Some Live Feedback on Grammar and Rhetoric:
Taking helmets out of football is a very counterintuitive idea itself.
Taking helmets out of football is counterintuitive.
It may seem as if this will hurt the players, but in fact it will help protect the players.
It may seem that playing unprotected will hurt players, but in fact it will help them.
No helmets will make keep players from taking risky, hard hits, and cause them to have more caution when playing the game.
Playing bareheaded will keep players from tackling head-first, sparing them from head, neck, and brain injuries.
They all will be protected from severe concussions, spinal cord injuries, and developing CTE later in life.
They will be protected from severe concussions, spinal cord injuries, and late-developing CTEs.
There is however, some opposition to this counterintuitive idea.
There is, however, some opposition to this counterintuitive idea.
Many people feel as if there would be no change to the amount of head injuries sustained in a football game.
Many people feel there would be no reduction to the number of head injuries sustained in a football game.
They feel as if players will still hit hard, and make risky plays.
They feel players will still hit hard and make risky plays.
Today football helmets are evolving more and more everyday.
Football helmets are evolving more and more every day.
Risk compensation is when protective equipment prompts individuals to act more aggressively which increases the potential for injury. If you give an individual better protective equipment, they are going to have an increase in aggression, causing more injuries. Helmets may have been upgraded, and made to absorb hits, but they still do the same damage.
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I️n class we discussed grammar and rhetoric.
-we went over sentences that needed work.
-Professor went over the work with class, and we decided if each sentence needs work.
-we briefly looked over three exercises; E12, E15, and E16.
Professor wrapped class up by discussing identifying which of each sentence is the best.
-went through each sentence and chose the correct answer that’ll correct each sentence.
Ex: Author, in “title,” said that “quote.”
Author claims, in “title,” that “quote.”
– use it may seem that instead of it may seems as if
– citation techniques – Author, in “Title,” said that “quote”….. Author claims, in “Title” that “quote” …. In Author’s essay, “Title,” Author claims “quote”
– click on link above for more examples for quoting authors in paper
We went over some gramtical stuff, becareful with reflexive pronouns.
Went over how to cite properly.
Said language, use author, title and quote.
How to properly use “only”
-Do your best to make your sentences economical. (Don’t use words you don’t have to use.)
-Don’t use conversational writing.
-Don’t use “it may seem as if.” There is no need for “as if.” Use “it may seem that.”
– Correcting certain grammar errors
– Update arguments with this lesson today
– Learning to make great citation
– Making sure we don’t confuse the reader with negative verb while using “because”
11/22/17 Comp 2 notes
You cannot be vague in making claims while writing
Identify the author
Identify the title, article, essay, or story
They contain a Quotation
Could also be a paraphrase
They also have said language
SAID BELIEVES CLAIMS ASSERTS INSISTS, or other ways of saying “said”
Not only a good grammar tip, but a good life tip to not start off with “I don’t love you”
“I love you, but not because you’re beautiful.”
Make bold, positive claims
Start with what you want to say, and then give what the subject was not guilty of
Only can be put in a variety of places in a sentence, so choose the right one for the given situation. And there can only be one correct use for every situation
Only is a powerful thing, use it properly!
Gm morning of 11/23/17
Meeting with professor today
Live feedback on grammar & rhetoric – reconstructing sentence structures & what to eliminate
*Examples of citations & works cited !! *
*You are allowed to start with Colons but not every time *
*sentence structure & avoid negative claims by just sticking with positive ones
Copy sentences adapted from student essay by replacing negative verbs with positive verbs
-cutting out words that aren’t needed
ex: taking helmets out of football is a very counterintuitive idea itself
fixed: taking helmets out of football is counterintuitive
no constructive value = get rid of the words
as if=not needed
don’ lead with no or don’t
-identify the author
-quotations or paraphrase without quotes
-said language (said, believes, claims, asserts, insists,etc
-make bold positive claims