Author: jsoccer5

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A huge problem in Vancouver right now involving heroin addicts committing crimes to support their bad habits [no verb in this sentence]. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop addicts from committing crimes. The crime rate has gone up due to these addicts. Addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Their daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because they are using. Due to the addiction, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are crimes such as breaking and entering. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with the program is that it won’t help addicts ween off the drugs. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. Also it will keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

Enough about You- Jsoccer5

Money plays such a large role in society, where no one can get every far in life without money. Money is valued in so many different ways, even just the number is valued by people when they never actually see the physical money. Today people need to trust the government and banking systems that they will take care of the money properly. If people did not trust the banks, they would have to hide their money around their houses and be solely responsibly for the lost of it. The though of money always seemed simple; however it is quiet more complicated. No one ever sees their money no matter where they are from. No one is ever handed physical cash, and people have to trust their government that the money they were given appears in their bank accounts.

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Content Description

  • Sources
    • Childhood Obesity Statistics
    • Childhood Obesity Causes and Consequences
    • Sugary Drinks and Childhood Obesity
    • Sugar-sweetened Beverages Initiatives
    • Consumption of Sugar Drinks in the US (2005-2008)
    • Evaluating Sugary Drink Nutrition and Marketing to Youth
    • Intake of Sugar-Sweetened Beverages & Weight Gain
    •  Food Away from Home, Sugary-Sweetened Drink Consumption & Juvenile Obesity
    • Mass Media’s Influence on Knowledge, Attitudes, & Behaviors about Sugary Drinks and Obesity
    • Reducing Consumption of Sugar-sweetened Beverages to Reduce the Risk of Childhood Obesity
    • Childhood Obesity: The Link to Drinks
    • How much is too much?
    • Benefits of Sports Drinks
  • Working Thesis
  • Arguments
    • Ideas
    • Definition Argument
    • Casual Argument
    • Rebuttal Argument
  • Final Research Paper Outline

Sources

Source 1

Childhood Obesity Statistics from CDC

Citation: ”Childhood Obesity Facts.” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention. Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, 17 Nov. 2016. Web. 30 Nov. 2016

Summary: The Center for Disease Control released statistics based on Childhood Obesity in 2011-2014.

Facts from the CDC

  • The prevalence of obesity has remained fairly stable at about 17% and affects about 12.7 million children and adolescents.
  • Overall, obesity prevalence among children whose adult head of household completed college was approximately half that of those whose adult head of household did not complete high school (9% vs 19% among girls; 11% vs 21% among boys) in 1999–2010.
  • Obesity prevalence was the highest among children in families with an income-to-poverty ratio of 100% or less (household income that is at or below the poverty threshold), followed by those in families with an income-to-poverty ratio of 101%–130%, and then found to be lower in children in families with an income-to-poverty ratio of 131% or larger (greater household income).

Source 2

Childhood Obesity Causes & Consequences

Citation: “Childhood Obesity Causes & Consequences.” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention. Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, 19 June 2015. Web. 30 Nov. 2016.

Summary: This article talks about behavior and community involvement in childhood obesity. When it comes to the communities involvement a lot of causes are based around food. At the end of the article it discusses health risks of childhood obesity.

Source 3

Sugary Drinks and Childhood Obesity

Citation: Sugary Drinks and Childhood Obesity. Arch Pediatr Adolesc Med. 2009;163(4):400. doi:10.1001/archpediatrics.2009.16

Summary: This article discusses how sugary drinks can lead to childhood obesity as well as other diseases. It gives examples of what sugary drinks are breaks it down into 4 categories. The article goes over the factors that contribute to this and how they contribute to the cause of other diseases.

Source 4

Sugar-sweetened beverages initiatives can help fight childhood obesity

Citation: Go, A. S., D. Mozaffarian, and V. L. Roger. “Sugar-sweetened beverages initiatives can help fight childhood obesity.” circulation 127 (2013): e6-e245.

Summary: This article discusses an option for lowering sugary drink consumption by taxing it and shows how it will also help the economy. They also define sugary drinks into types of beverages and talk a little bit about why it is so bad for you.

Source 5

Consumption of Sugar Drinks in the US (2005-2008)

Citation: Ogden, Cynthia L., et al. Consumption of sugar drinks in the United States, 2005-2008. US Department of Health and Human Services, Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, National Center for Health Statistics, 2011.

Summary: This article discusses the consumption in kilocalories and the differences of consumption based on age, race, ethnicity, income, location. It also explains how much is consumed and gives a definition for sugar drinks.

Source 6

Evaluating Sugary Drink Nutrition and Marketing to Youth

Citation: Harris, Jennifer L., et al. “Evaluating sugary drink nutrition and marketing to youth.” New Haven, CT: Yale Rudd Center for Food Policy and Obesity (2011).

Summary:This article discusses childhood obesities direct link to sugary drinks and how many of these companies promote this unhealthy life style. While providing general accurate statements it also provides a great deal of statistics to support The fact that sugary drinks are bad for children and yet marketed directly to them.

Source 7

Intake of Sugar-sweetened beverages & weight gain

Citation: Malik, Vasanti S., Matthias B. Schulze, and Frank B. Hu. “Intake of sugar-sweetened beverages and weight gain: a systematic review.” The American journal of clinical nutrition 84.2 (2006): 274-288.

Summary: This article takes an in depth look at the correlation of sugary drinks and weight gain. The review uses different investigations and studies to come to the conclusion that the intake of sugar beverages are in conjunction with weight gain and obesity in children and adults. It explains that theses beverages also provide little nutritional value and result in incomplete compensation of energy at subsequent meals. Ultimately the conclusion of the article is that these drinks should be discouraged and there needs to be more efforts to promote consumption of healthier beverages.

Source 8

Food Away from Home, Sugary-Sweetened Drink Consumption & Juvenile Obesity

Citation: Gillis, Linda J., and Oded Bar-Or. “Food away from home, sugar-sweetened drink consumption and juvenile obesity.” Journal of the American College of Nutrition 22.6 (2003): 539-545.

Summary: This article discusses the relationship between people’s diets and their weight. They complete a study in which they found that obese children consume more meat, grains, sugary drinks, and processed food, while also lacking fruits and vegetables in everyday diets. It also talks about the effects that eating out has on the food consumption of children.

Source 9

Mass Media’s Influence on Knowledge, Attitudes, & Behaviors about Sugary Drinks and Obesity

Citation: Boles, Myde, et al. “Ability of a mass media campaign to influence knowledge, attitudes, and behaviors about sugary drinks and obesity.” Preventive medicine 67 (2014): S40-S45.

Summary: This article discusses the relationship media has with the way people act. The article shows that when the media shows a group of people how bad sugary drinks, they become more informed and then change behaviors. In this specific study they talk about a study done in Oregon where they informed people about how bad sugary drinks are for you and how this campaign helped the people in the area become more knowledgeable, and how a large portion of these people stated they would change their ways.

Source 10

Reducing Consumption of Sugar-sweetened Beverages to Reduce the Risk of Childhood Obesity

Citation: “Reducing Consumption of Sugar-sweetened Beverages to Reduce the Risk of Childhood Overweight and Obesity.” Reducing Consumption of Sugar-sweetened Beverages to Reduce the Risk of Childhood Overweight and Obesity. World Health Organization, 24 Aug. 2016. Web. 04 Dec. 2016.

Summary: The World Health Organization talks about how sugary drinks are directly linked to obesity. Consumption of these beverages is incredibly high and suggest poor diets. They offer suggestions on how much sugar should be consumed to be considered healthy.

Source 11

Childhood Obesity: The Link to Drinks

Citation: McKinlay, Rodrick D. “Obesity Action Coalition » Childhood Obesity: The Link to Drinks.” Childhood Obesity: The Link to Drinks Comments. Obesity Action Coalition, n.d. Web. 04 Dec. 2016.

Summary: This article talks about the effect sugary drinks have on childhood obesity. It discusses how much is consumed and the effect caffeine has as well. It ends by talking about parents roles on changing this problem by adapting a healthier lifestyle as well to role model how to be healthier for the children.

Source 12

How Much is Too Much?

Citation: Johnson. “How much is too much?” Research. SugarScience.org, 30 Mar. 2014. Web. 5 Dec. 2016.

Summary: In this article they discuss the concern for how much sugar Americans intake against what Americans are actually consuming using lots of facts and statistics.

Source 13

Benefits of Sports Drinks Like Gatorade and Powerade

Citation: Cespedes, Andrea. “Benefits of Sports Drinks Like Gatorade and Powerade.” Leaf Group, 09 June 2015. Web. 04 Dec. 2016

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Working Thesis

  1. By putting an age restriction on sugary drinks for children under 18 will make a significant positive effect on decreasing the percentage of childhood obesity and increase overall health of children.
  2. Childhood Obesity is a Nationwide epidemic that can be reduced by eliminating the unlimited access to sugary drinks by creating an age restriction on purchase.
  3. Childhood obesity is a nationwide epidemic that cannot be solved completely but can begin to be reduce by eliminating the unlimited access to sugary drinks and decrease the percentage of sugar intake by creating an age restriction on the ability to purchase the products, which will ultimately decreasing the percentage of childhood obesity.

 

Arguments

Ideas

  • Explain what Sugary Drinks consist of
  • Explain why sugary drinks are bad for you
  • Explain the effects of sugary drinks causing childhood obesity
  • Go through other ideas on how to solve the problem
  • Compare proposal/thesis to cigarettes
  • Evaluate major companies and their marketing

Definition

Childhood obesity is a nationwide epidemic throughout the United States. While there are many leading factors when it comes to what causes Childhood obesity one of the largest causes is from the consumption of sugary drinks. According to the CDC, “80% of youth consume sugar sweetened beverages,” but what they do not mention is what exactly a sugary drink consists of, posing the question for readers of what is a sugary drink ?

For most people when the thought of sugary drinks comes to mind the though of soda and energy drinks are what constitutes as a sugar drink, however it is actually so much more. According to the National Cancer Center, “sugary drinks consist of fruit drinks, soda, energy drinks, sport drinks, and sweetened waters” (Ogden, 5). The American Heart Association also gives a list of what is included in sugary drinks, including sweetened teas to the list as well (Go, 1).In the Advice for Patients section of the Arch Pediatric Medical Journal they give examples of some of the types of sugar drinks and examples to go with it. For the type of drink classified under fruitades they gave examples such as Gatorade and lemonade, for fruit juices they give examples like Kool-Aid and Fruit Punch, for Soda they give the example of Coke, Pepsi and 7Up, and for Energy Drinks they give the examples of Monster or Red Bull (Arch, 1). The drinks mentioned above are a lot of times considered to be healthy or good for you, and are in many American homes. The problem is that sugary drinks are the largest source of added sugars in a youth’s diet and also the main source of calorie intake (Harris, 2). What this means is that when a child drinks a soda they are taking in a lot of calories at one time, often more than a body needs which then is not processed properly and becomes fat.

The largest problem that Americans face with determining if a drink is considered bad for you before even looking to see the sugar content is due to the fact that many sugary drinks have positive health claims attached to help hide the fact that they are packed with sugar (Harris, 2). One of the most common poor drink purchases are sports drinks, such as Gatorade. On the Gatorade label it has the word Performance in large print as well as the phrases thirst quencher and natural flavors. Gatorade is also know as an electrolyte sports drink, and kids see many different athletes supporting these products families are lead to assume this is good for their child. What they don’t know is that Gatorade is packed with 35 grams of sugar in a 20oz bottle. Just think 35 grams of sugar is equal to 8.75 teaspoons of sugar, and that’s a lot of sugar in a bottle.

While there is many different types of drinks out there, they can almost always be classified as sugary or not. By making people more aware of what is bad for children, families will be able to make more informed choices when shopping for beverages and hopefully that will help with the childhood obesity epidemic that sweeps our country.

Causal

Childhood obesity is one the countries biggest health problems of the 21st century, and there is truly no cure. In an article produced by the American Society for Nutrition they discuss how obesity is the reflection of the interactions of different factors such as, genetics, cultures, environments, socioeconomic status and behaviors. These factors are play a role in the reasons why people eat what they eat, specifically the consumption of sugar. For most Americans their main source of added sugars comes from their intake of sugary drinks. Consumption of these sugary drinks are incredibly high and is linked to being one of the leading causes in childhood obesity nationwide.

Sugary drinks are available everywhere from stores to schools to vending machines, making it nearly impossible for children not to get their hands on it. Due to easy access to sugar drinks such as sodas, fruit juices and sports drinks, the consumption of these drinks continually increase everyday. In an article written by Roderick McKinley he states that the average American consumes 1.6 cans of soda a day, resulting in them consuming more than 500 cans of soda in one year. Think about one 12 ounce can of Coca-Cola, that can of soda contains 39 grams of sugar. According to an article published by Sugar Science “the average amount of added sugar a child should consume in one day is 18.5 grams,  however this may vary based on age but will never be more than 25 grams.” If a child consumes just one can of Coca-Cola a day they have already doubled their sugar intake for the day. What is most concerning is the calories being consumed by just drinking these beverages. The U.S. Dietary Guidelines for Americans recommend “the total intake of discretional calories, including sugars and fats, should range between 5-15% per day, yet most American children consume about 16% of their intake from added sugars alone, not including fats or any other foods.” While many Americans are shocked to find out these statistics they also don’t always understand where these added sugars are coming from, and do not seem to realize that they come from the drinks they are consuming.

These sugary drinks are often consumed without much thought into the fact that the person consuming the drink is drinking large amounts of sugar as well as drinking a large percentage of calories, not to mention doing so very quickly. What becomes the problem is that many people consume more of this than their body needs. In an advice column published by the Arch Pediatric Medical Journal they state that these drinks are all consumed before a person’s body can realize they have consumed it which in turn is before the body has time to realize it is full in the same way a body would when eating solid food.  The World Health Organization also adds to this by stating “these drinks have little nutritional value and do not provide the same feeling of fullness as solid food does,” making it so they continue to consume more even though their body has had enough. The more people consume sugary drinks the more sugar they have in their system exceeding the amount they need to be able to produce energy. Because of the over consumption the body breaks down only what it needs for energy and the rest is stored as fat. Over many years of consuming too much sugar and the body storing excess as fat, especially after starting at a young age, the fat continues to add up ultimately resulting in the person becoming obese. In a study conducted by the American College of Nutrition they found that “Obese children consume significantly more servings of fats and sugary beverages than non-obese children in a study done between the two groups.” This study helps to prove that the correlation between obesity and sugary drinks is in fact a direct cause to this nationwide epidemic known as childhood obesity.

Childhood Obesity may never be cured as it has so many different causes, however it can be reduced even just a little. The CDC currently states that childhood obesity affects about 12.7 million children. This amount of children could be reduced if the reduction of sugary drink consumption goes down as well. While it will not reduce the consumption of sugary drinks and its affects on childhood obesity by a lot, if parents become more educated and adopt healthy habits themselves, such as cutting back intake of soda, they will begin to influence their children and the children around them to do the same. As these educated parents, influence their children there is hope that in future generations obesity declines and is only a small percentage of the united states as those children will become parents and be able to provide the healthiest nutritional options and knowledge for their future children as possible.

Rebuttal

 Final Research Paper Outline

  • Introduction to Childhood Obesity
  • Thesis
  • Define sugary drinks and explain what they consist of (Definition)
  • Explain the connection between the two (Causal)
  • Media’s affect on the ignorance of sugar consumption through beverages (Rebuttal)
  • Different things that have been tried to help prevent this problem (general advertisement, taxing proposal)
  • Compare my idea to put age limit on this to the age restriction on cigarettes

 

 

Safer Saws- jsoccer5

1.Manufacturers

1A. “A table saw manufacturer that is not a member of PTI tried to license SawStop’s patent portfolio technology but negotiations failed when the manufacturer alleged that SawStop demanded unreasonable royalties in excess of what was originally being sought.”

1B. When a manufacturer tried to license SawStop the negotiation failed because requested royalties were unreasonable.

1C. The claim that the royalties were too high is purely an Opinion Claim.

1D. While this claim is not very strong as there is no facts that the royalties were too high. While he does have no entendre he does make reference to the fact that it is in excess as to what was originally sought making it reasonable to think that anything extra would be unreasonable.

2. Customers

2A.”Between the 8% fee and the additional hardware costs, your typical $400 jobsite saw would potentially rise in cost to around $625″

2B. Price in a regular table saw would go up 225 dollars due to expenses for hardware and the royalty fees.

2C. The claim that price would increase is factual but the claim on how much is not proven therefore is an opinion.

2D. While this factual claim does hold some truth that price will go up there is nothing to prove the point of how much therefore the amount is considered opinion and eliminates the fact trying to be proven.

4. Consumer Safety Advocates

4A. “The CPSC says that 67,000 people are injured every year using table saws, resulting in 33,000 emergency-room visits, 4000 amputations, and $2.3 billion spent on medical bills, lost wages, and pain and suffering.”

4B. Every year there are many thousands of injuries due to table saws, resulting in not only large expenses but mental and physical injury.

4C. Overall this claim is factual.

4D. While this claim is factual because of the direct statistics there is no statistics on the last three mini claims maid therefore it is not highly persuasive and not well though out. This claim is logical as it uses statistical evidence.

5. Injured Plaintiffs

5A. “Wec says his permanent and “traumatic injury” could have been prevented if Bosch and its competitors had not rejected and fought against the safety technology.”

5B. The man injured by a regular table saw argues that his injury wouldn’t have happened if the Bosch company had not declined the safe technology of SawStop.

5C. This claim is purely opinion.

5D. The claim that this injury wouldn’t have happened if the big companies did not deny the safer technology is opinion because he does not know this for sure. This is a reasonable claim to make as he knows if the saw didn’t cut him he wouldn’t have gotten injuries which is also incredibly logical. This claim is also persuasive in the fact that his opinion is hard to argue with since there is no cases that the SawStop technology has ever not saved someone from injury.

6. Personal Injury Lawyers

6A. “SawStop cannot mitigate fractures and crushing injuries caused by work piece kickback or loss of vision caused by high velocity particles ejected by the saw blade.”

6B. SawStop can only eliminate injury by direct contact of the blade but not other injuries.

6C. The claim that SawStop only prevents contact injuries it is factual.

6D. This claim while it is a fact that it only prevents contact injuries, which is accurate it is also highly persuasive to prove the point that these aren’t as safe as they seem.

9.Steve Gass himself

9A. “The system can tell the difference between your finger and some wood so instead of cutting some fingers off you will just get a little lick.”

9B. The SawStop System will stop before cutting your finger off and will only give you a little scrape instead.

9C. This claim is factual.

9D. This claim is factual as it does stop when coming in contact with skin but may still give you a tiny cut. It however is not very persuasive as the idea that you can still be madly injured is a turn off for spending that much money.

10. Power Tool Product Reviewers

10A. “skin-sensing technology has been sorely needed in the portable saw category to protect pros and DIYers wherever they need to work.”

10B. This advanced technology has been needed for a long time to protect anyone working with table saws.

10C. This claim is opinion.

10D. While this claim is very persuasive as it says that this technology is needed to protect anyone working with a table saw there is little evidence to support this claim. This claim is logical and reasonable as people will relate to the idea that protection is needed and advanced technology for sensing skin would absolutely protect people.

11.Amputees

11A.  “Table saws are not forgiving … You have to live with this the rest of your life.”

11B. A man that had his thumb amputated due to a table saw states that the mistake made on a regular table saw is a mistake you live with for forever.

11C. This claim is an opinion .

11D. This claim is highly reasonable and logical as if you lose an appendage to a table saw you will never get it back. This claim however is not persuasive as it makes no statement that you should get use SawStop saws instead.

 

 

Open Strong- jsoccer5

Opening 1

Childhood obesity is a nationwide epidemic, that gets worse every year. While many people do not realize this is such a big problem it is slowly becoming more and more prevalent in America’s everyday life. One of the biggest effects of this is the consumption of sugary drinks. If American’s were to put age restrictions on sugary drinks childhood obesity would go down over time.

Opening 2

One of largest epidemics nationwide is the overwhelming amount of children suffering from childhood obesity. While childhood obesity is because of the foods they eat are processed and high in saturated fats the biggest factor is the large consumption of sugary drinks such as sports drinks and juice, as their is little to no nutritional value. Childhood obesity would significantly decrease if sugar drinks were eliminated from a child’s everyday diet by putting an age restriction on it the same way there is an age restriction on tobacco and alcohol.

jsoccer5’s Proposal

For my research I will be examining the hypothesis that putting an age restriction on sugary drinks, such as soda and sports drinks, for children under 18 will make a significant positive effect on increasing childhood obesity and increase overall health of children. Childhood obesity is a nationwide epidemic where children are well over the appropriate weight for their age and height causing many health concerns. Lot of children suffer from the illness of obesity are because of the food and drinks they consume. Many children consume sugary and high caffeinated drinks on a daily basis, and most of which have no nutritional value. A large reason why children drink these things is because it is inexpensive and available to anyone of any age. By having a age restriction it will make it harder for children to purchase these products, and will make it so that less children are consuming no nutritional drinks.

In my research I have found that 1 in 6 children are affected by obesity, which is 17% of nations children and adolescence ages 2 to 19. Childhood obesity is higher in certain ethnic and racial groups than others. I also found that children that come from a low income family or parent is not highly educated that they end up being more often obese.

Sources

  1. Childhood Obesity Statistics from CDC

The Essential Content of the Article: In this article it provides statistical evidence about childhood obesity among American youth based on race, ethnic groups, income and education.

What it Proves: Childhood obesity is a national wide epidemic in all American children but there is many different factors involved in who and why the children are effected by obesity.

2. Ideas to Curb Childhood Obesity

The Essential Content of the Article: In this article the discussion of how sugary drinks are a large effect on the obesity epidemic and present different ideas to help curb this epidemic. These also discuss how there is nothing effective being done in this area of concern.

What it Proves: Sugary drinks are highly involved in the obesity epidemic and that people out there are trying to come up with ideas to positively effect this issue but nothing has been done yet.

3. Higher consumption of Sugary Drinks and Fast Food because of Public Ads

The Essential Content of the Article: Childhood consumption of sugar drinks and fast food has increased where TV ads for theses are largely prevalent. There is no direct link to body weight however there is to consumption in this article.

What it Proves: There is a direct correlation to exposure to Sugary drink ads and consumption of these products.

4. direct relationship between sugar drinks and obesity

The Essential Content of the Article: A study completed in Massachusetts that proves that sugary drinks are largely influenced in the childhood obesity epidemic.

What it Proves: Consumption of sugary drinks are directly related to childhood obesity.

5. Sugar drink Initiative

The Essential Content of the Article: there is currently an invitiave going on to help consumption of sugary drinks to decrease.

What it Proves: Sugary drinks are a large reason for obesity and people are starting to recognize this and make a change.

Critical Reading- jsoccer5

“It’s kind of hard to understand Caleb’s injuries. “

What makes it so hard? There is nothing in this statement to support the fact that this is hard, its just a blank accusation that the reader isn’t smart enough or knowledgeable enough to understand Caleb’s injuries. She doesn’t say what all his injuries are so she can’t say they are all hard to understand. If it is hard to understand them then how does she understand them? In this sense she says Caleb’s injuries but doesn’t specify as to if it’s all or some of them making it seem as if all his injuries are complex and too hard for anyone to understand. What if he has other injuries other then just this mental illness. Lots of time men in the Military have physical injuries as well as mental. Are those just as hard to understand? By her making injuries plural it states there is more than one injury and since this article is only talking about his PTSD it leaves it open to assume there are other issues he is handling which may be making his PTSD more intensified and harder to handle.

“Even doctors can’t say for sure exactly why he has flashbacks, why he could be standing in a bookstore when all of a sudden he’s sure he’s in Ramadi, the pictures in his brain disorienting him among the stacks, which could turn from stacks to rows of rooftops that need to be scanned for snipers. “

While doctors cannot say why he is having them, they saying something which is most likely suggesting reasons behind why he is having them based off their medical knowledge and history in the field. It doesn’t say the doctors don’t have any idea of what causes them it just says they don’t know for sure suggesting that they do have some idea, its just not exactly what Caleb wants to hear or maybe hasn’t been medically proven yet. There is also no exact number of doctors who can’t say exactly what causes this. The article just says doctors, which is plural so we know it is at least two. There is also no evidence that these doctors are specialized in this field, for all we know it could be his primary general physician. If he is having flashbacks so severed he can’t remember where he is then maybe he should be seeing a specialist. She then contradicts her self by basically describing what triggers his PTSD by saying that the rows of books remind him of the roof tops on Ramada. As someone who struggles from PTSD I don’t always know why I get flashbacks sometimes and not others but I am aware that certain things will trigger my PTSD, such as crowds so therefor I try to avoid them and I am sure to have methods to handle these problems if for some reason a certain crowd randomly triggers me. While doctors can’t say for sure what is causing Caleb’s they can help him and his family recognize his triggers, such as tall rows of similar items, and help him come up with ways to handle the flashbacks the same way doctors in my life have.

“Sometimes he starts yelling, and often he doesn’t remember anything about it later. “

There are many people out there who when upset and yelling they don’t remember what they say after the fact. While this could be a side effect of PTSD it is not only directly related to PTSD. Maybe he has consumed alcohol, or is on some type of drug that doesn’t help him remember well. How do we know that he doesn’t remember anything? Maybe he pretends not to remember so he does not have to face the possibility of being embarrassed or having to deal with the problem at hand. There is zero evidence in this statement that he is yelling about something war related, maybe he is just mad and upset about other aspects of his life.

“They don’t know exactly why it comes to him in dreams, and why especially that time he picked up the pieces of Baghdad bombing victims and that lady who appeared to have thrown herself on top of her child to save him only to find the child dead underneath torments him when he’s sleeping, and sometimes awake. “

Who is they? Is she referring to the doctors he works with? Again she states they, I am assuming she is referring to the doctors but I am unsure, don’t know why exactly he is having these flashbacks insinuating that they have some theories as to why and have shared those theories with Caleb but have told him it could be many different reasons. She then describes a very vivid incident that Caleb has encounters while overseas. By this women being able to describe the event so vividly it seems as if Caleb has described this event to her in detail, insinuating that Caleb has expressed this event as one very memorable event to be that is constantly bothering him and significant in his life. She then goes on to say that this event not only bothers him in his sleep but also when he is awake, making is seem that he isn’t only having flashbacks in his sleep, so the fact that the doctors can’t exactly figure out why he does it in his sleep doesn’t mean much as they are actually looking at a much bigger picture of why he is having these flashbacks at all and what is triggering them. Sleeping during them is only one aspect to the much larger and involved issue at hand.

“They don’t know why some other guys in his unit who did and saw the same stuff that Caleb did and saw are fine but Caleb is so sensitive to light, why he can’t just watch the news like a regular person without feeling as if he might catch fire. “

By saying they don’t know what makes him different from other guys in the unit who are fine is like saying we don’t know why this apple is bruised and this other one is half red half yellow. Everybody is effected by situations and life experiences differently so you cannot compare the two. Also it says some of the guys in the unit which could mean two things. One being that they only spoke to a few guys in the unit, which could be really only two other guys, and compared those people to Caleb, while they  didn’t talk to all of the guys in the unit. It could also mean that only some of the guys in the unit weren’t effected but everyone else in the unit has the exact effect, or similar issues as Caleb.She then throws in the fact that Caleb is sensitive to light. This part of the sentence has nothing to do with the other people in the unit being effected or not, it just says they are fine and Caleb is not, nothing about other people in the unit being effected by light. It really truly doesn’t make sense and should either be another sentence completely or not mentioned at all. It is almost as if the writer has used this to change focus on the fact that the beginning of the sentence is being presented as fact when it has nothing to back it, no studies shown. As she goes on to explain the light issue she says the news causes him to feel like he is going to catch on fire. Why is it just the news and not all of TV shows. While yes TV is light, which would make sense for him to be sensitive to watching TV, it makes no sense as to this relating to him to having trouble watching the news and nothing else. It seems as if the news is a trigger all into its self. Maybe the type of news brings back memories. We don’t know what type of news they are referring to we just know its the news, maybe its world wide news which is always showing war scenes and makes sense for it to bother his as he is a war veteran. Also why does he feel he is going to catch on fire? Is it that its so bright he feels its like the sun is about to touch him? Or is it that while he was active duty serving that he almost caught on fire and watching news about war brings him back to that moment? How many times has watching the news resulted in him feeling like he is going to catch on fire? Maybe that incident has only happened once, and if so that particular scene on the news probably triggered him back to something that happened involving catching on fire. This sentence is all over the place, spewing out random facts that don’t help each other make a valid point and distract the reader from being able to analyze there is nothing backing the beginning of the sentence about how other men in the unit aren’t effected.

“Some hypotheses for why PTSD only tortures some trauma victims blame it on unhappily coded proteins [11], or a misbehaving amygdala [12]. “

What hypotheses are these and where did she get them from. While she does create links to what those two medical issues are she does not refer to where she got these facts from, making it not an actual fact just simply a claim. She also says these hypotheses blame these medical issues for PTSD torture. To start blame is a very strong phrase and most of the time is used when you disagree with something. When I think of blame I think of a child doing something wrong and blaming it on their sibling. By saying these medical scientific hypotheses place these other medical issues at fault for PTSD it makes it seem like if you have PTSD they will just blame it on something else and not on the fact that the person with PTSD went through something traumatic. Also the fact that they say torture is a strong statement too. By saying PTSD only tortures some trauma victims its saying that some trauma victims have PTSD but it doesn’t effect them so they must not have these other medical issues. From personal experience with PTSD over time the triggers and effects of it dwindle away so this claim is also saying it tortures some but not others but never discloses how recent those trauma victims have had their incident or how far along in treatment they are in regards to their incident, not to mention trauma victims could lose their memory making it so that they just don’t remember what happened and can’t be effect by it. Once again comparing some people to another, even just one person to another person isn’t a fair evaluation as not everyone is effect the same way with life events.

“Family history, or maybe previous trauma.”

This sentence doesn’t really make much sense alone however if I refer it back to the previous sentence it seems that it is referring to more reasons why PTSD can effect some people and not others. If some victims have family history of mental health issues that will absolutely play a roll into the effects some have of their PTSD. They may also have other medical issues making small upsets into larger things because they are simply just dealing with too much at one time. The fact that some of these people may have experienced previous trauma would absolutely effect how they handle things. If someone has multiple challenging life events happen they will struggle more at coping as there is more to cope with. Again these are both reason why someone cannot compare people. Yes all of the fruit in the basket may be apples but they all come from different places and all taste and look different. If you are going to compare people it should be scientifically done with everyone in the group having similar outside factors such as everyone involved in the study has no mental illness in their family history and have never been exposed to previous trauma and all needed to have witnessed the same life altering event. By eliminating outside factors it would be easier for doctors to understand why some people are effected and others are not.

 

Visual Rewrite- jsoccer5

Keep your EYES on the Road

[0:00] The opening sense is a young boy getting into the driver seat of an older car. You can instantly tell this is not going to be a car ad ass the car is older and not knew and shiny. The boy is wearing a dark blue t-shirt and jeans. He is Caucasian and has short dark hair. He looks clean and well kept. You can tell that he is a middle class boy, he doesn’t have tons of money but he is also not completely poor. He looks like he is in high school or early college. When getting into this older car, something similar to an 1989 ford Lincoln, he has his cell phone in his hand it and looks as if he is texting someone probably his friend or a girl as he is slightly smiling. His cell phone looks to be some type of smart phone again reassuring that he is middle class.

[0:01- 0:03] The boy takes his right hand and reaches across his body for the buckle and buckles himself. This entire time he does not take his eyes off his phone, which is in his left hand. It is clear that he is overly submersed in his phone and seems like he drives often as he does this entire motion without even thinking about it.

[0:04-0:05] The boy is now adjusting the rear view mirror with his right hand but never looks up from his phone which continues to be in his left hand to see where he is adjusting the mirror. He moves the mirror about twice. By him moving the mirror when getting in there is a chance that he is not the only one who drives the car and probably shares the car with a sibling. The car seems too older for his parent to be driving so he wouldn’t share it with them.

[0:06-0:07] the boy now takes his right hand and reaches for the keys which are in the ignition and starts the car turning the keys forward. He continues to look only at his phone in his left hand. He again seems like he drives often and can do all of this without thinking about it and it is complete muscle memory. Also you can tell who ever he is talking to he is thoroughly enjoying the conversation he is having as he cannot look up from the phone.

[0:08-0:09] The boy reaches up for the shifter which is places behind the steering wheel on the right side. He pulls it down and puts the car into gear. He continues to look at the phone in his left hand the entire time.

[0:10] The boys right hand now transitions onto the top of the steering wheel and he lends back into a comfortable position while still viewing his phone. He seems like he is trying to impress the other person on the other side of the screen maybe thinking he is talking to a girl.

[0:11] The still image of the boy in the car in a laid back position with his right hand on the top of the steering wheel and his head slanted downwards towards his phone in his left hand fades slowly to the background. Big red letters that spell the word STOP in all capital letters appear across the screen. By the letters being red it is clear it catches your attention to pay attention to those words. Red is a statement color and attracts the attention of a person, making it hard to look away. By the word being stop it creates a sense of wonder if the director is talking to the watcher or the boy in the car.

[0:12-0:14] An image of an iguana appears the screen. The iguana’s eyes are moving all around looking in multiple different directions . The words Can you do this? Appear along the bottom of the screen in white. The words can you do this are referring to the iguanas eyes being able to move completely around viewing everything around them looking in two completely different directions. Again you are unsure if the words can you do this are referring to the boy or the viewer however it seems it is addressing both people.

[0:15-0:16] The camera goes back to the boy in the car but is now zoomed in on the boy’s face. The camera shows from his chest up. The phone is now in his right hand held up higher in front of his face. His left hand is on the steering wheel. He is attempting to move his eyes around the same way the iguana was from the previous screen. The boy has a strange smirk on his face but also expresses a sense of confusion. The boy realizes he cannot do what the iguana does and seems confused by who is asking him to do this as well as why.

[0:17]The screen is the same as the prior one except for the word No? in white appears on the bottom of the screen. The director again is addressing both the driver and the viewer as the director wants you to imagine being in the boys shoes. He is saying no referring to being able rolling they eyes and is asking the question rhetorically.

[0:18] The boy now looks completely away from his phone and shrugs his shoulders, suggesting he is the answering the question asked and is saying I don’t know. The grin is still on his face and the word No? is still on the screen. He also now turns his head to face the camera on the right side of his body as if he is looking for direction of what top do know and is showing prompt attention to the viewer as the director. The director has these question screens pulling the boys attention away from the phone, insulating what the director is asking is more important than that phone.

[0:19] The camera slowly fades out showing the majority of the car and the boy through the passenger side window. By the camera zooming out showing the whole car insulates there is more important things then what is in the car and when driving you are affecting more than just you. The boy takes the phone which is in his right hand and tosses it up and it lands in the passenger seat, which shows the boy doesn’t care much about the phone anymore and realizes there is more important things in life then driving and texting. He then looks forward as if he is about to drive.

[0:20] the car drives out of the screen from the left to right, showing he is on the way to his destination and is completely paying attention to what is going on around him.

[0:21] the screen now shows a picture of the woods with a short wooden fence along the side of the road appears and the words Then DON’T text and drive. appear in the front of the screen. The letters are in white and the only letters in capital are DON’T and the T in then. The background is the background after the car leaves showing that he has left and got the messages he should not text and drive. By the director saying DON”T in all capital letters it puts an intense emphasis on that you should not do it.

[0:22] The screen fades to black, as if the ad is over.

[0:23- 0:26] Then words Keep both EYES on the road. Appear on the black screen. They are in a blueish, greenish colored collage fading from one to the other as if its the skin of the iguana. The word EYES is in all caps insulting that your eyes are the most important part of driving is looking and paying constant attention.

[0:27-0:29] The screen now transitions into the same black screen with yellow dash marks going through the bottom of the screen mimicking the road.  In the middle of the screen “STOPTEXTSSTOPWRECKS.ORG” appears. The letters are all in caps and STOP is in yellow while the rest is in white, showing that stop is the most important part of the phrase. On the left side of the dash marks the words project yellow light area with a traffic sign and below that Ad councils symbol appears. On the right side of the dash marks appears NOYS in blue and under that is NHTSA with a symbol along that in the beginning, showing all the afflicting organizations with this movement and add.

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Blind Summary- jsoccer5

Women get mammograms everyday, and many are often read correctly however there are some that either get a false negative or false positive. There has also been lots of times where statistics have been posted in regards to the accuracy of mammogram readings, which has left a negative effect on many people. Dr. Adock was a doctor who came up with a way to handle the testing situation at hand, but once his volume dropped he took himself off the team. Some doctors are now seeing repercussions for their poor readings. Many women now choose not to get mammogram tested either because of scary testing results, or statistics posted.

Polio Notes- Jsoccer5

Lecture Notes

  • Children should be vaccinated prior to the age of 5 as this is when they are most vulnerable to getting the virus.
  • The virus is introduced in the mouth and comes out in the intestines.
  • It use to be a massive global problem, paralyzing many people.
  • Polio is now gone in almost 99% of the world.
  • It only lives in humans, and doesn’t live outside the body for very long and once eradicated for a minute it will be gone for forever.
  • It is way to hard to immunize everyone because of war and third world country.
  • Because of war there was a serious outbreak of polio that spread to Iraq creating the children there to be vulnerable.
  • Polio is only in 4 countries currently
  • Fewer than 200 cases of polio
  • Due to conspiracy theory that mass immunization is bad makes it so that it can not be eradicated completely.
  • A rumor was created that the vaccine was containing pork and that muslims could not take this, cause many people to not be vaccinated.
  • Because of the CIA spies used the polio vaccine to find Osama Binladin and for a long time after people of those areas did not trust anyone coming in to give vaccines.
  • the Vaccine needs to be cold, administered by drops on the tounge, and there is never too much or too little, often has to be done 3 times.
  • India has accomplished many times to mass immunize.
  • It is extremely expensive to administer millions of vaccines.
  • When people no longer think polio will affect anyone, because there are much more serious diseases killing our children, people no longer vaccinate.
  • California is one of the few states that makes it easy to not vaccinate your child so they are more vulnerable, which is why there was an outbreak of measles in Disney Land, which then caused an outbreaks in NY and Canada and at least 8 other states.
  • either 250 people purposefully get polio to get rid of it completely or then multiple hundred possibly thousands will get it a year.
  • there was a time period that people believe vaccinating children from polio will cause autism but since this paper was released 10 of the 12 authors have recinded their relation to this theory.

 

Practice Opening: 

Polio is a very deadly disease that has a cure. While it has a cure there is very little chance that it will ever be completely eradicated due to less developed countries and people feeling they no longer need to vaccinated from this disease as they have never seen it. Because of these circumstances polio will continue to spread worldwide never coming to a complete eradication anytime soon.