Author: childishharambe

Definition Argument–childishharambe

Definition Argument A08

 

Its so bad but yet so good.  Junk food is broadcasted everywhere it is as if we just can not get away from it.  It is even worse when it is your only option when you go to a sports game of any kinds concession stand starting anywhere from little league baseball games leading all the way up to the concession stands at a professional sports outing.  “Unlike school lunchrooms, which must meet USDA regulations, high school concession stands remain mostly exempt from government health intervention, which many groups fear would decrease concession stand sales and customer satisfaction. ” (Food&BrandLab, pg.1)  The reason this issue has never been resolved is because it is thought that sales would plummet.  Obesity has been in the most recent years a big problem which affects all ages, genders, and races.  Sports games make it easy to decide on getting a cheeseburger, candy, or a sugary soft drink or maybe all of the above.  Their job is to promote options which they can profit the most off of.  Its time we begin to demand immediate change and a call to action on the food being served at concession stands.

It is not bad enough that you cant watch television for ten minutes without having a Sprite commercial come on but it is also integrated into events such as Super Bowl halftime shows “Brought to you by Coca-Cola grab one today”.  I do not remember the last time I went to an Eagles game where I didn’t feel pressured into buying a beer, Pepsi, or a cheesesteak.  Since I bought one maybe my brother, or my sister might do the same thing or one up me and buy a large combo instead of the medium.  It is time we bite back at obesity and start fighting obesity.  Sparking change where eating junk food is a tradition and that would be at a concession stand located near you.

Works Cited

                            Laroche, Helena. “Concession Stand Makeovers: A Pilot Study of Offering Healthy Foods at High School Concession Stands.” Food and Brand Lab |. N.p., n.d. Web. 31 Oct. 2016.    

                                                               Laroche, Helena. “Concession Stand Makeover.” Food and Brand Lab |. N.p., n.d. Web. 31 Oct. 2016.                          

White Paper–childishharambe

Hypothesis- Professional sports should help against our ongoing fight with obesity.  Professional sporting events should offer and promote healthier alternatives to options such as hotdogs, and soft drinks etc.

When going to a Professional sports games most spectators anticipate having a cheat meal or choosing to eat something like a hot dog, pretzel, slice of pizza with a beer or a sugary soft drink.  By promoting deals for options like this professional sports concession stands are not stepping up trying to make a stand on an ongoing obesity issue America and other countries world wide face.

Benefits of healthy alternatives being added to menus:

  • Eating a diet rich in vegetables and fruits as part of an overall healthy diet may reduce risk for heart disease, including heart attack and stroke.
  • Eating a diet rich in some vegetables and fruits as part of an overall healthy diet may protect against certain types of cancers.
  • Eating vegetables and fruits rich in potassium as part of an overall healthy diet may lower blood pressure, and may also reduce the risk of developing kidney stones and help to decrease bone loss.
  • Healthier options will ultimately lower the increasingly high obesity rate.

Effects of Fast Food on the body:

  • Food is fuel for your body eating highly processed food in moderation is not necessarily that bad but in binge servings can be dangerous
  • Majority of fast food contains large amounts of carbohydrates, added sugar, unhealthy fats, and salt or sodium.
  • These foods are often high in calories yet offer little or no nutritional value.

Another rising issue is child obesity.  It seems that children would rather watch or play sports virtually compared to actually going outside or playing for a team.  If we begin to preach the importance of eating healthier not only at school, and home, but also when we don’t really want too like at a tailgate or when you are inside making a decision at a concession stand in a stadium at an event.

Working Hypothesis: Not only is prices at professional sports games highly priced, but also can negatively affect your health.

Working Hypothesis 2:  Adding cheaper, and healthier options to the menu of professional sports games can have a positive impact.

Cause/Effect:

  • If healthier options are added to concession stands more people might try to make eating healthier a habit.
  • Eating junk food is a bad tradition that people across the world look forward too.

Definition/Class

  • I need to better talk about how professional sporting events have ignored the worlds obesity issue.

3. I feel that my thesis, claims, and sources are strong.  With many new revisions and feedback I believe that my paper can be bolstered up nicely and my essay will be easily understood and my argument will be easily understood by my audience.

Safer Saws–childishharambe

 

1a. Manufacturers believe that blade guards work if people actually use them.  Majority of injuries are reported when the blade guard is removed.  A claim was made that in order to make many different kind of cuts the blade guard must be removed to perform the procedure.

1b. Manufacturers implement that the cost of the saw saw would be too costly.  By them adopting their technology the saws will prevent the statistic found above from happening.  The Power Tool Industry also known as (PTI) believes that safer technology is too expensive and they are worried more about now rather than later.

1c. A new form of technology which was created by a coalition of saw manufacturers produced SawStop.  Unfortunately it is not available to be purchased by the consumer on the market.  They argue that it is expensive and no one is going to want to pay for the saw because it is pricey and table saw owners pay enough as it is already.

2a. Customers or consumers who are familiar with the Safer Saws believe that this new technology will prevent tens of thousands of injuries every year.

2b. This quote is making the assumption that if the SawStop table saws were to be put on the market, it would give the SawStop an advantage due to the price.

2c. Ryszard Wec was injured on the job due to a saw that did not have the Safe Saw technology included with it.  His claim was that this injury could have been prevented if he had been using a Safe Saw or something similar to it.

2d. This claim is attempting to give off the impression that the SawStop table saws would crippled the other competitors leaving them bankrupted or losing money. Nonetheless this is not accurate.  The SafeSaws are not selling.

3a. “Current table safety standards have proven ineffective in protecting consumers.”

3b. This quote is declaring that they start looking out and trying to help the consumers.

3c. This is just an opinion from their standpoint.

3d. This claim mainly expressing its opinion without stating any real facts because they make claim about how it has been proven to be ineffective. However the quote doesn’t back the statement up with any results such as revealing test results from a survey that proves how ineffective they claim table safety standards to be.

4a.”Flesh detection and braking technology and user friendly blade guard(s) have been available for years. The flesh detection technology stops a blade instantly when its touched by human flesh. Wec says the technology could have prevented his 2007 injury from a Bosch miter saw.”

4b. This quote is stating that the cause of the injury could have been avoided because there is technology available to prevent this injury.

4c. This is a proposal claim because they are introducing the idea that the there is safer technology that could prevent injuries . However  Bosch doesn’t use that technology and continues to use a different technology even though the safer technology has been around for years. By doing so they are trying to convince everyone that this injury could  have been avoided because if they had the safer technology this injury would not have occurred.

4d. This claim is trying to convince everyone that the Bosch company is to blame for Wec’s injury. In doing so they introduce the idea that the there is alternative technology that could’ve avoided the injury. However rather then using that technology Bosch uses a technology that doesn’t stop the blade.

5a. “What you have is somebody who has invented a dramatic technology that seems to reduce virtually all the injuries associated with table saws.”

5b. This quote is declaring that someone has been able to reduce the number of injuries dealing with table saws by an enormous amount with their invention.

5c. This is a opinion claim because the quote states a claim, however they do not support their claim with any evidence.

5d. This quote is mainly stating an opinion that did not have any evidence to back up.

6a. “This week some of the nation’s biggest power tool companies sent their executives to Washington. They come to argue against tougher safety mandates for so-called table saws, the popular power tools with large open spinning blades.”

6b. This quote stating the biggest power tool companies of the nation sent a representative to give their opinions on why they are against tougher safety laws enforced.

6c. This is a a judgmental claim because the quote is focusing on how the nations biggest power tools are coming to go against safety mandates for table saws. By doing so the quote is mainly portraying the power tools coming as a negative instead of just stating facts.

6d. This quote is focusing more so on the power tools coming to oppose the safety mandates for table saws rather than remaining neutral and stating the facts of the situation. Furthermore at the end of the quote, is a even more judgemental claim because the quote focuses only one part of what the power tool’s table saws do instead of stating everything the saw can do. In doing so, they are leaving information out so the audience will only see one side of a story rather than understanding everything about the power tool’s table saws.

7a. “What the industry saw as a problem was not the amputations and injuries occurring on their product, but the advent of a technology that could prevent those injuries.That was the problem we created.”

7b. The quote is declaring with sarcasm that the industry had a problem with the manufacturers and him because they were capable of better handling the situation compared to the industry which could not.

7c. This an opinion claim because the industry he quote is not stating any supporting evidence to prove this is a true statement. Rather the claim is an opinion because this quote only was coming from one side.

7d. This quote mainly focuses on the opinion of Gass because the quote only states his opinion and does not state the opinion of the opposing side. Furthermore, the quote doesn’t have any evidence to support his claim to make his claim a valid one.

8a. “People who have lost fingers, hand, and arms to table saws have been devastated by their injuries. Those who who lack medical insurance suffer an unfathomable amount of pain, multiple surgeries, and a bill that they may never be able to pay so long as they they are unable to work.”

8b. This quote is stating the different injuries associated with table saws have gone through and talking about how the effects of the injuries have impacted their lives.

8c. This is a proposal quote because the quote is trying to bring awareness to the injuries people deal with when they are using regular table saws. In addition to the injuries, they list effects the injuries have on their lives.

8d. This quote goes through the injuries people have endured with table saws. Following the injuries these people have, the quote states how these injuries have affected the lives of their consumers.

Polio notes–childishharambe

Polio is almost going extinct.  Majority of people fear mass vaccination especially in poor countries mass vaccination is looked at as the governments way of infecting them to spread the disease.  We start to feel invulnerable to disease but this is what happens when we get lazy and by we I mean the American people choose not to get vaccinated.  Doctors are not trained to recognize measles.  Our generation is not ready to eradicate Polio.  It occurs as soon as we say to ourself “That will never happen to me or anyone I know”.  Instead of just getting vaccinated a counterintuitive solution to this disease is to just kill the people who have it and could be contagious.

Survival of the fittest right?  If people are that lazy and end up contracting Polio we should just exterminate them.  Everyone would get vaccinated and if they didn’t we should not try to treat them because that costs money and we could be led to believe that the reason they became infected is because they were lazy.  Lets just assume it is their fault unless they can prove otherwise.  This would put an end to the disease once and for all.  This would ensure that people go out and get vaccinated to avoid this repercussion.

I believe that Polio will be eradicated eventually aside to my rant which was just a ramble that I knew would start an argument.  I believe that without doing this if governments become more stable and vaccinations are taken seriously Polio will be eradicated not in the next twenty years but we will be closer to it.  This is only because countries like Pakistan have trouble getting people to perform vaccinations due to the Taliban fatally performing drive by shootings exterminating the people performing the procedure.

 

Visual Rhetoric

Visual Rewrite

0:01-0.04- The scene begins with the revealing of a mother walking with what seems to be her child in a stroller.  As she is strolling around she encounters a potential setback which was a large flight of stairs.  At the 0:04 mark you see a man come into the picture appearing to be helping the woman get the stroller up the stairs.

0:05-0:09- The story transitions to a stuffed plush toy being found by a man in what seems to be a mall like setting.  You then see a woman and what seems to be the same plush toy but in a different setting looking around to see if someone dropped it.  Both the man and woman with the toy end up handing the toy off to a child.  We don’t know who’s the toy was originally.

0:10-0:14- The ad resumes the initial scenario and of the others.  It seems like this woman receives help from others regularly and this wasn’t something out of the ordinary for her. She probably takes this route normally on a regular routine.  The scenarios all relate by people doing random acts of kindness.  It encourages others to go out of our way and do something nice for someone else.

0:15-0:19- At 0:15 the ad shifts focus and now we see the heartfelt faces of both children after receiving the plush toy, and the woman receiving help getting to the top of the staircase.  The diversity of each scenario is to represent people of all ages, gender and race need help.  You don’t have to know the person to do it either is the message it’s trying to send.

0:20-0:25-  A statistic pops up it really smacks the viewer in the face.  The statistic reads “1 in 5 kids struggle with hunger”.  This advertisement is trying to inspire others to do a kind act for someone else.

0:26-0:30-  The visuals appear to conclude but not before the final message pops up.  The message reads “Help end childhood hunger near you” which is brought to you by ‘Feeding America’.  It also gives a website to donate or find out more information on other ways how you can help.  The PSA redirects you to FeedingAmerica.org.

A05 Proposal+5–childishharambe

Food pricing at professional sports games are ridiculous.  How many times have you ever heard someone say “wow what a deal $20.00 for a cheesesteak a drink!” while being at a sporting event? Chances are you most likely haven’t.  For my research paper I would like to dive into the unspoken truth that pricing at concession stands are unreasonable and should be changed for not only to better the experience for the spectators but also to improve the profit margin made by the concession stands.

Your claim is that food concession prices at professional sporting games are . . . exploitive? . . . unconscionable? . . . unethical? . . . illegal? . . . bad business? . . .  Clarify this essential point and clean up your grammar. Pricing (ARE?) ridiculous? Pricing (ARE?) unreasonable? FOR not only to better? [The grammar probably won’t survive to the next rewrite, but the claims probably will.] Strengthen and clarify the claims.

Nowadays people tailgate not only just because it’s a fun little tradition fans of sports look forward to participating in every year but also to save some money.  Even if the prices of concession stands go down I still believe that people will continue to tailgate but tailgating is not the problem.  If prices go down people will potentially buy more while in the stadium especially when the price is right.  The fact of the matter is people already paid for a ticket, parking and possibly their significant other or children.  By reducing prices I believe that it will be a win-win for both the spectator and the stadium concession stands.

What’s your point here, Harambe? Has anybody ever identified tailgating as THE REASON prices for stadium concessions are so high? You write as if this were an obvious argument, but it’s not. You need to establish that others say it’s so. Otherwise, who are you arguing with?

http://www.sports-management-degrees.com/stadium/

The Essential Content of the Article:  This article gives percentages, and statistics of pricing for professional sports teams.  Using these statistics will give my reader a better understanding and facts to support my claim.

That’s not obvious from your summary. Do the statistics in the article demonstrate that stadium prices are 5 times as high as out-of-stadium prices for similar items? If so, that would be “the essential content of the article.” You haven’t said so. You haven’t said anything at all. You say the article has statistics: that is a meaningless statement. Are you understanding the difference?

What It Proves:  That pricing at professional sports games are high.  Using this source along with some of my others I can prove they could potentially increase their profit margin if they lower their prices.

Show me.

http://jse.sagepub.com/content/8/2/183.full.pdf+html

The Essential Content of the Article:  An article written by a scholar that I will use to support my claim that not only concession stand prices are high but a better look at the overall pricing for just the experience at a professional sports game is high.  This article shows a time lapse of over the years of when the increase occurs what happens to the overall demand.

You’re doing it again. Does the article demonstrate that every time prices go up, volume of sales decreases? That would be “the essential content of the article.” Later, you might be able to prove that the decrease in sales is enough to damage profits. That would be “the essential content” of the second article. Please notice that your statement avoids drawing ANY conclusion: “when the increase occurs what happens to the overall demand.” WHAT HAPPENS is the conclusion you need to draw.

What It Proves:  When a price increase occurs the demand seems to drop.  It shows that people either eat before or after but avoid eating at games because of the insane pricing.

This is more like it, but misses by one step. If it proves that demand drops, that’s useful. But if it also shows that profits fall, it REALLY proves something.

http://www.therichest.com/sports/top-10-most-expensive-concessions-at-sporting-events-2/

The Essential Content of the Article: This source shows how ridiculous some concession stands really are.  It gives the top most expensive items from professional sports teams concession stands currently still active today.

Well . . . you could find precisely similar data showing how much diners overpay for wine at fine restaurants, or for “bottle service” at clubs. Doing so, you might inadvertently prove the opposite of what you intend: that at exclusive venues, EVERY property owner will gouge customers as much as possible.

What it Proves: That concession stands are unreasonable and which stadiums take advantage of their fans the most.

That’s interesting and might give you a shot at a better paper. Do stadiums whose customers CAN afford to pay more take more advantage of those customers than stadiums whose customers CAN’T?

https://consumerist.com/2010/04/25/baseball-park-food-is-so-overpriced-do-i-still-have-to-tip/

The Essential Content of the Article: The title of this article speaks volumes for itself. Prices are outrageous and I am not the only one who feels this way.  This author goes into detail explaining his experience at a Major League Baseball game.

Not clear on the content here. Does it contain data on comparative prices relative to other entertainment venues (movie theaters? clubs? fine restaurants? live theater lobbies?)? Or is it just a screed from somebody who feels ripped?

What it Proves: That many others including myself feel that something needs to be done about pricing at professional sporting events.  People are questioning whether they even need to tip which should be a wake up call as this can affect not only their overall sales but the overall attitude of their employees.

Not quite feeling this. Tips have absolutely nothing to do with the cost of food items. I grant you, the markup does make 15% seem like a radical overpayment for service rendered. THAT is a reasonable argument for any sane person. Why do we tip based on the size of the bill instead of the amount of service rendered?

ELI5: Why are beer and alcoholic beverages so expensive at Sporting Events/Concerts?
byu/bslamb22 inexplainlikeimfive

The Essential Content of the Article: This explains from one author’s [opinion] [point of view] why prices are so high at sporting events and just in general.  That is because they know people are going to pay it.  This article gives me another opinion to use in my paper.

Not quite. “People are going to pay it” is never the answer. The answer is always: “Enough people will pay it so that we make a bigger profit than we would if we lowered the prices.”  THAT’S the claim you need to refute if you want to argue for change.

What It Proves: At least from this [authors] [author’s] understanding that pricing is high because they know people are going to pay it.  They know they  [can not] [cannot] bring their own stuff into the game and people are going to want food, or a snack and that these concession stands are in full control of the experience.

A04: Stone Money Rewrite–childishharambe

Forms of currency come in all different shapes and sizes but in the end they all have one thing in common. All forms of money with a few exceptions for example Gold. Money is used to buy, trade or even rent all types of different goods. As I got older I started to question the actual value of money. Besides the written number located on the paper or coin what makes the logic valid or verified? In my opinion American currency makes more sense than the bitcoin which is used by the Island of Yap. Money is a man made fallacy but it is important because it allows us to obtain things others do not. As malicious as this sounds it is true. You either have it or you don’t but I’ve never spent a dollar that I did not want back.

When comparing the gigantic boulders aka the bitcoin the Yep used to a dollar bill at first it did not make sense to me. This enormous piece of limestone the Yep is actually worth something? The more I read and researched I started to realize the Yep due to their culture are so different but also have some similarities for example such as bitcoins can not be carried around in a wallet like a bill or in your pocket like change. From my knowledge the people from the Island of Yap did not wheel barrow their boulders around and chip pieces off of it to negotiate for goods but that is what made sense to them. Trading a house for the boulder made complete sense to them. They gave these boulders or bitcoins value just as Brazil did with their form of made up money.

America would go on to piggy back on Brazil and replicated their form of currency. America did this using Brazil as it’s prime example to help the citizens better understand why this would be better for the American people and the rest of the world. America did this because at one point Brazil was nation wide a country that was looked at as one of the most stable economies. America fell victim to the idea and before you knew it Gold was a thing of the past. Yes, Gold is still worth money but no one is walking into the grocery store with Gold bricks exchanging for their groceries. The need to go mining for Gold or Limestone was a thing of the past. People began to move away from Gold and started adding more focus towards the much more easily acquired dollar bills. It seemed that the governments plan worked.

After acknowledging the fact I grew up with a much more different situation and system due to culture bitcoins started but still did not really make as much sense to me as the dollar bill did. Maybe to the people of Yap the idea of knowing you have money when you need it made sense to them but I would not be able to go out with my friends or on vacation knowing my money is sitting outside of my house and able to be stolen at any minute. That to me is the same as leaving your wallet at home with your doors unlocked in a bad neighborhood. Maybe the people of Yap had more respect for each other than we do as Americans but I can not go anywhere without knowing I have money on me. The fact remains without money you have nothing to show for your hard work. I like being able to buy stuff when I can.

Money is an illusion it to this day in a sense is not real. We just like Brazil made the dollar significant as it became the new Gold. It is in a better sense a figment of our imaginations. Money is real in the sense of it can be used to purchase good but money is only worth something because we made gave it value. Money made trading for goods easier and America like Brazil did this because it benefited technically only us. Money can be produced much easier than Gold. Instead of having to barter an item you maybe did not want too for something you needed money gave you the opportunity to exchange without having to do that. Money is important because people want they don’t have. Some blame the bible but I just believe when people don’t have something or are told they can’t the greed and jealousy begins to eat away and people begin to find ways to obtain it. Money in any culture is the reason for violence and evil.

Works Cited

Friedman, Milton. “The Island of Stone Money.” Diss. Hoover Institution, Stanford University , 1991.

Renaut, Anne . “The bubble bursts on e-currency Bitcoin.” Yahoo.com. 13 Apr. 2013. 30 Jan. 2015. <https://sg.news.yahoo.com/bubble-bursts-e-currency-bitcoin-064913387–finance.html&gt;.

“The Invention of Money.” 423: The Invention of Stone Money. This Is American Life, WBEZ. Chicago. 7 Jan. 2011. Web. 13 Sept. 2016.

Novus, Stella. “The Megalithic Money of Yap.” Ancient Origins. Ancient Origins, 04 Jan. 2013. Web. 12 Sept. 2016.

purposeful summaries– childishharambe

http://www.vanityfair.com/news/2015/05/ptsd-war-home-sebastian-junger

It seems counterintuitive to me that this article compared rape to PTSD.  Honestly I have never thought of it like that being a former veteran majority of this article was dead on right.  This article claimed that rape was more traumatizing but less harder to recover from.  War is like a drug because once you get that first high of being in a combat zone it kinda never goes away you just in a sense come down from it with time.  I believe combat is both more traumatizing than rape but that is only based off my opinion using my own experiences.

 

http://www.huffingtonpost.com/raymmar-tirado/is-is-time-to-say-yes-to-_b_6110718.html

It seems counterintuitive to me that this article asked the world a simple question “Is it time to legalize steroids in professional sports?”  Steroids are performance enhancing drugs also known as PED’s.  Although critics may say that it is cheating I believe it helps good athletes become great.  This article mentions well known for getting caught using a PED the great Mr. Alex Rodriguez.  This article asks do we even care anymore?  In my opinion no.  Critics say it’s cheating but if everyone did it myself along with the author don’t think that would really be the case.  It would make the sport a lot more competitive and the author of this article feels the same way.

 

https://ballotpedia.org/California_Proposition_64,_Marijuana_Legalization_(2016)

It seems counterintuitive a state that legalized medical marijuana already now wants to piggy back on Colorado and make marijuana legal for recreational use.  Who are they kidding it pretty much is already legal down there everyone knows California is known for its potent marijuana.  This is mentioned in various types of music and celebrities endorse it.  This article is a proposition.  It goes on to explain if legalized pretty much what would happen and how cannabis would be handled.  Marijuana is a popular drug among younger people but even with older people and I believe that eventually more than half of the United States will legalize recreational marijuana usage to the uproar.  This could help be an end to the War on Drugs.

 

 

Moving Image– childishharambe

Visual Analysis

0:01-0.04- The scene begins with showing a mother walking with her child in a stroller.  As she is strolling around she encounters a potential setback which was a large flight of stairs.  At the 0:04 mark you see a man come into the picture appearing to be helping the woman get the stroller up the stairs.

0:05-0:09- The story transitions to a stuffed plush toy being found by a man in what seems to be a mall like setting.  You then see a woman and what seems to be the same plush toy but in a different setting looking around to see if someone dropped it.  Both the man and woman with the toy end up handing the toy off to a child.  We don’t know who’s the toy was originally.

0:10-0:14- The ad resumes the initial scenario  and of the others.  It seems like this woman receives help from others regularly and this wasn’t something out of the ordinary for her.  This might portray her taking this trip often if not everyday.  The scenarios all relate by people receiving gifts or kind gestures from others.

0:15-0:19- At 0:15 the ad shifts focus and now we see the outcome of the children after receiving the plush toy, and the woman receiving help getting to the top of the staircase.  The diversity of each scenario is to represent people of all ages, gender and race need help. Whether you know the person or not it encourages you to go out and help others.

0:20-0:25-  A statistic that appears is shown to spark concern.  The statistic read “1 in 5 kids struggle with hunger”.  This is a call to action to inform others of problems people face everyday and a big one which is that some people don’t eat everyday.

0:26-0:30-  The visuals appear to conclude but not before the final message pops up.  The message reads “Help end childhood hunger near you” which is brought to you by ‘Feeding America’.  It also gives a website to donate or find out more information on other ways how you can help.  The PSA redirects you to FeedingAmerica.org.