Robust Verbs-LifeisSublime

There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

 

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Vancouver has a huge problem with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The crime rate has increased due to theses addictions, which is a problem for the people of Vancouver. Addicts have a hard time getting through the day. Dailey activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are harder to maintain as an addict of heroin. Addictions cause people to act out in order to obtain the drug they crave. In order to get the drugs, addicts have resorted to breaking and entering and stealing to fund their addiction. The limits are endless as to what addicts would do to get their hands on their drug of choice. The issues facing this program involved not actually helping people ween off of a harmful drug, instead it controls the rate of crimes being committed by people suffering with addiction. The program insures taking these people off the streets, avoiding minor street crimes, and out of the hospital. Hospitals don’t have time to deal with people who’s only intention is to use a bad drug, especially when the hospital bills aren’t getting paid. “Free heroin for addicts” gives people free heroin in the cleanest and safest way possible. The program will fix the city and clean up the street crime, but will not help the people suffering from addiction.

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One Response to Robust Verbs-LifeisSublime

  1. davidbdale says:

    Not bad, Sublime, but as an example of how to eliminate repetition, consider combining these nearly identical sentences AND use robust verbs:
    1. In order to get the drugs, addicts have resorted to breaking and entering and stealing to fund their addiction. 2. The limits are endless as to what addicts would do to get their hands on their drug of choice.
    Combined:

    Addicts will burglarize, rob, mug, or worse to fund their addiction.

    Score so far 2/3
    Put into Grade Please if you elect to revise.

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