Revision—Mechanics

Quotation Marks for Articles

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In the Milton Friedman’s piece The Island of Stone Money, I noticed the idea

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In Milton Friedman’s piece, “The Island of Stone Money,” I noticed the idea

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Quotation Marks for Articles

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When i came across the article by Milton Friedman named The Island of Stone Money I was intrigued.

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When I came across the article by Milton Friedman titled “The Island of Stone Money,” I was intrigued.

Inline Citation, not MLA

Use inline citation INSTEAD of the MLA parenthetical method.

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Friedman also discussed an instance where the french technically owned some portion of gold. However, they never physically retrieved the gold, instead a deal was made with the U.S and was stored in a drawer on our homeland.(Friedman)

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Friedman further demonstrated the abstract nature of ownership with an anecdote in which the French took possession of some US gold not by physically retrieving it but by agreeing to leave the gold in the US in a drawer labeled “France.”

Miscellaneous Grammar Corrections

1. Money only has value due to the fact that everyone wants it.
“Due to” means “caused by,” so your sentence would read:
Money only has value caused by the fact that everyone wants it.
You’d probably agree that a better version would be:
Money only has value because everyone wants it.

2. Money only has value because everyone wants it.
“Only” modifies the word that follows it.
Your sentence, therefore, means: Money only has value. It can’t earn value, lose value, find value, etc.
You’d probably agree that a better version would be:
Money has value only because everyone wants it.

3. Before people use to barter or trade fro things they wanted.
The phrase for things often happened in the past is “used to.”
Your sentence, therefore, should be:
Before people used to barter or trade for things they wanted.

4. Before people used to barter or trade for things they wanted.
Your sentence needs a comma. If people used to barter at an earlier time, the comma follows Before:
Before, people used to barter or trade for things they wanted.
But since “used to” indicates clearly an earlier time, you’d probably agree a better version would be:
People used to barter or trade for things they wanted.

5. An example of this is trading cattle for different herbs, spices, or supplies.
Different from what?
An example of this is trading cattle for herbs, spices, or supplies.

6. Money however is a form of middle man.
When it interrupts a sentence, however is surrounded by commas.
Money, however, is a form of middle man.

7. Money, however, is a form of middle man.
Unless you’re going to distinguish between kinds or types or forms of middle man, you should avoid the words kind, and type, and form.
Money, however, is a middle man.