Rebuttal argument- PATricKStar123

Mental health treatment extends out of the boundaries of the school system

Mental health illness is a very tricky subject especially when it comes to determining who has it and who does not. Most people who struggle with a mental health illness will not be diagnosed until it becomes quite severe. In this case of College students, even fewer will seek out help in fear of being different or judgement. So an important question is how can you help someone that doesn’t seek help.

One of the most pressing problems with overseeing College students is their age group. As stated in the publication titled The Best Practices of Medical Health, “Colleges have a complicated relationship with their students. Most students are legal adults and entitled to privacy and autonomy.” While universities respect this many can not oversee the mass of Students and govern what they do. this was simple to do back in maybe middle school or high school with a more personal approach with students but in college it is much more complex and interpersonal.

Second is that mental health services are something serious that requires professional attention and even more in depth treatment. To offer this a campus of ten to forty thousands students is insane. the funding for the university would be through the roof. for example, when you have a severe injury who do you you want to treat you a school nurse or a Doctor. the same goes with having a severe mental illness. University counselors can only do so much; Families of students should seek outside treatment from psychiatric counselors. What the school does offer is an assessment and the try to diagnose the problem then help direct you to more extensive professional help after a period of time. “The 2014 Healthy Minds Study (Eisenberg, 2014) found that 98% of students would be willing to accept someone who received mental health treatment as a close friend, and only 15% felt that receiving mental health treatment was a sign of personal failure.”

Instead of blaming schools we should come up with at tacit to be able to assess students since we already give them the right resources to seek help. we should open our services to students with incentives and let them know its okay to receive help and maybe have some success stories to share as examples. I personally believe this problem is going to continue to be ongoing because of the extent of the fact is we cannot properly treat everyone since most people don’t seem to want to seek help. The point is not to wipe the numbers clean; the point of this is to find a way to properly reach out to students and lower the amount of tragedies to come.


Locke, B. , Wallace, D. and Brunner, J. (2016), Emerging Issues and Models in College Mental Health Services. Student Services, 2016: 19-30.

Schwartz, V., M.D., & Kay, J., M.D. (2009). The crisis in college and university mental health. Psychiatric Times, 26(10), 32-32,34. Retrieved from

3 thoughts on “Rebuttal argument- PATricKStar123”

  1. You’re working with sensitive and important material here, PS. I admire your seriousness and want to help you do the best job you can.

    Be more direct in every paragraph to indicate clearly to your readers where you stand on every bit of evidence. Writers are commonly so familiar with their own material that they forget to alert readers to their thinking. You keep me guessing most of the way through this essay, partly because I was confused earlier reading your Causal Argument. Now I have a hard time deciding which angle on this “college responsibility” issue you support, and which one you mean to refute.

    1. I was pretty sure reading your Causal Argument that you wanted to hold colleges responsible for determining who needed help with mental illness and then coercing them into counseling and possible treatment. Admittedly, I’m guessing, but you appeared to be surprised that colleges didn’t do more. Here you appear much more understanding of the “hands off” role a college is obligated to play with their adult students. You are entitled to either of these two reasonable positions, but you need to make very clear to readers which one you hold.

    2. As I suggested above, you appear to be building a case that exonerates schools from any clear responsibility to “take care” of the mental health of students who decline help or who decline to seek help.

    3. And now, in your third paragraph, you assert, as I did myself in my feedback for your Causal Argument, that schools simply CANNOT be expected to provide professional mental health treatment for their students, even for those who clearly need it and actively seek it. And all of that seems to be coming together until you cite your source, which clouds the issue completely. The Eisenberg study addresses only the assertion that seeking mental health treatment needn’t be considered stigmatizing. I don’t see the relevance at all.

    4. Your Causal Argument complained that after mentioning mental health services at orientation, students were never again made aware of the availability of help. I may have misunderstood, but you appeared to be demanding that school advocate proactively to get at-risk students to seek help. Here you offer the opinion that schools already inform their students sufficiently, but that they don’t incentivize treatment. You cast the school in the role of a sales force for available services. Then finally, you conclude that we’re not going to solve this insoluble problem because students who need help will always resist it.

    I think it’s your thinking, not your writing, that needs to be clearer first, PS. The best writing is simply good strong clear thinking communicated simply. When you figure out which of your sources offers the best evidence for whatever your specific, narrow thesis is, you’ll be much better able to make your argument persuasively.

    Is that helpful, PS? Do you see why a reader would be confused?
    Respond please. I appreciate the interaction.


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