Heroin addicts in Vancouver are stealing money to buy more of the drug. The “free heroin for addicts” program works hard to stop these addicts from committing crimes, which is an uphill battle, to say the least.Heroin users are addicted, and they will do anything to secure more of it, which in turn prevents them from maintaining steady jobs, interactions, and relationships. Unfortunately, the program won’t help these users in ending their addiction, as it is only focused on trying to save the city from the rising crime rates . The program does this by instead actually giving free heroin to the addicts in the cleanest way possible. With this action, the users are kept out of the hospitals, where the medical personnel would have trouble dealing with them. While the addicts will unfortunately remain dependent on heroin, the city will have the opportunity to thrive.
Nice work, SBD. Looking at your subjects and verbs, I see:
Addicts steal
Program works
Users will do anything
Program won’t help
. . .
then the paragraph weakens a bit:
Program does
Users are kept
Addicts will remain
City will have
These subject/verb combinations could be stronger:
Program provides
Users avoid
Addicts depend
City will thrive
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Grade +1 for strong first draft.
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