Agenda WED NOV 22

Some Live Feedback on Grammar and Rhetoric:

Taking helmets out of football is a very counterintuitive idea itself.

Taking helmets out of football is counterintuitive.

It may seem as if this will hurt the players, but in fact it will help protect the players.

It may seem that playing unprotected will hurt players, but in fact it will help them.

No helmets will make keep players from taking risky, hard hits, and cause them to have more caution when playing the game.

Playing bareheaded will keep players from tackling head-first, sparing them from head, neck, and brain injuries.

They all will be protected from severe concussions, spinal cord injuries, and developing CTE later in life.

They will be protected from severe concussions, spinal cord injuries, and late-developing CTEs.

There is however, some opposition to this counterintuitive idea.

There is, however, some opposition to this counterintuitive idea.

Many people feel as if there would be no change to the amount of head injuries sustained in a football game.

Many people feel there would be no reduction to the number of head injuries sustained in a football game.

They feel as if players will still hit hard, and make risky plays.

They feel players will still hit hard and make risky plays.

Today football helmets are evolving more and more everyday.

Football helmets are evolving more and more every day.

Risk compensation is when protective equipment prompts individuals to act more aggressively which increases the potential for injury. If you give an individual better protective equipment, they are going to have an increase in aggression, causing more injuries. Helmets may have been upgraded, and made to absorb hits, but they still do the same damage. 

8 Responses to Agenda WED NOV 22

  1. phillygirl20 says:

    I️n class we discussed grammar and rhetoric.
    -we went over sentences that needed work.
    -Professor went over the work with class, and we decided if each sentence needs work.
    -we briefly looked over three exercises; E12, E15, and E16.
    Professor wrapped class up by discussing identifying which of each sentence is the best.
    -went through each sentence and chose the correct answer that’ll correct each sentence.

    Ex: Author, in “title,” said that “quote.”

    Author claims, in “title,” that “quote.”

    Like

  2. 11collegegirl says:

    – use it may seem that instead of it may seems as if
    – citation techniques – Author, in “Title,” said that “quote”….. Author claims, in “Title” that “quote” …. In Author’s essay, “Title,” Author claims “quote”
    – click on link above for more examples for quoting authors in paper

    Like

  3. plethoragaming says:

    We went over some gramtical stuff, becareful with reflexive pronouns.

    Went over how to cite properly.
    Said language, use author, title and quote.

    How to properly use “only”

    Like

  4. rainbow987 says:

    -Do your best to make your sentences economical. (Don’t use words you don’t have to use.)
    -Don’t use conversational writing.
    -Don’t use “it may seem as if.” There is no need for “as if.” Use “it may seem that.”

    Like

  5. theintern50 says:

    – Correcting certain grammar errors
    – Update arguments with this lesson today
    – Learning to make great citation
    – Making sure we don’t confuse the reader with negative verb while using “because”

    Like

  6. theadmiral1 says:

    11/22/17 Comp 2 notes

    You cannot be vague in making claims while writing
    Citation mechanics:
    Identify the author
    Identify the title, article, essay, or story
    They contain a Quotation
    Could also be a paraphrase
    They also have said language
    SAID BELIEVES CLAIMS ASSERTS INSISTS, or other ways of saying “said”
    Not only a good grammar tip, but a good life tip to not start off with “I don’t love you”
    “I love you, but not because you’re beautiful.”
    Make bold, positive claims
    Start with what you want to say, and then give what the subject was not guilty of
    Only can be put in a variety of places in a sentence, so choose the right one for the given situation. And there can only be one correct use for every situation
    Only is a powerful thing, use it properly!

    Like

  7. neweditionlover says:

    Gm morning of 11/23/17
    Meeting with professor today
    Live feedback on grammar & rhetoric – reconstructing sentence structures & what to eliminate
    *Examples of citations & works cited !! *
    *You are allowed to start with Colons but not every time *
    *sentence structure & avoid negative claims by just sticking with positive ones
    Copy sentences adapted from student essay by replacing negative verbs with positive verbs

    Like

  8. todayistheday19 says:

    -cutting out words that aren’t needed
    ex: taking helmets out of football is a very counterintuitive idea itself
    fixed: taking helmets out of football is counterintuitive
    no constructive value = get rid of the words
    as if=not needed
    don’ lead with no or don’t
    good citations
    -identify the author
    -title included
    -quotations or paraphrase without quotes
    -said language (said, believes, claims, asserts, insists,etc
    avoid negative
    -make bold positive claims

    Like

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s