Robust Verbs- brobeanfarms

Vancouver is currently at war with heroin and crime. The “free heroin for addicts” program is effective in attempt to reduce addiction and crime. The problem is that addicts are the cause of crime. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain due to addiction. Heroin users will do whatever it takes to receive this drug. The types of crimes committed range from breaking and entering to stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets. In turn, minor street crimes will be prevented. As a result, heroin users will be kept out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. The city will benefit while the addicts will still suffer addiction.

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  1. These were the instructions:
    Eliminate repetitious material
    Eliminate trash language: There is / There are / (etc.); It is / They are / (etc.); because of the fact that / due to the fact that; The problem with this situation is . . . .
    Fix flawed “By verbing . . .” sentences
    Eliminate needless “types of,” “kinds of,” “sort of” language
    Repair pronouns with unclear antecedents

    Grade Neutral


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