For my research paper, I am analyzing how police brutality and racism go hand in hand. 

  1. Obama Is Correct to Separate Police Brutality from Racism

The Essential Content of the Article: This article explains how Obama separated police brutality and racism, and how he was right for doing so. This article also brings up how a white homeless man was killed by a police.

What it Proves: My thesis is how police brutality and racism are connected. This article will help me counter-argue my argument because it claims how white people get killed by police too. 

2. Police Brutality in America Is About Class, Not Race

The Essential Content of the Article: This article explains how racism is not main victim of police brutality. Instead they say it is the social class a person is in. 

What it Proves: This goes against my argument because I believe the problem is race and has nothing to do with class. To prove this I have a case where a police pulls over a state attorney.

3. Police aren’t targeting and killing black men

The Essential Content of the Article: This article explains how violent criminal acts are who police are more likely to shoot in America.

What it Proves: This articles goes against my argument, so it will help me in defending my case. The article states how police are more likely to shoot violent attacks, but when a white person attacks police they usually don’t shoot. 

  1. 8 White People Who Pointed Guns At Police Officers and Managed Not to Get Killed

The Essential Content of the Article: This article tells about eight men who pointed guns at officer, but did not get shot. 

What it Proves: This article, with the help of other evidence, shows that police are more likely to shoot black men over white men. 

  1. Man Arrested & Punched for Sitting on His Front Porch

The Essential Content of the Article: This video shows a black man sitting on his moms porch while being interrogated by two police officers. The police officer claimed someone called and said they saw him breaking into the house. When the police walked away she says no one actually called, she was just suspicious. Eventually man sitting on porch gets punched. 

What it Proves: It proves that police profile black people. Which then can lead to police to attacking them more likely than they would attack a white person. The police punched and arrested the black man because he assumed the man was breaking into a house. 

6.Cops Tackle 11-Year-Old Girl And Holds Her At Gunpoint

The Essential Content of the Article: This video shows a news reporter talking about a little girl who was held at gun point because her security alarm accidentally went off. When the police found her, she was in bed watching tv.

What it Proves: This video proves the shows the lack of empathy that some cops possess.    

7. Bodycam allegedly shows Baltimore PD officer planting drugs

The Essential Content of the Article: This video shows an officer plating drugs in someones backyard. (He thought his camera was off) The officers then goes to the street, ‘turns on his camera’ and then says I’m going to check over here, and ‘finds’ the drugs he planted

What it Proves: This video shows the extent officers will go to get someone in trouble. The person had nothing in their backyard, but they got in trouble for what the officer planted.

10 thoughts on “Proposal+5—Yoshi”

  1. I have a couple of questions about your thesis plan, Yoshi.

    For my research paper, I am analyzing animals that get abuse, but more specifically focusing on elephants in the circus. Adults and kids enjoy the performance of animals, but no one actually knows the truth behind the curtains. I hope to find proof that animals actually get abused when they are being trained to perform.

    Have you ever wondered why we love the elephants in the circus? Their size alone is impressive, I guess. They are rare sights. Why do we want to see them walk in circles, piggy-back one another, do handstands, wear tutus, rear up on their hind legs?

    Lion-tamer acts are similar, right, but not identical? The tamer carries a stool and a whip and appears to struggle to maintain control over the animals that threaten to act out their natural big cat instincts to eat him? The act is a charade to convince us that fatal misunderstandings are being narrowly avoided by the tamer’s dominance? The act is a visual proof that men are superior to brute animals? Is that it?

    That dynamic is missing from the elephant act, isn’t it? Are we worried that the elephants will attack? I don’t think so. There is that classic bit in which the trainer places his head on the ground beneath the elephant’s enormous foot. The implication is that the animal could but won’t crush the trainer’s head by simply putting down his foot. Is that the same as the lion tamer putting his head inside the lion’s jaws? Or do we think, “Gee, I hope the elephant doesn’t forget the guy’s head is there”?

    Maybe we have different prejudices about these animals. Perhaps we think the cats have to be overpowered, whipped into submission, poked with a stool, intimidated, put in their place. We would understand, perhaps, that force is a necessary component of any attempt to train these killing machine predators to act like pussycats. Not so our expectations of the elephants. We expect them to be enormous but gentle, plant-eaters, watering-hole bathers, strollers in the grass. Trainers should be able to talk them into performing with soft words, gentle caresses, sugary treats. Approval. Not deprivation. Certainly not aversion, fear, or torment.

    Is there anything here to add some nuance to your thinking?

    I’m worried that you claim to “hope to find proof that animals actually get abused.” I know you’re not in favor of abuse. So you must mean, “I’m convinced that animals are abused, and I want to nail the bastards who do it.”

    I get that, but it makes you a bad researcher, an advocate in search of vindication. Go looking for evidence instead that the trainers do good work humanely. Be disappointed to discover—if you do discover—that they don’t. Be prepared, at least, to evaluate the evidence, not merely collect the bits that “prove” your own prejudice.


  2. Do you think it would be better to write how elephants are better off in the wild vs circus, like you said in agenda from Oct 04, or should I continue to write how elephants are abused in circuses. Better, as in better for a more interesting paper?


  3. Several questions are on the table now since yesterday afternoon, Yoshi.
    1. You can certainly roll with your new proposal about police brutality and race. You’re right to note that you’ll find plenty of material to source. The narrower your focus, the better. So many writers before you have written briefly to make VERY broad claims. Your best contribution would be a narrow claim about a specific subset of abuse incidents, something other writers after you can cite as good evidence.
    2. If your heart is still in the elephant topic, I’d be happy to help you develop sources and evidence. Often the smallest change in approach can yield big results.
    3. For me, since you asked, the poaching for their ivory aspect of the danger elephants face is the more compelling topic with the more counterintuitive solutions and outcomes. So I’d concentrate of their life in the wild. But what I would do should be of no consequence to you. My involvement will be small compared to your eight weeks of studying the question.


  4. I would rather go about police brutality and race. I am very interested in this topic and it is very controversial. How would I be more narrow on this topic?


    1. I’m glad you asked, Yoshi. Let’s have a conversation about that right here. First, examine our preconceptions. We’ve been hearing a lot about cops brutalizing suspects. We want them all to wear body cameras so we can observe their behavior in arrests, in traffic stops, in stop-and-frisks. Our thought process is that if cops wear cameras, they’ll be less likely to act on their prejudices for fear that their behavior will chronicle the patterns of their interactions.

      So, let’s examine the common current narrative. What race(s) of cops brutalize(s) what race(s) of suspects? [I’m not asking you to expose any prejudice you might have. I’m asking you to characterize the “common knowledge” of the moment.] Who brutalizes whom?


  5. Usually the white cop will brutalize a black man, who sometimes did nothing wrong. Even with body cameras cops are still abusing their power and brutalizing black men. Women usually don’t get brutalized, but I have seen some instances where they have and they have all been black.


    1. Agreed. That’s the common narrative. Now suppose you could document that the common narrative doesn’t reflect the facts accurately? It’s risky to consider and will take some nerve on your part. But what if black cops are just as likely as white cops to brutalize black suspects? It wouldn’t mean white cops aren’t racist. It might mean cops of every color are racist. Or it might mean that something about the race of the suspect, regardless of the race of the cop, makes brutalization (or, to put it another way, overreaction, or an overly physical, or a more-likely-violent response) more likely for black suspects than for white suspects.

      That avenue of investigation would be much narrower, and potentially more enlightening, than any rehashing of the popular narrative. The results could prove out either way. And either result would be an EXTREMELY important contribution to a controversial argument in our culture. If you’re bold, Yoshi, and committed, and want to take your place in a national conversation, I’ll do everything I can to help you accept the challenge.


  6. Unrelated but also important, I’d like to show you how to bury those RIDICULOUSLY long urls into more manageable links. To do so, I’ll need the Titles of the articles you’re linking to.


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