Enough About You – picklerick

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Money seems to have a big role in our society; you can’t do much or get far if you don’t have any. Money is valuable in different ways, even when you don’t see it physically. In today’s society you must have faith in the government and in the banking system that your money is being handled in the proper manner; if not, then you would have to hide all of your money under your mattress or around your house. I have no clue what happens in the banks, or how they take care of your money. I always thought money was simple; you either have some or you don’t—that’s it. However, being introduced to this assignment, the Yap Fei, US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts now seem similar. You don’t actually see your money being transferred. When you get paid, you aren’t handed cash, you don’t receive a physical check, the money’s all directly transferred to your bank account, and you just have to trust that you got more money.

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Money drives our society; without it our accomplishments are minimal. Its value is grand, yet invisible to the naked eye. In today’s society, governmental faith is necessary to assure our money is handled properly and carefully. Without this faith, we would be hiding our money under mattresses. Banks keep their methods of handling money to themselves. Money isn’t as simple as, “rich and poor.” However, the assignment, the Yap Fei, there is a clear similarity between US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts. We can’t physically see the money being transferred. There are few physical checks or cash involved in payments anymore; money is merely transferred into our accounts while we have to trust it’s actually there.

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One Response to Enough About You – picklerick

  1. davidbdale says:

    Good work, PR. Not a trace of 2nd-person language remains.

    Like

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