Author: ballsohard83

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America is a great place to be a citizen. It is the best country in the world and if people had the choice most likely this is the country they would choose to be born in. It is the land of opportunity as we like to say here. This is a country where one can achieve any goal that they set their mind to within the rules of the law of course. One can’t go wrong with living in America because you can be free and proud of who you really are and don’t have to fit in to society.  If one is trying to be successful and is looking forward to being successful in life this country is the best country to be apart of. We do not discriminate we do not hate we accept all kinds of people we accept all shapes and sizes. It does not matter what race you are we accept you as one of our own. We encourage everyone to come be apart of this great country no matter what country you came from. No one can say that this country isn’t great.  This country is so important we help out a lot of other countries and get no credit for it really. We are the reason that a lot of these countries are so wealthy today. We keep them in line and we help them so they can help us. Everyone has respect for America because we have the strongest military. Not many countries want to try to go to war with us because we are favored to win   because we are one of the wealthiest countries in the world.

Why wouldn’t one want to come to America we have the best jobs and there are so many up for grabs you can literally come here and choose whats best for you and what is the best fit for you. If you don’t like your job you can just get a new one. Most people take the school route which is the most reliable route. You get to go to a college for about 4 years at least and you get to study and learn what you love to do. It shows you how to be the best at whatever field you choose. If you choose to be a police officer you can go to school and learn about the justice system get familiar with the law so much that it would be basically second nature to you. Then with those skills you can take it to the police academy where you can see the physical state of your body and then eventually if good enough you can become a police officer. This country is a place for you to chase your dreams and be proud of yourself when you achieve them. This isn’t a country of hate this is a country of love. Many people would do crazy things to be apart of this great place. Just to be born here is a blessing because you are destined for greatness. All it is going to take is a little bit of hard work and commitment. If you are an American the only thing this country asks of you is to try and become successful. It isn’t a mandatory thing but it is definitely yours for the taking. If you open your eyes you can be anything you want to be.

As told before when it comes to race in this country, we do not discriminate at all white, black, and Spanish are all welcomed. We are all treated as equals no one call tell you you cant do something here and if they try to do that you have to just prove them wrong. You are going to get a fair opportunity just like everyone else in this country. I can not stress it enough that we are the best country in the world to live in.

Definition Argument rewrite-ballsohard83

Welcome to America

Welcome to the land of the free. Where everyone who isn’t born in the United States wants to live. It is a place for you to come here and fulfill whatever dream it is that you have. It is a place for you to come and be successful. That’s what they want one to believe but in reality if you aren’t a true American meaning “born in America” then you most likely aren’t welcomed to live here. Even if you are born here but are a darker shade of skin color than white, then this might not be the country for you. This seems to be a country ruled by people particularly of the Caucasian race. If you aren’t a Caucasian American then its looking very unpredictable if you are living in America. It’s harder to live here because you aren’t treated equal. The law makes it sound so sweet and amazing like you are getting all of the freedom you deserve when on reality its just as hard to come by as person trying to catch a cab in New York City at rush hour.

America is so corrupt, and the government will make you feel like you don’t deserve to live here if you aren’t a certain race. Racism in this country may have seemed to have died down but it id just getting started. Unarmed African American men are being brutally murdered by police officers. The men and women that we are supposed to seek out to for protection are the one doing the killing. “U.S. police have killed at least 194 black people in 2016, according to a project by The Guardian that tracks police killings in America”. That number is absurd and we must speak out on this topic because you cant talk about it enough. If the government is just going to keep letting the police do this to our citizens who knows what they are going to do next.

This is a country that aliens love so much, but the country doesn’t love them back. America gets what they want and don’t want. They have made it clear already that they don’t want people who are black even if you were born here so they are trying to get rid of that minority slowly with the prison systems and now with just blatant murder. Its not just black people its Hispanics and other foreigners too.” Obama administration deported a record 438,421 unauthorized immigrants in fiscal year 2013, continuing a streak of stepped up enforcement that has resulted in more than 2 million deportations since Obama took office, newly released Department of Homeland Security data show.” America’s excuse for not letting Hispanics across the border is “they’re taking all of our jobs”. That is such a terrible excuse because what’s the difference whose working the job as long as it gets done. Most likely that job would’ve been up for grabs because most Americans are already lazy so they wouldn’t have gone out to get the job in the first place. This country is just so greedy with everything it is going to bite us in the butt in the long run if we don’t change our ways soon.

I can’t have respect for a country that is so stubborn and doesn’t respect it’s own citizens. It is quite disrespectful how we do our own citizens in this country no matter the color of their skin we should not discriminate, we should not teach our children to hate anyone. Let alone to grow up and hate a person or a race because of the color of their skin. That is the way America still is today whether we talk about it or not it still is a problem children are still being raised racist. They aren’t being born with that sense of hate in their body they are being taught that hate. A baby isn’t going to grow up just hating a person because they are a darker skin color. Any type of baby is open to anything that he or she is taught by the parents and obviously the school system in which they attend. Although the problem of racism might not be as severe as it was back in the early 1900s it still is a factor today. This country is getting back to its racist ways and many people of a different race other than Caucasian are not going to accept that type of treatment ever again. Believe that there is going to be a war if white people try to treat black people like they used to. This country has already used drugs to help eliminate some of the black population in America. They “founded” the drug called cocaine and they brought it to America they found out that this drug is very addicting and money can be made off of it. They brought that drug to a bunch of cities who are poor and don’t really have much going for them but drugs. They basically taught people how to make it in their homes but it isn’t as pure as the actual powder. It is a knockoff brand with basically the same effects called crack. So people who live in the hood took that idea and tried to make an extra buck.Knowing that the people of these poor cities would take advantage they basically set a trap. The police force used that crime of selling crack as basically attempted murder so all of the drug dealers who would be selling this drug would go to jail for a long time and everyone who was actually taking the drug would go to jail too if caught or die eventually from this drug because it wasn’t pure at all but it was addicted and people would share needles and whoever had diseases would share needles and kill off each other like some type of plague.

Works Cited

Pew Article needs a Works Cited citation, not JUST a hyperlink

HuffPost article Needs a Works Cited citation, not JUST a hyperlink.

Safer Saws- ballsohard83

1A. Manufacturers

When you’re cutting wood if you accidentally put your hand into the blade, it’ll stop it so quickly that you just get a little cut instead of taking some fingers completely off.

1B. Another saw could cut your fingers off, but this saw will stop before you have the chance to accidentally do so.

1C. This is a factual claim saying if your put  your hand into the blade it causes it to stop.

1D. This claim is accurate and proved in the video it was taken from.  Because of the visual proof, it is logical and persuasive. the claim seems very normal and it does not seem very convincing at all there is no proof in the sentence.

2A. Customer

the technology works works well but the major tool companies have failed to put this kind of device on any of their table saws and even eight years after Gass offered to license it to them it still doesn’t click .

2B. This claims states that tool companies did not put the Saw Stop technology in their saws even though it works.

2C. This claim is a factual claim.

2D. This claim shows that even though Gass invented this technology that could possibly reduce table saw injuries he hasn’t convinced major tool companies that they need his technology. There are three factual claims in this one sentence.

3A. Manufacturers

A PTI JV has developed a flesh sensing technology that reacts faster to  humans flesh near the blade and also has a lower replacement cost of firing, and decreases injury to a greater degree when compared to the Saw Stop technology.

3B. This sentence has three claims. These three claims challenge three aspects of Gass’s technology.

3C. This is a proposal claim.

3D. This claim tries to show that they have created a faster reacting, cheaper, and safer technology than Gass. With this claim Gass’s technology could help the manufacturers.

4A. Injured Plaintiffs

“I think the manufacturers should think less about cost, but more about people who are using the saws.”

4B. This sentence claims that manufacturers should worry about the people who are injured by their table saws instead of worrying about the cost of the saws.

4C. This is a opinionated claim.

4D. This claim gives a  prospective from a person injured by a saw without Saw Stop, someone who want’s companies to introduce Saw Stop to their table saws so they can prevent more injuries. Companies are worrying more about money and less about safety.

 

 

5A. Personal Injury Lawyers

Although SawStop safety technology has been around for more than ten years, not all table saw manufacturers have adopted it.

5B. Some manufacturers have just looked past this SawStop technology as if it has been around for some time but some have took advantage of this tool.

5C. This is a factual evaluation, stating that SawStop has been available and evaluating how not all manufacturers have adopted it.

5D. This claim is okay overall, but it could be more specific. How many years has SawStop been around? Which manufacturers have adopted it? Which haven’t? For something factual it doesn’t actually give concrete facts, but what it does give is accurate. The lack of specificity makes it less persuasive than it could be, but it gets the point across.

6A. Steve Gass himself

I’m gonna put this hot dog on top of the board here, as if it was my thumb misplaced in the path of the blade.

6B. Steve Gass presented a demonstration of him showing exactly how the technology  works.

6C. This is a proposal claim.

6D. Steve Gass spoke about his demonstration. He explained how his technology worked. In a later demonstration he took it a notch further and used his actual finger to show his confidence in his technology.

7A. Government Officials

The benefits of improving table saw safety clearly outweigh the costs.

7B. This is a proposal claim working for table saw safety.

7D. This is a very straightforward claim, but it doesn’t give specifics on how the benefits outweigh the costs. One can’t do that in one short sentence, so I can assume that the proof will appear later. It is logical to assume what the claim states; safety is usually the best option. The word “clearly” eliminates any doubts in the readers’ minds; this is the only way to go. It is persuasive in that way, giving the sense that the author’s way is the only way. It is very straightforward and convincing overall.

8A. Amputees

“I lost a finger and half the use of my hand in a table saw accident the cost of a cartridge a new blade is well worth having that safety.”

8B. This claim states that the cost of losing a finger is much greater than the cost of replacing broken pieces on a table saw.

8C. This is a factual claim.

8D. The cost of replacing a broken blade and cartridge is around $160, which is a big difference form the hundred thousands of dollars spent on medical bills after a table saw accident. It would be stupid for someone who would choose thousands of dollars when they only have to spend a couple hundred.

Polio Notes-ballsohard83

  • Children between the age of 0 and 5 are more vulnerable to polio, adults can get this disease but not as likely
  • If someone with polio is in the water upstream people who are in the water downstream are likely to get this disease
  • 1,000 children a day worldwide had polio
  • A million a year would get polio and suffer from this disease
  • Inexpensive and effective vaccines have completely eradicated the polio disease
  • it is difficult to pass this disease if there isn’t that many people who are in the area of one who has polio so they cannot spread it.
  • Only four countries still have polio and is so seriously effected by this disease
  • Polio is a very contagious disease
  • People believe that a vaccination is in a pig.
  • It is important to get this disease cured because it can spread to people around you if not cured.
  • The virus can be spread by the vaccine itself

 

Practice Opening

I am personally not a firm believer that the polio disease will be eradicated. It is very expensive to give out billions of vaccines to everyone in the world. Even though polio is a dangerous disease once it hasn’t been seen or heard of for generations a country doesn’t see it as a threat anymore, so they don’t take action. We get too comfortable and believe that it is impossible to come back. There will always be someone who is not vaccinated for this disease.

 

Visual Rewrite-ballsohard83

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The Ad opens up with a man who seems to be devastated while he is inside of an ambulance. He has tears coming from his eyes and he has a bloody bandage on his forehead as if he is injured. There are two nurses a male and a female who are assisting another person on a stretcher. The camera then zooms in on his heart rate monitor and it is decreasing.

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The devastated man in the ambulance then has this guilty look on his face, but  we don’t quite know what seems to be the scenario. He is rubbing his head and sobbing as if he just killed someone. The camera then zooms in on the man laying on the stretcher as one of the nurses put an oxygen mask on his injured face. The man on the stretcher looks to be in a very bad condition. One of the nurses uses a defibrillator on the wounded man. Meanwhile the other weeping man is still ranting off, and the woman nurse looks at the man with such a disturbed look on her face.

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Both of the nurses then look at eachother then back at the deviated man with a smirk. They have a look on their face which is a sign of relief as if what the man said was good news. The lady nurse then lifts the defibrillator.

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The man on the stretcher arises from the mat and looks around the room. The camera then zooms in on the injured man on the stretcher and he has a brace around his neck with blood all over. When he rises he looks as if he was a vampire awakening from the inside of a coffin. He then looks at the nurses and the man who is devastated as if he is perfectly fine and ready to go immediately. The devastated man then looks amazed beyond belief as if he had just seen a ghost. His face goes from completely crying and sobbing to dazed and confused.

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The man on the stretcher then falls back down onto the stretcher. The male nurse then gives the devastated man a sarcastic look and puts the gas mask onto the patient. The lady nurse puts the defibrillator back onto the mans chest and continues to operate. The man who was calmed down by the surprise of the man on the stretcher then immediately starts crying again. He puts his head down in disappointment. Then a quote comes on the screen which states “Buzzed driving is drunk driving” .

Open Strong-ballsohard83

America today is not much different then it was 80 years ago. African Americans are still taking the backseat to white people. Most white people are still racist to black people and it’s a shame honestly. African Americans are still treated as a minority, they aren’t treated as equals, and they have to fight for their lives to even get recognized. Every few weeks you hear of  a white cop shooting an unarmed African American for some bogus reason. When that happens the judicial system always seems to side with the cop who just murdered an unarmed American citizen and they get off free without any punishment. If it were the other way around with a black police officer murdering an unarmed white person the judicial system would make sure that he would rot in the worst prison possible. Does America really treat all as equal? I think we all know the answer to that.

E03: Critical Reading- ballsohard83

Determining if PTSD is Contagious

“Brannan Vines has never been to war, but her husband, Caleb, was sent to Iraq twice, where he served in the infantry as a designated marksman. He’s one of103,200, or 228,875, or 336,000 Americans who served in Iraq or Afghanistan and came back with PTSD, depending on whom you ask, and one of 115,000 to 456,000with traumatic brain injury.”

  • Brannan Vines has never been to war.
  • She personally doesn’t know how it feels to have PTSD because she hasn’t experienced that war like environment.
  • Caleb is in fact a victim of PTSD from serving in the war with Iraq and Afghanistan.
  • Depending on who i ask one of 115,000 to 456,000 have this traumtic brain injury. So if i ask one person it’s true but if i ask another person its false?

” Imagine there’s a murderer in your house. And it is dark outside, and the electricity is out. Imagine your nervous system spiking, readying you as you feel your way along the walls, the sensitivity of your hearing, the tautness in your muscles, the alertness shooting around inside your skull. And then imagine feeling like that all the time.”

  • PTSD gives you a feeling of discomfort, like there is a murderer in your house.
  • PTSD can give you a feeling you would get if it was dark outside and the electricity went out. So you have that anxious feeling that someone is in your house
  • Apparently it makes you so alert to your surroundings, you have sensitivity to hearing, and just makes you so nervous about something bad happening literally all the time. You feel as if you cant get a good nights sleep because you have to watch over your shoulder all the time.
  • This feeling seems to stay with people who suffer from PTSD for a long period of time and in most cases forever.

“Granted, diagnosing PTSD is a tricky thing. The result of a malfunctioning nervous system that fails to normalize after trauma and instead perpetrates memories and misfires life-or-death stress for no practical reason, it comes in a couple of varieties, various complexities, has causes ranging from one lightning-fast event to drawn-out terrors or patterns of abuse—in soldiers, the incidence of PTSD goes up with thenumber of tours and amount of combat experienced”

  • If you diagnose someone with PTSD  it can indeed be a misunderstanding.
  • Peoples actions tend to vary if they are a victim of PTSD they become very dangerous to be around.
  • A lot of times people tend to forget things no matter how important it is just a symptom of this disease
  • People who suffer from this disease usually have problems with abuse and are terrified of little things like an explosion on a televison can give them a flashback of a time in a war where a bomb went off or something of that nature.
  • Abuse of family members is common they believe that someone in the family is an enemy of the war and they attempt to hurt them because they think that they are a threat.

“As with most psychiatric diagnoses, there are no measurable objective biological characteristics to identify it. Doctors have to go on hunches and symptomology rather than definitive evidence.”

  • Basically when a psychiatric diagnoses someone with PTSD they really aren’t 100% sure that a war vet has this symptom.
  • Doctors don’t have a complete understanding of how it works they mostly just go with their gut feeling and determine if someone does have PTSD that way.
  • I don’t necessarily think that’s a good thing i feel like doctors have way too much technology today to not know for sure if someone is having brain trauma or not.
  • It is quite ignorant to just go with your gut feeling on something so serious as a brain injury.

“Different studies of the children of American World War II, Korea, and Vietnam vets with PTSD have turned up different results: “45 percent” of kids in one small study “reported significant PTSD signs”; “83 percent reported elevated hostility scores.” Other studies have found a “higher rate of psychiatric treatment”; “more dysfunctional social and emotional behavior”; “difficulties in establishing and maintaining friendships.”

  • The children of World War 2, Korea, and Vietnam vets all have different results of PTSD.
  • A percentage of 45 of kids in a small study had significant signs of PTSD while others have not.
  • A larger percent of these children have reports of elevated hostility scores meaning they are more hostile and have emotional behavior than others.

Stone Money Rewrite- ballsohard83

Money, Is it really worth it?

The great debate of money has finally crossed paths with a counter intuitive intellectual like myself. One would say money has no intrinsic value at all. According to some of these sources money doesn’t even have to be seen and people still believe that it is valuable. Literally someone can say that this piece of paper that we call money has this specific amount and as long as that person who told them has someone to vouch for them one would believe them. For example people buy merchandise off of eBay all the time without knowing the specific value of an item or if the person they are paying for the item is giving them what they intend to buy. All they know as the buyer is that some numbers from their bank account are being decreased as if they purchased what they wanted. They don’t necessarily know for a fact that the person who sold them the merchandise has received the money for the item or if they are going to receive the item that they believe they purchased.

That was just one of the many examples of how the intrinsic value of money varies. Some would say it doesn’t have any at all especially with the proof provided.` It isn’t set in stone that they would get what they payed for on eBay, but people still buy merchandise off of that website everyday. Even though they know the consequences of their actions can result in loss of their hard earned money, and they might receive an item that they did not want.The point I am trying to get across is that we don’t always have to see it to believe it. In some circumstances money doesn’t even have to be present and we still believe it is there because some numbers in our bank account get changed around. So sometimes I ask myself is money even a real thing? Why do we cherish this piece of paper so much?

People can be so oblivious to the fact that we worship this piece of paper and it controls so much of our lives. Money is so powerful in the world today it’s actually crazy. It really is the one language that everyone seems to understand. It has taken over our world as we speak. We are so greedy in this world today, and we have let this piece of paper suck the life out of our country by making every little thing about money. Health care is a prime example as to why our country is greedy for no reason. We are apparently the richest country in the world, but yet we are one of the only countries who has to pay for health care. If that isn’t counter intuitive then i don’t know what is. We have the most money in the world but we have to pay the “richest country” for health care? We can’t even help save our own citizens lives for free. We have to pay for unnecessary things in this country and its quite astonishing. We let our government get out of hand with what they charge us for in this country.

It’s amazing to me how unbelievably true some of these articles are. The people in America and all around the world  just believe what people of higher power say about this piece of paper and we just go with it. We literally just sit there and accept what someone of a higher power says. According Milton Friedman The yap used huge stone disk as their money. The yap would not be able to believe how this small piece of paper could be so valuable, powerful, and easily transported around the world. When in their time they just left this huge piece of almost impossible to transport stone where it was and told everyone in the community who the new owner was. I personally believe the yap wouldn’t understand  how we have several banks all around the country and we can deposit and withdraw money so easily.  They would be amazed as to how convenient this piece of paper can be compared to that huge piece of stone. A step that may have seemed impossible back in their time has evolved as one of the best inventions of all time and one that we will use forever.

The Brazilians trusted the currency because it was actually a stable, trustworthy, and dependable method. The method was actually fake in the beginning, and it had no real value. Until they realized that this method actually worked for the better and it made things easier for everyone.  The prices of things were very clear to them and eventually turned out to work in their favor. This specific “fake money” method actually saved Brazil. There was a huge inflation in the country and it was happening at rapid speed. So someone had to come up with a plan to potentially save the country from bankruptcy and it worked. People would say using this method is absurd and risky but since it worked there isn’t really much to say.

Works Cited

 Friedman, Milton. “The Island of Stone Money.” Diss. Hoover Institution, Stanford University , 1991.

Joffe-Walt, Chana . “How Fake Money Saved Brazil.” NPR.org. 4 Oct. 2010. 30 Jan. 2015. <http://www.npr.org/blogs/money/2010/10/04/130329523/how-fake-money-saved-brazil&gt;.

Moving Image-ballsohard83

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The Ad opens with a man who is devastated inside of an ambulance. He has tears coming from his eyes and he has a bloody bandage on his forehead. There are two nurses a male and a female who are assisting another person on a stretcher. The camera then zooms in on his heart rate monitor and it is decreasing.

0:04-0:10-

The devastated man has this guilty look on his face. He is rubbing his head and sobbing as if he just killed someone. The camera then zooms in on the man on the stretcher as one of the nurses put an oxygen mask on his injured face. The man on the stretcher looks to be in a very bad condition. One of the nurses uses a defibrillator on the wounded man. The other weeping man is still ranting off, and the woman nurse looks at the man with such a disturbed look on her face.

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Both of the nurses then look at eachother then back at the deviated man with a smirk. They have a look on their face which is a sign of relief as if what the man said was good news. The lady nurse then lifts the defibrillator.

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The man on the stretcher arises from the mat and looks around the room. The camera then zooms in on the injured man on the stretcher and he has a brace around his neck with blood all over. When he rises he looks as if he was a vampire awakening from the inside of a coffin. He then looks at the nurses and the man who is devastated as if he is perfectly fine and ready to go immediately. The devastated man then looks amazed beyond belief as if he had just seen a ghost. His face goes from completely crying and sobbing to dazed and confused.

0:24-31-

The man on the stretcher then falls back down onto the stretcher. The male nurse then gives the devastated man a sarcastic look and puts the gas mask onto the patient. The lady nurse puts the defibrillator back onto the mans chest and continues to operate. The man who was calmed down by the surprise of the man on the stretcher then immediately starts crying again. He puts his head down in disappointment. Then a quote comes on the screen which states “Buzzed driving is drunk driving” .

The Ad is called “Let’s Take Action” https://youtu.be/OYCHpZ13l-E