Causal Argument – collegegirl

Providing to Our Youth

Police brutality has been an issue for many years and it remains a major concern for people of minority communities. In 2014, Barack Obama created a movement that provided young black men a place to go to seek guidance and influences. This movement has caused young men to be more successful and have better futures.

The White House has six milestones to define the MBK movement. The six milestones can be defined as the following, to ensure all children enter school emotionally and physically ready, ensure all children read at grade level by 3rd grade, ensure all youth graduate from high school, ensure all students complete post secondary education or training, ensure all youth out of school are employed and lastly, to ensure all youth to remain safe from violent crimes and have a second chance. These milestones can ensure that the younger crowd will have a better future and be more successful. Let’s break the milestones down to see how they will help our youth be successful. When kids are physically and mentally prepared to go to school, they are ready to learn on a day to day basis. Statistics has proved that 75 percent of students who struggle with reading in 3rd grade, never catch up, which is why all children should be able to ready at grade level by 3rd grade. Teens graduating from high school is a milestone in general. Completing college is the next phase. Getting a degree is extremely important when it comes to getting a job since good paying jobs now a days require a degree. Lastly, when it comes to keeping our youth safe, it is obviously very important. Young people are the future. They are the ones who are going to make changes in our communities and workplaces. Keeping them out of trouble should be our main priority.

Because the movement has so many goals and milestones that it would like to achieve, it really is a powerful movement. Providing our youth with guidance and responsibilities will cause them to want to make their communities better and help them with their future as well. Taking their minds off of what is happening in the world we live in today with police brutality, will help the youth feel like they aren’t stuck in the communities they live in and that their is a light at the end of the tunnel.

3 thoughts on “Causal Argument – collegegirl”

  1. I just logged back on this morning and my edit post was still up and it still said “Publishing” meaning it never publish Saturday night when I posted. I copied and pasted a tried to post again, still said “Publishing” for a few minutes. I exited out of the entire tab and created a new one. Finally it posted.


  2. You don’t make a strong causal link here between police brutality and the MBK movement, CollegeGirl. You mention it both before and after your analysis of the milestones of the MBK movement, but the proximity of the subjects doesn’t connect them.

    If you told me that underengaged, underfulfilled young black men were more likely than anyone else to be the victims of police brutality, and that helping them graduate from school and get jobs was the best way to escape the tragedy of being arrested, brutalized, incarcerated, etc., I’d be more likely to see the connection.

    You haven’t provided sources or cited any here, which presents another challenge to your writing and your readers. We don’t know if there’s a credible objective source reporting on the features of he movement you describe, or whether what you’re sharing are the hopes of a Public Relations expert for the MBK group. The research has to show in your research paper, and you’ll find it much easier to hit a 1000-word count if you have material to summarize, analyze, sort, and place into conversation with other sources.

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