Category: x Archive Assignments

Reflective — socrateslee13

Core Value I. My work demonstrates that I used a variety of social and interactive practices that involve recursive stages of exploration, discovery, conceptualization, and development.

Regarding this value I would claim that I showed development, but I still have room for improvement. In the beginning my work went through the process and stages such as continuing to rewrite my work in order to improve it. The process began with rereading my work and analyzing it searching for what my work was missing or what I needed to replace/add to my work. After I went through and reviewed what changes needed to be made, I would go through my work making the proper changes to ensure my work had improved. In my Stone Money Rewrite I displayed improvement of this value by making variations improvements to my work.

Core Value II. My work demonstrates that I placed texts into conversation with one another to create meaning by synthesizing ideas from various discourse communities. 

For this value , I would say that I have demonstrated it with my Definition Rewrite with providing a numerous amount of text and giving it great meaning. I gave my Definition Rewrite a lot of rewriting because I thoroughly went through the text making sure to truly capture the text from the meaning. However I did miss one part of the core value which was to placed texts into a conversation with each other but based on the other strengths I have displayed with this value, I could improve on that part of the value.

Core Value III. My work demonstrates that I rhetorically analyzed the purpose, audience, and contexts of my own writing and other texts and visual arguments.

In terms of this value I demonstrated it with my Rebuttal Rewrite, however I believe I didn’t fully achieve the core value. I believe my Rebuttal Rewrite could’ve had more revisions, replaced some content, added some more information and take out some words in order to fully achieve this goal. My Rebuttal Rewrite did display enough to show that I was able to demonstrate this goal by capturing the audience of those who opposed my thesis and gave a good amount of contexts that help shape my writing.

Core Value IV: My work demonstrates that I have met the expectations of academic writing by locating, evaluating, and incorporating illustrations and evidence to support my own ideas and interpretations.

When taking a look at my work and I would make the claim that I have demonstrated this value. My Definition and Rebuttal Rewrites have proven that I have achieved this value. Both are good examples of this value because of how each display my own idea and structure that I intended for the work while still incorporating solid evidence from a good amount of sources.

Core Value V. My work demonstrates that I respect my ethical responsibility to represent complex ideas fairly and to the sources of my information with appropriate citation. 

When it comes to this value, my  Definition Rewrite provides a great example of my ability to capture the core value, however I didn’t fulfill the core value. I thoroughly achieve parts of the value reaching most of the dimensions of writing providing a good amount of evidence from revealing how my Definition Rewrite, displayed good grammar structure, portrayed my information to support my thesis and I was able to display meaning to the context of my work.

Bibliography — socrateslee13

Blannelberry, S.H. “New Jersey Slaps Felony Gun Charge on Another Law-Abiding Citizen – GunsAmerica Digest.” GunsAmerica Digest. Fox, 18 Feb. 2016. Web. 07 Dec. 2016. New Jersey Felony Gun Charge

Background: : This source speaks about case where an officer was a victim of a car crash but because of the laws in the state the incident occurred the officer was charged with possession of a firearm.

How I Used It: I used this article in my Definition Argument because the purpose of this would be to show how people have been wrongfully convicted of gun related crimes. Especially when people switch from states with fewer gun restrictions to states with stricter gun restrictions, revealing how common this mishap truly is.

“Gun Control – ProCon.org.” ProConorg Headlines. Pro Con, 28 June 2016. Web. 07 Dec. 2016. Gun Control Pros & Cons.

Background: This article discusses the pros and cons about gun control laws. The article provides pros as to support gun control laws and the cons to go against control laws. The article focuses on each of the 15 pros and cons for gun control by giving an depth reasoning with a good amount of support. 

How I Used It: I used this in my Definition Argument to support my thesis by focusing more about the pros the article provided. By using the pros, the article provided I was able to supply the audience with a wide variety of reasons to back up my thesis. In doing so, I was able to cover a lot more of evidence revolving my thesis instead of just trying to make a little amount of information cover a lot of ground.

Dube, Arindrajit. “Cross-Border Spillover: U.S. Gun Laws and Violence in Mexico | American Political Science Review | Cambridge Core.” Cambridge Core. American Political Science Association, 10 July 2013. Web. 08 Dec. 2016. Cross Over border gun laws and violence between U.S. and Mexico.

Background: This article from American Political Science Association  focuses on the different occasion where U.S. and Mexico have been related with each other in terms of cross border gun laws and violence. The article mentions how Mexico imports through the states that are located in the south of the U.S.

How I Used It: This article was able to support my thesis because the focal point of the article is to show the cross border incidents that occur between U.S. and Mexico. With this article it furthered one point that I stated during my work which was that neighboring states need to compromise in order to better each other and prevent gun violence. Even though U.S. and Mexico are not states the concept still remains because if they were to compromise it could prevent gun violence and stop guns being imported into the U.S. from Mexico.

Goldberg, Jeffery. “The Case for More Guns (and More Gun Control).” The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, Dec. 2012. Web. 10 Dec. 2016. More Guns More Gun Control.

Background: This article discusses how allowing more guns to citizens would continue what has already begun in terms of gun homicide rates. The article provides evidence about how allowing possession of firearms will keep gun homicide rates remain at the lowest it has ever been

How I Used It: This article was crucial in my Rebuttal Argument because it brought up a numerous of points to refute my thesis. I was able to use this article and name a lot of different points with a good amount of evidence that went against my thesis. This article was very helpful because of this and it made my Rebuttal Argument very strong.

Ludwig, Jens. “Concealed-gun-carrying Laws and Violent Crime: Evidence from State Panel Data ☆.” Concealed-gun-carrying Laws and Violent Crime: Evidence from State Panel Data. ScienceDirect, 21 Nov. 1998. Web. 08 Dec. 2016. Concealed gun carrying laws.

Background: This article is a book that I was able to discover the online version and it gives a lengthy description about concealed gun carrying laws and the effects they have had such as decreasing the crime rate, homicide rate.

How I Used It: I used this article because of the amount of the information it possessed. The main purpose this article served for me was for the definition about concealed gun carrying laws and helping understand that law and the effects of this law better.

Miller, Joshua Rhett. “‘Honest Mistake’ Leads to Philly Mother Facing Three Years on Gun Charge.” Fox News. FOX News Network, 16 July 2014. Web. 08 Dec. 2016. Honest Mistake, Mother gets charged 3 years.

Background: This article from Fox News describes how a mother has been charged almost three years for a gun charge when she mistakenly crossed over from Pennsylvania to New Jersey. Originally the mother was pulled over for a traffic violation but once she was pulled over that’s when she was charged with gun related charges and the article went on speaking about this incident.

How I Used It: This article was able to provide evidence that even though we have states recognizing permits from other states, it still needs to improve and this wrongful conviction should not occur.

Perry, Mark J. “Chart of the Day: More Guns, Less Gun Violence between 1993 and 2013.” The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 4 Dec. 2015. Web. 10 Dec. 2016. More Guns Less gun violence between 1993 and 2013.

Background: This article mainly focused on graphs comparing the numbers and revealing how more guns has resulted in less violence and a decrease in homicide rates. This article informs the audience other factors that have affected the decrease of homicide rates and less violence.

How I Used It: This article was able to help me discover a good amount of points that fit perfectly with my Rebuttal Argument. Providing points that not  only opposed my thesis but gave a thorough explanation of how this information was valid and correct.

PÉrez-peÑa, Richard. “Gun Control Explained.” The New York Times. The New York Times, 06 Oct. 2015. Web. 07 Dec. 2016. Gun Control Explained.

Background: This article from The New York Times has helped me understand the definition of gun control, and everything involving gun control such as the state gun control is in at the moment and what law authorities say about gun control and arguments against gun control.

How I Used It: This article gave me a definition for gun control as well as helping me in a crucial way with my Definition Argument because it gave me a definition that covered  a good amount of points putting my thesis in a good position. This article was important because of how the use of this article was a good starting point for my work.

Soften, Kim. “To Reduce Suicides, Look at Guns.” The Washington Post. WP Company, 13 July 2013. Web. 08 Dec. 2016. To Reduce Suicide, Look at Guns.

Background: This article focuses mainly on how guns are the reason suicide rates are where they are because the article proposes in order to reduce suicide rates, people must get rid of or lower the amount of available guns.

How I Used It: This article helped me discover the effects of guns and for some incidents such as suicides the number of gun related suicides compared to non gun related gun suicide. The comparison revealed how guns are the leading cause of suicides by an alarming number.

Star, Tony Cook The Indianapolis. “Is Indiana to Blame for Chicago’s Gun Violence?” USA Today. Gannett Satellite Information Network, 28 Oct. 2015. Web. 07 Dec. 2016. Indiana to Blame for Chicago Gun Violence.

Background: This article from USA Today informs the audience about how President Obama believes that neighboring states with lower gun restrictions have been importing guns into stricter gun states.

How I Used It: This article helped me provide support for my thesis, as well as my Definition Argument and give me insight to points that a further looked into. By reading this article I was able to look for similar articles that mainly focused on points that were mentioned within this article.

Rebuttal Rewrite — socrateslee13

My Worthy Opponent is Wrong

People have debated what the root of the problem is behind gun related crimes, wither the gun control laws have been too strict or have they been too loose. In doing some research, I discovered some articles that stated how gun control laws have not been the problem, rather the factors around gun control laws are why gun related crimes still occur. Some of these factors would include the location of the states, as well as the guns that are involved in the crimes that are being committed. Furthermore, there are articles were people make the claim that how the idea that gun control is the problem is considerably appalling because the cause is other factors than gun control itself.

People have proposed that over the years gun homicide has decreased. This comparison was the back bone for Mark J Perry’s article, “Chart of the day: More guns, less gun violence between 1993 and 2013” Perry provides the audience with a graph comparing guns per person and gun homicide rate. As the graph goes from the 90s to the 2000s the guns per person increases while the homicide rate has depleted. Perry uses another graph using the number of total firearms and gun homicide rates to inform the audience that this is not a mere coincidence that there is a correlation between possessing more guns and gun homicide. The reasoning behind this correlation is because states have recognized licenses and permits for firearms. Due to states acknowledging people’s licenses for firearms, it has allowed people to feel more secure and comfortable with possessing a firearm. They are able to feel more secure because now that more and more states are recognizing licenses from other states. Now people won’t have to worry about being charged with possession of firearms or being wrongfully convicted with any gun related charges.

Additional factors that Perry mentions in his article, “Chart of the day: More guns, less gun violence between 1993 and 2013” are that more police officers on the beat better making greater use of computers, a decline in alcohol consumption, less lead exposure and an improving an economy. In terms of the effects of police officers improving and using computers more wisely, it has been revealed that police officers have a good amount of technology targeted to  track down crimes and find the criminal. Certain pieces of technology are specifically made for gun related crimes such has whenever a gun shot is fired the police are notified as soon as the shot goes of. The technology they notifies the police because the device is set to a certain frequency to only hear gun shots and once they pick up a gun shot in the area it pin points that area and relays this information back to the police station.

Another technology that helps aid police officers is their mobile digital communicator because it has allowed officers to keep in contact with not only each other but the station as well. This is very useful because it allows officers to call for back up or if an incident should arise the station could contact a nearby officer and inform to get to the crime scene sooner. This would decrease gun homicides because of this technology it reduces the amount of time for homicides to occur because the sooner the police officers can get to the scene and control the situation and prevent anyone from dying the less time there is for a gun homicide to occur. A decline in alcohol impacts the gun homicides as well because if people are intoxicated a variety of things could happen when they are in possession of a firearm such as an accidental shooting or altercations. People tend to much more clumsy and careless when drinking and if someone were to obtain a firearm it is much more possible an accidental shooting would arise then if they were sober because of the clumsy and carelessness people tend to show. Less lead exposure has effected the gun homicide because when looking back at the ammunition the police officers used it was said they tended to use more bullets containing lead. Lead poisoning has killed numerous people and when police officers used bullets with lead in them, even if someone were to survive the bullet shot the wound with lead within it would result in their death. By switching to non lead ammunition there is less lead exposure and as a result less deaths when people are shot by police.

Some consider issuing more guns to the community would increase the gun rate, however similarly to Perry’s article, Jeffery Goldberg supports supplying more guns. In Jeffery Goldberg’s article, “The Case For More Guns (and More Gun Control)” he claims that concealed carry permit holders commit crimes at a lower rate than the general population. Furthermore, Goldberg reveals that in today’s society the number of concealed carry permits is at its highest while the homicide rate is at the lowest it’s ever been in four decades. The reason behind why carrying a firearm impacts the homicide rate is because the chain reaction law abiding citizens hold with carry firearms. The chain reaction is because people can deter criminals by making it riskier for people to commit crimes, and one way to make it riskier is to create the impression among the criminal population that the law abiding citizen they want to target may have a gun. The deeper meaning to the chain reaction is that in order to prevent criminals from being criminals is to make it riskier for them to commit these crimes. By granting citizens to carry firearms, who intend to use them for the right reasons such as stopping a criminal then that would make the criminal reconsider if they want to commit the crime when the citizens who are at the scene of the crime are armed as well. Another reasoning for issuing more guns, at for self defense purposes. In particular situations such as robberies and shootings were guns are commonly used, if the victims were able to carry firearms they would be able to protect themselves. The victims would not be stuck between trying to hide behind a counter or doing whatever the criminal says in order to stay a live. By arming themselves, the victims would be able to defend themselves against the criminals.

Works Cited

Perry, Mark J. “Chart of the Day: More Guns, Less Gun Violence between 1993 and 2013.” The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, 4 Dec. 2015. Web. 10 Dec. 2016. More Guns Less Gun Violence between 1993 and 2013.

Goldberg, Jeffery. “The Case for More Guns (and More Gun Control).” The Atlantic. Atlantic Media Company, Dec. 2012. Web. 10 Dec. 2016. More Guns More Gun Control.

 

reflective-wvuhockey

Core Value I. My work demonstrates that I used a variety of social and interactive practices that involve recursive stages of exploration, discovery, conceptualization, and development.

The style of this course was very new to me. New, but I loved it. The way that we could go back and edit our work after you gave us feedback was more than helpful. Needless to say, your feedback was always harsh and honest. To some I could imagine it to be quite discouraging but to me, I found it helpful. Your honesty made me think about my writing much more. In other classes, you do your work to get a grade, while in here, you do the work to not get torn apart by your grading which makes you put in much more effort. Don’t take this the wrong way, I enjoyed it. Like in my 03 PDST claim you commented about how I chose the wrong way to write about this. You were rough on me but I took what you said and now I know better.

Core Value II. My work demonstrates that I placed texts into conversation with one another to create meaning by synthesizing ideas from various discourse communities. 

The way that you grade the material is a great way for me to implement this task. I was able to take your comments and effectively make the necessary changes. This teaches me to proof read my assignments and get them perfect before grading. This also gives me a good understanding of what you are looking for with every assignment. Another great tool is how I am able to see other students work. This helps me with formatting and brainstorms new ideas to implement into my writing. It really opens up my mind when I get stuck. For example, in my definition argument assignment, you commented and explained how my citations were wrong so I was able to go back and correct them!

Core Value III. My work demonstrates that I rhetorically analyzed the purpose, audience, and contexts of my own writing and other texts and visual arguments.

As stated before, the fact that other people can view my work is quite intimidating. With this being said, I tend to put more effort into my work when I know that others are able to view it as a resource. I wouldn’t want to do my assignment incorrectly and have someone else try and follow my same steps. It is one thing if my grade is bad but if someone else grade is impacted by me, thats a whole different story. The way the class is set up keeps me all around more motivated than other classes. In the Stone money assignment there were many ways to interpret the story so it was nice to see the way that others thought about money along with my original thoughts.

Core Value IV: My work demonstrates that I have met the expectations of academic writing by locating, evaluating, and incorporating illustrations and evidence to support my own ideas and interpretations.

Many of the assignments gave me a chance to really express what I had on my mind. My favorite thing about this class is that I get to write about things that are in my mind but never get the chance to express. Sometimes other students’ blog posts’ give me some structure on how I should write the things that I am thinking about. I love how if Im not sure how to structure a certain assignment, I can get some ideas from others. Then I can put my ideas into that structure to make the process much easier. It also helps me learn new writing styles other than my own. For example, the visual rewrite assignment, at first I formatted the assignment incorrectly. After I completed my writing, I noticed that my formatting was wrong so I was able to go back and format it properly.

Core Value V. My work demonstrates that I respect my ethical responsibility to represent complex ideas fairly and to the sources of my information with appropriate citation. 

For the most part, I believe that I am a fairly detailed writer. I am far from perfect so researching certain topics and putting that information into my writing is a very helpful tool to add some interesting knowledge. I have learned to properly cite everything that i get from other sources other than myself. I enjoy tying my thoughts in with a nice hard fact from a reputable source. It gives my thoughts more concrete evidence given that I am not a reputable source in certain areas. A nice twist to this course was the missing dollar assignment. It made you think about a problem and then we had to write about it. It made me think about more than just composition and writing. It was a very clever way to open up our minds.

Bibliography – anonymous

 1.  Egan, Timothy. “Old, Ailing and Finally a Burden Abandoned.” The New York Times. The New York Times, 25 Mar. 1992. Web. 07 Dec. 2016.

Background: This article highlights the side of Alzheimer’s that doesn’t come to mind for most. When the struggle of taking care of a family member with AD becomes too much many resort to this.

How I used it: I used this article to really bring my thesis to a solid foundation. Within this article I was able to draw out personal stories that really hit home as to just how serious this disease is.

2. “Alzheimer’s Disease & Dementia.” Alzheimer’s Disease & Dementia. N.p., 07 Dec. 2016. Web. 07 Dec. 2016.

Background: Not many people even know the basics of Alzheimer’s. Establishing this website is crucial for not only my reader and I but it also helps the world.

How I used it: This was a website post that gave me the basic foundation I needed to accurately describe the fundamentals of what Alzheimer’s is and how it effects your body.

3. “Stages of Alzheimer’s & Symptoms.” Stages of Alzheimer’s & Symptoms. N.p., n.d. Web. 07 Dec. 2016.

Background: This web article addressed in more detail the steps and stages Alzheimer’s can take during its progression.

How I used it: I used this piece of material to further my readers understanding on AD.

4. Rebecca Ley for the Daily Mail. “Why DO so Many Children Abandon Parents in Their Darkest Hour?” Daily Mail Online. Associated Newspapers, 28 May 2014. Web. 13 Dec. 2016.

Background: This was an article that I needed to use to touch on the emotional side of the reader. I reached out to get some empathy from my reader and give my paper a humanistic approach.

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 5. Mayo Clinic Staff Print. “Alzheimer’s Disease.” Treatment – Alzheimer’s Disease. N.p., 22 Dec. 2015. Web. 13 Dec. 2016.

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6. “Alzheimer’s Statistics.” Alzheimers.net. N.p., n.d. Web. 13 Dec. 2016.

Background: This was purely a website to provide my research paper with legitimate statistics regarding AD in modern America.

How I used it: I used these statistics to further my point in my sub-topic of why AD sufferers need programs that provide them with advanced care and treatment. Some statistics such as 1 in 9 Americans over the age of 65 have some form of dementia was staggering to hear.

 7. “Midlife Vascular Risk Factors and Alzheimer’s Disease in Later Life: Longitudinal, Population Based Study.” Midlife Vascular Risk Factors and Alzheimer’s Disease in Later Life. N.p., n.d. Web. 13 Dec. 2016.

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8. “Learning How Little We Know About the Brain.” The NewYork Times. N.p., n.d. Web. 14 Dec. 2016.

Background: This article highlighted just how little we really know about the thing that controls our every thought emotion or feeling. The brain is said to be less explored than even space, with this much room for research its hard to say we will ever find a cure.

How I used it: I used it to expose the truth that Alzheimer’s is a disease that effects the brain, the most complex organ we have, and a cure will take years and years of work. I counterintuitively used this argument to actually help aid my position that patients with AD need treatments that are available now.

Rebuttal Rewrite-Dublin517

Slut Shaming through the Internet

Using the internet, unfortunately, comes with certain levels of harassment, and women tend to experience a specific type of harassment. Slut-shaming, targets women specifically, it typically insults their physical appearance, sexuality, and sexual conduct. Through the ease of user-friendly websites, sex-centric-insults can be hurled at whim by the “trolls” that get pleasure from tearing down a women’s self-esteem. It’s argued that due to the over-abundance of slut shaming occurring through social media, women would be scared to be free and sexual. However, women are now more than ever overcoming slut shaming and taking control of their bodies. In fact through the connectivity of social media and the internet women have come together to overcome and destroy slut shaming, and liberate themselves sexually.

Women do not get to experience the same sexual freedoms that men do. That is the entire pretext for slut-shaming, as Leora Tanenbaum of the Huffington Post puts it, “Slut-shaming is sexist because only girls and women are called to task for their sexuality, whether real or imagined; boys and men are congratulated for the exact same behavior. This is the essence of the sexual double standard: Boys will be boys, and girls will be sluts.” Slut shaming occurs though Twitter, Instagram, Facebook, and even Snapchat. Using lewd names, posting inappropriate pictures, and making inferences based on the grounds of a woman’s sexual nature are all examples of slut-shaming. With all of these activities running rampant on the internet, women face a lot of scrutiny and a cute Instagram post with friends on the beach turns into a witch hunt over sexual misconduct.

The argument here is not that slut shaming has been eradicated through social media, in fact it is quite the opposite. The congregation of women (and men) tired of seeing post after post filled with condemning ideals has caused people to actively use social media to put a stop to slut shaming. These groups of individuals have been able to use the connectivity that comes with the internet to be able to constitute a clear and united voice with many goals. To spread acceptance, encourage people to become comfortable with themselves, and stop slut shaming, among other things. The website, Stopslut.org, is aimed at not only stopping slut shaming but also rape culture as a whole “Using a revolutionary play, a book and storytelling-based activism workshops, StopSlut aims to transform rape culture into a culture of CARE– communication, accountability, respect and empathy”. Through this website that is only aimed against slut shimg, women can connect and bond and therefore combat issues they face in their lives.

While the internet can come together and tear up a famous woman for her “slutty outfit” at an awards show, it can also see comments that disapprove of the hate speech. Slut shaming is not a new concept, shunning women for being sexual has been commonplace for centuries. Lewis Mark Webb sums it up best when he says (in reference to comparing slut shaming historically to modern day)  “the Roman Republic with recent cases on the Internet, and I maintain that the focus of this slut-shaming, namely sexual virtue, has remained the same over time, but that the unregulated nature of the Internet has increased its scope and impact.” The magnitude seen through the internet is rather unique; people are not afraid to say inappropriate things online because there are no consequences for it.  That is, until now. People are getting tired of hearing misogynistic and dated thoughts one after the other and the convenience of anonymity has also given them the ability to type right back. The internet has started to change from a place where slut shaming can bloom, into a battlefield where intellectual logic is used to combat the backwards rhetoric that has overstayed its welcome.

Works Cited

 

Menza, Kaitlin. “Teen Girls Take a Stand Against Slut Shaming: What It Is, and Why You Should Care – StopSlut.” StopSlut Teen Girls Take a Stand Against Slut Shaming What It Is and Why You Should Care Comments. N.p., 02 June 2015. Web.

 Tanenbaum, Leora. “The Truth About Slut-Shaming.” The Huffington Post. TheHuffingtonPost.com, 15 Apr. 2015. Web.           

Webb, Lewis Mark. “Shame Transfigured: Slut-shaming from Rome to Cyberspace | Webb | First Monday.” Shame Transfigured: Slut-shaming from Rome to Cyberspace | Webb | First Monday. N.p., 6 Apr. 2015. Web.

Reflective – thathawkman

Core Value I. My work demonstrates that I used a variety of social and interactive practices that involve recursive stages of exploration, discovery, conceptualization, and development.

When I first made the proposal + 5, I based my article on the concept of millennials. I then found the 5 articles that I was planning to use for my eventual research paper. I analyzed the sources and conceptualized how I would have fit the sources in my essay. However, I eventually switched my thesis completely so I had to repeat the same steps to help for my actual research paper. Repeating the same step showed me how the essays can be constructed and molded by the information and citations that you make and how the more modifications that is added, the more the essay can grow and adapt. I started to appreciate the repeated process of finding more and more information to then add on to a concept of an idea that can easily change.

Core Value II. My work demonstrates that I placed texts into conversation with one another to create meaning by synthesizing ideas from various discourse communities. 

In my Visual Rewrite, I analyzed a 30-second ad of a little boy who was attempting to eat food. However, as I described the ad frame by frame, I started to talk to other people to see what they believed certain details represented different claims for different people. From there, used the different ideas that each idea can imply and used to completely analyze a situation. For example, the ad displayed numerous pictures on a fridge. However, once I started to analyze each picture as a separate claim, I was able to deduce much more information than I originally thought I would. Two of the most notable papers was a family drawing, which lacked a large male figure and showed a lady in all blue, and a Diploma. With only these two articles of paper and examining them as claims, I deduced that the father left the household and forced the mother who was a nurse to constantly work to fill a financial gap.

Core Value III. My work demonstrates that I rhetorically analyzed the purpose, audience, and contexts of my own writing and other texts and visual arguments.

In the Stone Money Rewrite, I originally wrote the analyzation of the podcast and numerous articles of the different forms of money as a very formal paper as I was used to that in my former classes. However, the lessons on how to entice the reader to read more instead of trying to simply relay information changed my view on how to write the paper. From attempting to add details in the lecture of Cows and Chips, I started to imagine my language in a way so that the reader can easily understand. I then changed my very abstract descriptions of money to easy to understand representations. This was one of the first times I considered the audience of my writing

Core Value IV: My work demonstrates that I have met the expectations of academic writing by locating, evaluating, and incorporating illustrations and evidence to support my own ideas and interpretations.

In my Causal Rewrite, I viewed many different articles that made many different claims of why the work environment for scientists is  causing issues. I started to understand the situations and constrictions each claim was attempting to make and I combined the separate claims together to make a causal chain that utilizes claims such as the scientists are forced to publish what will make them money, and connect that with the issue of businesses can influence with money and how the two ideologies became a perfect segway for each other.

Core Value V. My work demonstrates that I respect my ethical responsibility to represent complex ideas fairly and to the sources of my information with appropriate citation. 

In my Research Position Paper, I utilized many different studies and controversies to help prove my point. I supplied the information and background that was needed to help understand the pretexts of a situation and why the result of the situation mattered. Since scientific studies are very based on what the study attempted to find, its results, and the actual effect it had. I attempted to use and supply with all the knowledge of my studies and then explain what resulted afterward. For example, one of my studies was showing how a retest of already published studies can differ. Instead of only saying the result, I took the entire context of what the study did in order to explain the source as best as possible.

 

Annotated Bibliography- yankeeskid6

  1. Bandler, Aaron. “5 Statistics You Need To Know About Cops Killing Blacks.”Daily Wire. N.p., 07 July 2016. Web. 07 Dec. 2016.

Background: This article from The Daily Wire mostly discusses the common misconceptions with police officers and black civilians. The 5 points that are presented have to do with black civilians, Hispanic civilians, white/black/Hispanic cops as well as death rate and crime. The author proves with accurate statistics his argument on black hate crime.

How I Used It: I used this article to show case that what we see on the media isn’t the whole truth. I used statistics to show that in fact black civilians aren’t getting shot as much as we are led to believe and that cops are being targeted as well.

  1. “Is Biased Media Coverage of Police Shootings of Blacks Creating a False Narrative of an Epidemic of White Racist Cops Murdering Innocent Blacks?” Is Biased Media Coverage of Police Shootings of Blacks Creating a False Narrative of an Epidemic of White Racist Cops Murdering Innocent Blacks? – Quora. N.p., n.d. Web. 07 Dec. 2016.

Background: This article talks about the media and its role in coverage of racist white cops and how they heighten the issue. It talks bout biased media especially African American run media. Finally, it brings up a new concept of justified arrests or killings even from technically innocent people. The article proves that killings by officers in certain situations have been going on for years but have been recently heightened by the news media to direct it in a racism way. It also proves that even with  low population more than half the officers killed have been by African Americans and that most black kills have been on murders and rapists.

How I Used It:  I used this article to back up my concept of media coverage blinding us from the real truth. I also used the article to help explain why people get shot and that it isn’t just “innocent” all the time.

  1. “Philando Castile Shooting: What Happened When Filming Stopped?”CNN. Cable News Network, n.d. Web. 07 Dec. 2016.

Background: This article talks about 2 cases in which police are being scrutinized for using excessive force, that is the Sterling case as well as the Castile case. The article talks about what happened after the Castile case when the cameras cut and later that night. We also hear the side of the officers in the Sterling case.

How I Used It: The chose this article because it proves that cops do whatever they can to save victims and help families. Once the cameras cut the officers performed CPR on the victim and tried to save his life, and later that night comforted the family and daughter. This shows they aren’t animals. It also expresses the biggest concern in all of these cases, was the victim truly innocent. It proves in the Sterling case the officers tried many different ways to take him down, but he gave no response and reached for a gun they had no choice but to fire.

  1. “Media & Racism.”Media & Racism. N.p., n.d. Web. 07 Dec. 2016.

Background: This article chronicles the case of Zachory Hammond an unarmed white male that was shot to death by police officers.

How I Used It: The main reason I chose this article is to show that a case like that of Hammond isn’t publicized enough because it doesn’t fit the racial standard. Many people don’t know about it because it’s a white death. It is easy to create tension and stir things up if the victim is of a different race. Therefore, it’s just another way of how the media manipulates the public into thinking just African Americans are being killed by officers.

  1. “Police Shootings and Race.”The Washington Post. WP Company, n.d. Web. 07 Dec. 2016.

Background: Article gives substantial statistics of police shootings and racial involvement as well as the crime rate of races that are being killed.

How I Used It: I used this article to help argue that measurements should be made off of crime rate rather than race because crime rate is the deciding factor to where and how many officers are stationed in certain places Statistics show that most crime ridden places are towns with large minority classes. This helped me make my case that police aren’t trying to racially profile African Americans. It is not their fault they are stationed in crime ridden areas that happen to be mostly African American.

 

  1. Staff-, TNO. “New FBI Crime Figures Confirm: Black Towns Most Dangerous, White Areas Safest – The New Observer.”The New Observer. N.p., 04 Dec. 2014. Web. 07 Dec. 2016.

Background: This article gives us a lot of statistics about inner cities, crime rate, poverty and arrests. The article is from FBI records as well.

How I Used It: I used the statistics in the article to prove my point further that in fact minority neighborhoods have the highest crime rate and most arrests. I used it to once again show that officers are stationed there against their will and that they are there just to do their job. Finally, I used this article to showcase another problem that is a catalysts for the race tensions and that is the struggle of poverty.

  1. Definitions.com

Background: A website to get definitions of terms.

How I Used It: I used it to make sure I had the right definitions for the vast amount of terms I was using that I was not 100% familiar with.

  1. French, David. “The Numbers Are In: Black Lives Matter Is Wrong about Police.” National Review. National Review, 28 Jan. 2016. Web. 07 Nov. 2016.

Background: This article talks about Movements such as “Black Lives Matter” and how their reasons behind protesting are false. Also talks about how police use force mainly for protection or to protect others.

How I Used It: I used the article to back up my claim that these protesters are irrational and ill-informed. Also used some of the statistics to show how rare a police shooting on an unarmed victim really is.

9. http://www.pbs.org/race/000_About/002_04-background-03-08.htm

Background: Talks about poverty and where race lives in the inner city.

How I Used It: I used this to help prove my point that racism, and police brutality isn’t the only problem out there. Poverty is a huge reason why crime is committed just to stay alive. Helps prove my point that we as a society need to look at the larger picture to why things happen rather than pointing fingers and yelling.

  1. Bruer, Wesley. “Violent Crime Rising in US Cities, Study Finds.”CNN. Cable News Network, n.d. Web. 22 Nov. 2016.

Background: This article talks about crime rising in inner-cities for the past couple of years. Also talks about the African American communities struggle with crime and homicide.

How I Used It: Used the article to help me explain how dangerous the inner-cities are. Also to showcase how much crime actually goes on and how many people are killing each other. This helps justify the reasons behind such high arrests and shootings from cops.

Annotated Bibliography-Prof2020

 

Adherents.com. (n.d.). Retrieved December 01, 2016, from http://www.adherents.com/
Background: This page gives information on the number and kinds of religions around the world
How I Used It: I used it as a source for naming how many recognized religions exist

MailOnline, R. O. (2015, December 22). Religion has been causing conflicts for more than 2,000 years: Rather than binding ancient societies together, belief systems may have torn them apart in Mesoamerica. Retrieved December 01, 2016, from http://www.dailymail.co.uk/sciencetech/article-3370189/Religion-causing-conflicts-2-000-years-binding-ancient-societies-belief-systems-torn-apart-Mesoamerica.html
Background: The article offers some insight on the history of conflicts caused by religion.
How I Used It: I cited this website when specifying how long religious conflict had been prevalent in society.

Jefferson’s Letter to the Danbury BaptistsThe Final Letter, as Sent. (n.d.). Retrieved December 02, 2016, from https://www.loc.gov/loc/lcib/9806/danpre.html
Background: An online form of the library of congress
How I Used It: This is where I obtained a copy of Thomas Jefferson’s letter to the Danbury Baptist Church and used it as support when explaining the true meaning of the First Amendment.

Cain, C. (2016, May 09). Republicans Turn God Upside Down with Their Twisted Version of Religious Liberty. Retrieved December 01, 2016, from http://www.huffingtonpost.com/cody-cain/republicans-turn-god-upsi_b_9857402.html
Background: This article in the Huffington Post is written from the point of view that republicans have warped the meaning of religious freedom to best suit their needs.
How I Used It: This article gave various examples of what the concept of religious freedom is supposed to protect and the history of religious freedom in America.

Impact of 9/11 on Muslim Americans. (n.d.). Retrieved November 29, 2016, from http://www.soundvision.com/article/impact-of-911-on-muslim-americans
Background: This article was written to explain how Muslim Americans were affected by the events of 9/11.
How I Used It: It gave specific statistics on the number of muslims experiencing discrimination and abuse in the wake of the September 11 terrorist attacks and how those numbers have fluctuated.

Mission. (2016). Retrieved December 01, 2016, from https://www.tsa.gov/about/tsa-mission
Background: This website offers background on the inception and history of the TSA.
How I Used It: It explained why the TSA was created and what they’re mission is, which is to “Protect the nation’s transportation systems to ensure freedom of movement for people and commerce.”

After 9/11: ‘You no longer have rights’ – extract. (2011, September 02). Retrieved December 03, 2016, from https://www.theguardian.com/world/2011/sep/02/after-9-11-muslim-arab-american-stories
Background: This article tells the stories of three Muslim Americans who faced discrimination in the wake of 9/11.
How I Used It: I explained the story of one of the people in the article to offer insight into the kind of discrimination faced by Muslim Americans across the country.

You are being redirected… (n.d.). Retrieved December 01, 2016, from http://archive.adl.org/religion_ps_2004/religion.html
Background: The covers the topic of what pertaining to religion is permissible in the school setting.
How I Used It: It explained the difference between teaching religion and teaching about religion as well as offer examples of what practices and conversations may or may not be allowed

Why Religion Should Not Be Taught in Public Schools – Olivia Godfrey. (2013, September 23). Retrieved December 02, 2016, from http://knightlyherald.com/why-religion-should-not-be-taught-in-public-schools-olivia-godfrey/
Background: This is an article written by Olivia Godfrey on why she believes religion should not be talked about in school.
How I Used It: This gave details and insight into why people would oppose my argument and helped me to rephrase my statements in a way that would allow me to address my audience in a more effective way.

Marzano, R. J. (n.d.). Chapter 2. A Brief History of Supervision and Evaluation. Retrieved December 03, 2016, from http://www.ascd.org/publications/books/110019/chapters/A-Brief-History-of-Supervision-and-Evaluation.aspx
Background: This article was written on the history of how teachers were appointed and evaluated.
How I Used It: The importance of properly evaluating teachers cannot be overstated. I used it in reference to the process by which teachers are evaluated to reassure people that the question of the integrity of our teachers does not require a complex answer.

Kilman, C. (2007, Fall). One Nation, Many Gods. Retrieved November 25, 2016, from http://www.tolerance.org/magazine/number-32-fall-2007/feature/one-nation-many-gods
Background: The website, aptly named Teaching Tolerance, tells the story of the Modesto School District, which I heavily reference in my paper.
How I Used It: The story explained in the article is central to my argument on why making a world religions course mandatory in public schools is not only important but also possible.

Rebuttal Rewrite – scarletthief

Race vs. Gender: Is There A Difference?

Self-identification of race encounters more opposition than self-identification of gender in America. We easily accepted Bruce Jenner identifying as a woman in 2015, but shunned Rachel Dolezal, a Caucasian-born woman, for identifying as African-American in that same year. Half of the Millennial generation acknowledge the idea that “gender is a spectrum” instead of just male or female; cities and public establishments have created no-gender ID cards and bathrooms to accommodate for all genders. So what makes choosing our race so different when they are ultimately very similar in regards to how gender and race develop and the advantages gained from claiming to be one or the other?

One example of a benefit to being a certain race would be earning college scholarships by identifying as African-American. Many see this as unfair to real African-Americans who are eligible to the scholarships – no scholarship means no education. Natasha Scott, daughter of an African-American father and an Asian mother, applied solely as an African American rather than African-American and Asian to increase her chances of being accepted into the University of Virginia. By claiming to be solely Black, more educational and most likely monetary opportunities were open to her. Gender similarly has it’s advantages despite the benefit not being monetary. A man who is transgender is able to enter an otherwise prohibited area – the women’s bathroom. Transgender and intersex individuals can also gain an advantage in activities like the Olympics. In Layden’s article, “Is It Fair for Caster Semenya to Compete against Women at the Rio Olympics?” he mentions how intersex competitors may dominate in women competitions because of how testosterone aids in certain muscular development.

Furthermore, race and gender in general are similar by how they develop in humans.  Children don’t begin classifying people into different races until around 10 years old. If the  children grew up in a politically liberal area, they believed in classifying people into racial categories as oppose to children who grew up in politically conservative areas who believed that categorizing races was wrong. The development of racial identity in children stems from the environment and the members of society surrounding them. An example would be Lacey Shwartz, mentioned in the article “Family Secret and Cultural Identity Revealed In ‘Little White Lie,'” who grew up with white Jewish parents in a white community. Despite her African American features, she identified herself as white because of the community and people she lived with. Similarly, in the documentary Somewhere Between, four Chinese-American girls were adopted by Caucasian parents and grew up thinking of themselves as white. They compared themselves to a banana that was yellow on the outside and white on the inside.

As mentioned, gender identity development is similar to the development of children’s racial identity because they both develop from their environment. Girls who grow up surrounded by princesses, dresses, dolls, and other female stereotypes are likely to identify themselves as female once they are old enough. If boys were surrounded by similar princesses, dresses, dolls, and such, they would also be likely to identify themselves as female if they weren’t told they were biologically males. Parents are encouraged to help their daughters or sons to develop a healthy gender identity by exposing their child to both genders’ activities, clothes, jobs, and to alternate gender roles such as male nurses or female firefighters. Gender identity in children develops through exposer to gender roles and activities in their community like racial identity.

However, self identifying race and self identifying gender have a major difference. When self identifying as a specific gender, people usually look like the gender they are identifying as. If a male identifies himself as female, he uses she, her, hers to describe himself and alters his appearance to appear female. In this case, the person matches his physical appearance. On the other hand, claiming one’s race isn’t as easy. Although a person can claim to be a race, their appearance may not match the claim. An example of this would be in Garcia-Navarro’s article “For Affirmative Action, Brazil Sets Up Controversial Boards To Determine Race” where 27-year-old Afro Brazilian Lucas Siquiera  was denied a Brazilian diplomatic position because the public and the government’s “race commission” considered him Caucasian based on his appearance. The main point in the article was that his claim did not match his appearance. Society isn’t confused when gender is claimed because the claim matches the looks, but race doesn’t always match the appearance of the person. The confusion with self identification of race makes it less accepted by society because the public can’t tell  if applicants  are the race they say they are if they don’t match the physical characteristics common to the race they identify as. In Natasha Scott’s situation, she claims to be purely African American in her college application and looks African American too. However, Massachusetts Democratic Senate Elizabeth Warren claims to be part Cherokee Indian and looks white. She, despite proof of her relations,  isn’t considered Native American by society because her appearance doesn’t match her Cherokee claim.

Works Cited

Garcia-Navarro, Lulu. “For Affirmative Action, Brazil Sets Up Controversial Boards To Determine Race.” NPR. NPR, 29 Sept. 2016. Web. 11 Dec. 2016.

“Gender Identity Development in Children.” HealthyChildren.org. American Academy of Pediatrics, 21 Nov. 2015. Web. 11 Dec. 2016.

Layden, Tim. “Is It Fair for Caster Semenya to Compete against Women at the Rio Olympics?” SI.com. Sports Illustrated, 11 Aug. 2016. Web. 11 Dec. 2016.

Markman, Art. “Categories, Essentialism, Race, and Culture.” Psychology Today. N.p., 27 Oct. 2009. Web. 11 Dec. 2016.

“Minority Rules: Who Gets To Claim Status As A Person Of Color?” NPR. 16 May 2012. Web. 31 October 2016.

Norris, Michele. “Family Secret And Cultural Identity Revealed In ‘Little White Lie’” NPR. NPR, 23 Mar. 2015. Web. 11 Dec. 2016.

“On College Forms a Question of Race, or Races, Can Perplex.” The New York Times. 13 June 2011. Web. 31 October 2016.

“Being Blackish: Race and Self-Identification.” The Huffington Post. TheHuffingtonPost.com, 23 June 2015. Web. 11 Dec. 2016.

Wong, Curtis M. “50 Percent Of Millennials Believe Gender Is A Spectrum, Fusion’s Massive Millennial Poll Finds.” The Huffington Post. TheHuffingtonPost.com, 2 Feb. 2016. Web. 11 Dec. 2016.