Robust Verbs — socrateslee13

Vancouver has run into an ongoing problem with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. By having an addiction, it has made the addicts lives very hard to deal with. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of their addiction. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. Burglary is one of the crimes committed by heroin addicts. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. However their sole purpose is to try to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. Having hospitals deal with people that make poor decisions and find themselves unable to deal with the repercussions seems pointless.This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

2 thoughts on “Robust Verbs — socrateslee13”

  1. Vancouver has run into an ongoing problem with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits.

    Vancouver has very little to do in this sentence and therefore is not the best subject. Meanwhile addicts are committing crimes, but they end up in a dependent clause. Reorganize ALWAYS to put your star on center stage.

    The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts.

    There is always a better verb than “is.”

    The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts.

    There is always a better verb than “is.”

    By having an addiction, it has made the addicts lives very hard to deal with.

    “It” does not have an addiction. These “verbing” constructions require that you identify who does the verbing. In this case, “By having an addiction, addicts are forced to secure drugs every day.” That’s a terrible sentence, but it follows the rules.

    Fix those sentences first and ask for more feedback if you want it, Socrates.

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