Casual Rewrite- Beyonce1234

Professional Baseball Batters Vs. Professional Softball Pitcher

Should a professional painter be expected to complete a grand sculpture perfectly with out any mistakes? This painter only has painted  portraits, landscapes, and morals all their life. Doing something new for the first time is difficult in general. Just because this painter is an artist, people usually believe that artists are good at all kinds of art, but that is not always the case. Does this mean that completing art sculptures are harder to do than being a professional painter? Because a professional athlete is not good at another sport, does it make that sport a harder sport to play?

In the game of baseball and softball, pitchers dominate. The game is won on the act of who can make the other team’s hitters, hit less. Professional softball pitcher, Jennie Finch, is one who dominates every time she steps in the pitching circle. By nature, people love a good challenge, so professional baseball hitters like to face the all powerful and mighty, Ms. Finch. Professional hitter, Albert Pujols, accepted the challenge and stepped up to the plate. Due to Pujols not ever seeing a ball rise before, he couldn’t touch it. This got people thinking; if college players hit Finch before, then why can’t professional ball players touch her?

This doesn’t mean that the pros aren’t has good as they think they are because they truly are very good, but this just means they don’t practice hitting softball pitching as much as baseball pitching. This also could mean softball batters are pretty good in the fact that they can even touch this pitching. The movement of a softball pitch is completely different than a baseball pitch. The professional baseball hitters are not used to the angle. If they were, they would then be able to touch the ball more accurately. Due to the fact that it was Pujols first time ever to see this pitching, it was difficult for him. With more and more practice, there is a chance that he could perform better.

However, Finch is the best of the best, there is most likely a softball pitcher that Pujols can touch that is not Jennie. Another scenario was when Finch participated in the Pepsi All-Star Game in 2004; Finch faced more MLB hitters. “No sooner did Finch arrive at the mound then the defensive players behind her sat down.” Though their assumption is humorous, this states that Finch would go to strike out each MLB batter of the inning.

The batters reaction time to the ball has not been worked on to face a softball pitcher. Practicing this will allow better timing to the ball. When athletes practice timing, they are making sure they can execute skills “without thinking.” By practice how to come in contact with a rise ball, batters then will expect it at bat. Now that this a practiced, maybe even mastered, batters can then focus on if the ball will be inside or outside.

This can prove that MLB hitters can be expected to not hit Finch on a first try, but being the professional athlete they are, they can practice and hit her the second time. Most hitters don’t see a second at-bat with Finch because they never want to go through that humiliation ever again. Therefore, trying to prove that hitting a softball is harder to hit than a baseball is not reasonable. Studies can not be accurate because the only way to prove this to be so is if there were an athlete who practiced hitting both for an equal amount of time.

Works Citied

A Women’s Softball Pitcher vs. the Top Baseball Hitters…Who Wins? (n.d.). Retrieved November 06, 2016.

Tinley, S. (2014, July 24). Why MLB hitters can’t hit Jennie Finch and science behind reaction time. Retrieved November 06, 2016.

4 thoughts on “Casual Rewrite- Beyonce1234”

  1. I’m going to recommend a radical rewrite of your first paragraph, Beyonce. It may be all I have time for this morning, but I want to offer everybody something quick and invite you back for more.

    Should a professional painter be expected to complete a grand sculpture perfectly with out any mistakes? This painter only has painted portraits, landscapes, and morals all their life. Doing something new for the first time is difficult in general. Just because this painter is an artist, people usually believe that artists are good at all kinds of art, but that is not always the case. Does this mean that completing art sculptures are harder to do than being a professional painter? Because a professional athlete is not good at another sport, does it make that sport a harder sport to play?

    First, let’s eliminate the Rhetorical Questions. They put the reader in charge of the answers, which is the opposite of good writing, in which we control every aspect of our readers’ responses.

    Then, we’ll lose the artificial analogy between a painter and a batter. It might be useful as a side note later, but we can’t expect it to draw readers into the article: the connection isn’t strong enough.

    Finally, instead of merely hinting at our thesis, we’ll state it boldly and challenge readers to agree or disagree, either way engaging them in the act of reading further to test your evidence.

    Michael Jordan was a lousy professional baseball player. Arguably the greatest player ever to touch a basketball, certainly an athlete of incredible athletic ability, within months of retiring from basketball, he was “bobbling easy flies and swatting at bad pitches as a struggling right fielder” for a minor-league ball club. And practice did not make perfect. His skills handling the roundball and driving to the rim contributed nothing to the toolkit he would have needed to make a pro baseball career. By the time he gave up that dream, he had to admit that just because a professional athlete is good at one sport, he shouldn’t assume he’ll be good at all of them.

    Beyonce, I’m trying this morning to offer incremental feedback to everyone who has requested it, knowing that I can only serve everyone by being brief and incomplete. With that understanding, I invite you to respond with revisions or further questions and another request for additional feedback.

    There are technical matters to attend to in your work, so do please return for more feedback. Meanwhile, I’d appreciate knowing if you find this sort of advice helpful or intrusive.
    —DSH

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