Causal Argument – collegegirl

Providing to Our Youth

Police brutality has been an issue for many years and it remains a major concern for people of minority communities. In 2014, Barack Obama created a movement that provided young black men a place to go to seek guidance and influences. This movement has caused young men to be more successful and have better futures.

The White House has six milestones to define the MBK movement. The six milestones can be defined as the following, to ensure all children enter school emotionally and physically ready, ensure all children read at grade level by 3rd grade, ensure all youth graduate from high school, ensure all students complete post secondary education or training, ensure all youth out of school are employed and lastly, to ensure all youth to remain safe from violent crimes and have a second chance. These milestones can ensure that the younger crowd will have a better future and be more successful. Let’s break the milestones down to see how they will help our youth be successful. When kids are physically and mentally prepared to go to school, they are ready to learn on a day to day basis. Statistics has proved that 75 percent of students who struggle with reading in 3rd grade, never catch up, which is why all children should be able to ready at grade level by 3rd grade. Teens graduating from high school is a milestone in general. Completing college is the next phase. Getting a degree is extremely important when it comes to getting a job since good paying jobs now a days require a degree. Lastly, when it comes to keeping our youth safe, it is obviously very important. Young people are the future. They are the ones who are going to make changes in our communities and workplaces. Keeping them out of trouble should be our main priority.

Because the movement has so many goals and milestones that it would like to achieve, it really is a powerful movement. Providing our youth with guidance and responsibilities will cause them to want to make their communities better and help them with their future as well. Taking their minds off of what is happening in the world we live in today with police brutality, will help the youth feel like they aren’t stuck in the communities they live in and that their is a light at the end of the tunnel.

Robust Verbs – collegegirl

Heroin addicts cause a huge problem in Vancouver by committing crimes to support their habits. To stop the addicts, Vancouver created a program “free heroin for addicts” which does everything it can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. Addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because they are using. Addicted heroin users will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. Feeding their addictions has no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug. This program won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. The program only tries to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. Providing the drug to these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

Enough About You – collegegirl

Money seems to have a big role in our society; there will not be much to do or we will not get far if we don’t have any. Although we cannot see money physically, it’s valuable in different ways. In today’s society we must have faith in the government and in the banking system that our money will be handled properly; if not, then we would have to hide all of our money under our own mattresses or around our house. People have no clue what happens in the banks, or how they take care of their money. I always thought money was simple; you either have some or you don’t—that’s it. However, being introduced to this assignment, the Yap Fei, US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts now seem similar. We don’t actually see our money being transferred. For instance, when someone gets paid, they aren’t handed cash or receive a physical check, in fact, the money’s all directly transferred into one’s bank account, and we just have to trust that we will receive more money.

White Paper – collegegirl

Content Descriptions:

  1. Positive effects that the MBK movement has on young black males
  2. Why no movement for young black females
  3. Female figures like Oprah Winfrey, Michelle Obama and Gabrielle Union need to come together to help young black females in small communities.

1. Working Hypothesis 1:

Although there are movements for young black males such as MBK which provides guidance, our young black females need support and guidance just as much as the males.

Working Hypothesis 2:

Female leaders such as Michelle Obama, Oprah Winfrey and Gabrielle Union should step up and come together to help guide young black females to the right track to become successful.

2. Topics for Smaller Paper

Definition/ Classification Argument 

Every community needs to have five characteristics in order to be successful in completing a common goal. The general definition of a community can be defined as a group of people living in the same place or having a particular characteristic in common. The five characteristics that are said to make a community successful consist of five different roles that need to be fulfilled in order to reach the common goal. These five roles consist of the host, facilitator, “popular one”,  instigator, and the voyeur. With these roles in tact, it is definite that a community will succeed. If the three leaders, Michelle Obama, Oprah Winfrey and Gabrielle Union come together a fulfill these roles, or find the perfect candidates for these roles, young black females will find that they are on the correct path to success.

Cause/ Effect Argument 

When young black males join the MBK movement, they are open to a new world. They provide guidance and hep young black men realize that there is more to this world than crime. They teach them how to provide and be respectful. Doing this, will help our community because the more males in the movement, the better the community will be. If this support was provided to young men of color years ago, it could have saved lives such as Trayvon Martin. Although the death of Trayvon Martin was unexpected, if he would have been apart of the MBK community movement that night or prior to that night, it might have changed the outcome of the night of his death.

Rebuttal Argument

My rebuttal argument for this topic is that most people believe that young black males are in more trouble than young black females are. Because young black males are main targets of police brutality, they should be the one’s who need to be focused on. Statistically speaking, men are more likely to end up in prison, jail or parole.

3. Current State of My Research Paper

My paper is complete.


Definition Argument – collegegirl

There are many young black men who have a difficult time finding out who there are and figuring out how to be successful in life due to the fact that the world we live in today with violence and police brutality in the back of their mind. In 2014, Barack Obama began a movement called My Brother’s Keeper which provided young black men of color the support they need to think broadly about their future. The question that everyone wanted answers to was if Obama was going to continue this movement after his term as President was over.

As previously stated, the goal for this movement was to help young black men reach their goals and their success in the future. Many wondered if Obama will continue this movement after leaving office. Well, if you didn’t think he was going to continue this movement, you’re wrong. Obama showed how passionate he was about the movement during an interview with Dawn Porter. She explained how even though she has watched and read all of Obama’s speeches about the movement, she was still surprised of how passionate and personal he took the movement. In the interview, Obama also verified that he agreed to continue the movement even after he left office.

Because Obama agreed to continue the movement, this has shown how passionate he was about the movement. But, what if Obama did not continue the movement. Would others take on the responsible of leading the movement. If Obama did not continue the movement, there would not be as much success as it has now.


Works Cited Capehart, JonathanWeblog post. Washington Post – Blogs, Washington: WP Company LLC d/b/a The Washington Post. May 20, 2015.







I have been thinking about changing my ENTIRE topic for my research paper. We spoke in my student meeting about writing about the Obama MBK movement. I was going to write about how the MBK movement only lasted while Obama was our President. But in fact, after doing some research, the MBK movement is still happening through Obama even though he is now out of office. So what’s my argument now? Should I take entire new route with a whole new topic. One idea, is to compare Trump and Obama’s in office effectiveness with young children. But, would this be 3,000 words of writing? I need LOTS of help. I feel as though I don’t even have a real “thesis” statement.

Safer Saw–collegegirl

Consumer Safety Advocates

4A. National Consumer League

“Ten people every day – according the CPSC’s own data – have their fingers amputated in power saw accidents”

4B. Statistically shows that ten people get their fingers chopped off from power saw accidents.

4C. Factual claim because it is showing statistics.

4D. This claims provides the reader with the necessary statistic regarding people who work with power saws. This claim is reasonable because again, its statistics.


11A. Frank Oslick (suffered from and injury caused by a power saw)

“If your device prevents even one person from going through what I have gone through it is a world class accomplishment.”

11B. Oslick believes that if the safer saw will prevent others from suffering from an injury in which he suffered from, then it will be a great accomplishment.

11C. Opinion based claim.

11D. The logic behind this claim is to tell a victims opinion regarding the safer saw. Oslick suffered from a huge cut in his arm which led to him having to get stitches.

Personal Injury Lawyers 

6A. Amputation Lawyer

“The SawStop and other table saw safety devices are actually very simple.”

6B. Claim made is that the author believes that the makings of the safety saw device is simple and easy.

6C. Opinion based claim.

6D. The logic behind this claim is to make it seem as if the machine is very simple to make. Which leads to the reason for why it should be offered to every machinery company.

Industry Spokesperson

3A. Clint Deboer

“No offense, but I don’t think this is a move by Bosch (or any other tool manufacturer for that matter) to prevent safety devices, but simply a move to prevent the unintended consequences of adding mandatory safety devices that would, in some instances, double the price of entry level power saws.”

3B. Debar makes this claim to show his opinion. He thinks that manufacturers did not create the safety machine to prevent safety devices but to prevent what could happen in the future when manufactures actually have to add mandatory safety devices to their products.

3C. Opinion based claim.

3D. Logic behind this claim is for the author to explain the price of mandatory safety devices would been more expensive compared to them not being mandatory.

Injured Plaintiff

5A. “If this safety mechanism had been included in the table saw, Osorio’s injuries would have been limited to a 1/8-inch cut on only one finger, instead of two unusable fingers and three fingers with no feeling, requiring five surgeries and $384,000 in medical expenses.”

5B. This claim is showing what could have happened is Osorio was using a safety saw. Then, it compares it to what actually did happen and the expenses and life-long injuries he suffered from because of the saw not protecting his fingers.

5C. Factual claim because it’s giving number to prove the cost of the procedure.

5D. The logic behind this claim is to show the readers what happened to someone when they were not using the safety saw.


Proposal- For my research paper, I am going to focus on the controversial topic of inequality in the justice system. There have been many cases in the past couple of years where there have been white cops who have gotten away with crimes against blacks. A few years ago, the Black Lives Matter campaign began after Treyvon Martin was shot and killed by George Zimmerman. Zimmerman was found not guilty in this case, which started the movement of Black Lives Matter.

Why is it that as much attention as the Black Lives Matter Movement campaign makes, why does racial inequality still exist today.

  1. “Inequality in America”

The Essential Content of the Article: This article explains how one of the most critical issues we face in the world today is the inequities within most countries. One of the most critical issues in this world today is inequalities which is causing change in the social world. Many sense this harm and know that if it this crisis continuous, it could harm our future.

What it Proves: It proves that any type of inequalities can effect the way our future will be.

2.  “Governing with words: The political dialogue on race, public policy, and inequality in America”

The Essential Content of the Article: This article will argue the fact presidential communications about race are getting lots of attentions. Words matter and the protestors opinions in the Black Lives Matter Movement are going to be heard one way or another.

What it Proves: That the creating of the Black Lives Matters Movement is actually being heard. Now, there haven’t been many cases involving a white police officers and a black make have a verdict favoring the Victims side. There’e the problem. How can a campaign attract so much attention but nothing has been seen to be different.

3. “Which Black Lives Matter”

The Essential Content of the Article: The article will argue with the fact that there needs to be more places for young men to go to where they can feel safe.

What it Proves: That we need to create more places where the younger generation can feel safe from harm because of the color of their skin.

4. “Lebron James and Black Lives Matter’

The Essential Context of the Article: The Article shows that the movement is even effecting people like Labron James.

What it Proves: What policy brutality and the justice system and its effect are having on society.

5. “All Lives Matter, But so Does Race”

The Essential Content of the Article: Explains the stereotypes of young black men usually are of those who come from a low income social class.

What it Proves: The inequality of the social classes.