybe he doesn’t want the food to be wasted. The man looks to be in his mid 30’s and the two boys appears to be about 10-12years old.

Behind the three at the counter, there is another man and a woman also looks to be around their mid 30’s, occupy opposite sides on another table discussing something. It appears as if they are all sitting in a diner. The framed artwork hangs on the wall by the couple is a black and white photo of an urban street scene.

0:02
The camera zoomed in on the right face profile of the man, who turns to his right and starts talking. He has long sideburns. It is possible that someone is sitting next to him. He has a very comforting smile on his face. Maybe he is talking to a close-friend or relative.

0:04-0:05
Another young white boy approximately of same age as the other two boys, covers the frame with a wide smile on his face, rather feeling ticklish by the man’s hand moving around on his head, making him lean towards the man. He has very short blond looking hair and a very pretty smile on his face. He is wearing the same V-neck sport jersey as the other two young boys, as if they all belong to a same team. The coach seems to be teasing him in a friendly way. The kid has a wide smile on his face and is nodding his head as the coach is patting the kids head and talking to him. Their gestures appear to be really friendly and looks like they have known each other for a long time. They could be father and son.

0:05-0:06
There is a sudden change in the boy’s expression. His smile gradually disappears as he looks to be in some doubt due to some loud bang, followed by loud talking heard as if someone slammed their hand right on the table that moved all the glass items. He turns around with fear on his face, and looks on to the table behind them. This is when the frame is fully covered with a woman sitting just behind their table, with blonde, curly sort of short hair. She is wearing an ivory shirt. The woman quickly turns her head towards the boy and notices the boy staring her. She feels embarrassed and turns her head away from the boy toward the man sitting opposite him, who seems to be doing some loud talking.

0:07-0:08
The man comes in the frame again, with his right face profile as he was looking at young boy. He then grinds his teeth as if he has a hint of what’s about to happen after being disturbed by the bang on table followed by some loud talking. It appears if he is a bit disappointed of the whole situation. He looks down at his plate with displeasure on his face, he sighs as he picks up a fry off his plates and slowly eats it. It appears as if he is trying to avoid some situation.

0:09-0:12
With a slight zoom out in the camera this time, shows the man and the young white boy sitting on his left, along with the couple sitting behind their table. Both the man and white boy turn around in doubt to see the man and women sitting on the table behind them opposite to each other. The urban street artwork is also seen, right in the centre on the wall by the couples table. The man, with his left face profile slightly towards the camera and the young boy with his head fully turned around toward the couple are seen, as they try to figure out the ongoing scene between the couple. They see that the man has tightly grabbed the women’s hand with a look of anger on his face as he is pointing his index finger on his other hand towards her, still talking as loud. It appears as if they are arguing over something and he is shouting at her. The woman still feeling embarrassed about the whole situation and wanting it to stop. Next frame fully covers the man accompanied by the three young boys, looking away somewhere, thinking what to do as he grinds his teeth again with his mouth shut this time.

0:12
A question pops up with a black background.
“When do you get involved?”

0:14-0:21
The coach is in the frame again for some split seconds. The frame quickly keeps on switching between the two different ongoing scenarios. One is where the coach is sitting down thinking about the behaviour of the man on the other table towards his woman. Thinking whether he should get up and interrupt or let it be on the couple to be sorted on their own. The second switching frame shows different physical actions being performed by the man on the woman as she tries to resist, still wanting him to stop and calm down. The man is being somewhat violent and showing aggressive behaviour by pulling her by shirt and snatching her hair, wanting her to get up and leave the table as she keeps on resisting. The coach is still thinking something. And soon after, another question pops up with a black background. The question says “Now? “. This is quickly followed by a very violent reaction from the man, he hits the woman right in her face as she was resisting to leave the table and wanting him to stop, trying to get his hands off her. The coach is still thinking as the same question pops on the screen again “Now?”.

0:22-0:26
This time the camera is fully focused on the kid who was initially smiling, now completely frightened by the angry man’s behaviour. His face is full of fear, as he looks very uncomfortable, scared, disgusted, helpless. He is sympathetic towards that women. He is sad and uneasy and it looks like he is about to cry. It feels as if he wants to do something to stop this physical abuse. He looks at his coach in despair, hoping he would do something to stop this. He just wants someone to stop this. Then a sentence pops up with the kid in the background. The sentence says “The best time to get involved is Now.”

0:28-0:32
Another sentence shows up on the screen, “Teach boys that violence against women is wrong.” While the frightened young boy is still seen in the background.

0:33-0:37
Again the black background pops up with words fading in – “Teach Early. Call 800-End-Abuse.”

The End

Conclusion:
The advertisement conveys a really strong message on Violence against women. It shows the importance of teaching your kids the difference between the right and the wrong. Every adult is responsible for stopping this kind of behaviour. They should stand against it and teach their kids the same. Violence against women is wrong. Violence against anyone is wrong. Stand against the abuse and end it.

open strong- wvu hockey

The force of a professional boxer’s fist is equivalent to being hit with a 13 pound bowling ball traveling 20 miles per hour, about 52 g’s. Plopping down into an easy chair can generate up to 10 g’s. So, it seems that somewhere between 10 and 50 g’s is the threshold to permanent brain injury. This does not mean that accelerations over 50 g’s have to cause permanent brain damage. Football players are subjected to 200 g’s, and Indy race car drivers have been subjected to 80 g’s without permanent injury, but they were wearing helmets. This information is well known and we still have kids being injured every single day. Something needs to be done about the blatant head trauma young athletes are experiencing from sports.

With head trauma being the most common sports injury, Something needs to be put into affect immediately to change this. Head impacts and concussions caused by contact sports are a quickly growing epidemic among young athletes. 3,800,000 concussions have been reported in 2012, double what was reported in 2002. What athletes don’t know is that this could easily affect them for the rest of their lives if not treated properly.

Open Strong – akayoye

When thinking of the word police, we think about protection, but in today’s society, instead of protection, we think about police brutality. Every day we hear incidents of police brutality and racial violence; innocent people killed because they looked suspicious, or because they were a threat. Research shows that African American men are more likely to be threatened and harassed by police. In 2004, Frank Jude Jr. of Milwaukee, Wisconsin was beaten by police because he was suspected to steal a police badge. He called 911 only to find out that those who were supposed to help him turned against him, the responding officers only came to join the party. 56% of the African American community have dropped calling 911 which makes crime reporting much more difficult for those who need help. Police brutality needs to come to an end; we need to feel safe, not scared.