Rebuttal-Philly321

Ineffective Treatments

On May 30, 1991, John Balcerzak, a police officer of the Milwaukee Police Department, discovered Konerak Sinthasomphone, a 14-year-old, wandering the street naked and bleeding from his rectum. Jeffery Dahmer, an unknown serial killer at the time, told police that Sinthasomphone was his 19-year-old boyfriend, and that they had an argument while drinking. Dahmer acted embarrassed about the situation and insisted that the child return home with him. Officer Balcerzak willingly handed over the child and escorted them back to Dahmer’s apartment, while neglecting to take the child’s wounds into consideration. When they arrived back at the apartment, Dahmer showed the officers two polaroid photos that he had taken of Konerak in his underwear. Once officer Balcerzak saw proof that they were lovers, he told Dahmer to take good care of him. Later that night, Dahmer killed and dismembered Sinthasomphone, keeping his skull as a souvenir. Not only did Officer Balcerzak witness the suffering of a child, he let the criminal walk away. Officer Balcerzak was immediately fired, but took his termination to court where a judge reinstated him. Yet, the fight for his job was only half of his worries. The family of Konerak Sinthasomphone was outraged by the reinstating of officer Balcerzak and made it publicly prevalent of his disgrace to law enforcement. Police officers lives are constantly threatened, but to watch a victim visibly suffer and then watch the criminal get off must have been psychologically unbearable.

The pressures of law enforcement have lead to high blood pressure, insomnia, increased levels of destructive stress hormones, heart problems, Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder, and suicide. The exposure to this case in particular must have been stressful beyond belief. A study conducted by Badge of Life in 2016 found that there are about 17 suicides per 100,000 officers compared to a mere 7.5 per 100,000 suicides among college students whose lives are impacted by astronomical college tuitions and societal pressures to acquire a degree. Support and therapy could help mitigate the mental health damage caused by this type of trauma. Police officers deserve all the help we can give them to regain their original selves. Officers are constantly exposed to dangerous situations by virtue of their job, but the system to help police officers cope with their stress is woefully inadequate. It is inexcusable how many lives have been damaged and/or taken from the lack of support for people who sacrifice their lives on a day-to-day basis to keep us safe.

In response to growing physiological problems in law enforcement, police programs have been developed to defuse these high levels of stress. These programs have made efforts to help their traumatized officer’s. But the truth is, police whose lives are under constant stress, do not receive the help they need to cope with their physiological complications. The common problem lies in the lack of trust that police officers have in their Employee Assistance Programs. Police officers do not feel a personal connection with their therapists; they would rather talk to someone in their line of duty. The attitude seems to be related to past experience and concern about not being understood by a superior when stress-related behaviors develop. Gary Allmers, a detective in the Bergen County Prosecutors Office, said, “There is a lack of understanding in these programs to help officers cope with their problems. We do not want to sit down and talk to a therapist who cannot relate to our situation. We need to talk to someone, perhaps a retired officer, about the common stressors in law enforcement. There is good intention, but we need someone who has been in our shoes before. I feel alone most of the time, which scares me quite frankly.” Employee Assistant Programs should consist of retired officers who have dealt with similar problems in their line of duty. Police officers, the guardians of our safety, should never feel alone. We need to meet police officer’s half way and stop supplying them with mediocre support systems. If one cop is saying a therapist is not enough, imagine the officer’s who have yet to come forward about their symptoms.

Employee Assistance Programs in law enforcement are also not mandatory. Police officers are given the option to seek help. But the truth is, the largest barrier to effective treatments and support systems is the culture that exists within law enforcement. The profession requires officers to restrain from their emotions and feelings of pain or suffrage. It is presumed by law enforcement that officers can make that emotional switch and focus on another case, regardless of what they may be experiencing. In a predominantly male culture emphasizing toughness and a shrug-it-off, suck-it-up mentality, officers are forced to keep their feelings to themselves and resort to unhealthy methods of coping, which result in negative outcomes (such as alcohol abuse, risk-taking behaviors, etc.). Police officers commonly face internal stressors, such as administrative stress, that include long hours, lack of support, overtime, no room for advancement, and family complications. External stressors are correlated with outside factors such as the attitude of the general public, daily exposure to trauma, negativity, and uneasiness when dealing with challenging and dangerous situations. Police officers, who do not come forward because of the stigma of appearing weak, are putting themselves at risk for the development of serious physiological or physical complications. These programs are seemingly noneffective if they are not mandated in police departments.

(Add in if necessary) Many police departments provide wellness benefits in exchange for a small discount health care costs for employees. The goal of these programs is to ensure employees’ fitness for duty. Law enforcement agencies have spent significant financial resources to address issues of officer safety, with great success. Sadly, only a small fraction of most organizations’ budgets goes toward addressing the psychological needs of their officers and families. (Research funds)

(Add in if necessary) These support systems also fail to identify an officers symptoms of distress until it is too late. Expand on how symptoms such as PTSD are not recognized until it’s to late.

As a nation that prides themselves on a strong law enforcement system, America has ignored the calls for help from the people who have set out to protect our nation. (Finish Conclusion)

Works Cited

https://adrenalfatiguesolution.com/police-stress-fatigue/” The Adrenal Fatigue Solution. 4 Dec. 2014. 11 Nov. 2016.

https://www.policeone.com/health-fitness/articles/137133-Police-Officer-Suicide-Frequency-and-officer-profiles/” PoliceOne. Michael G. Aamodt, Nicole A. Stalnaker. 20 June 2006. 11 Nov. 2016.

https://psmag.com/aversion-to-therapy-why-won-t-men-get-help 7998d34f1d4e#.p3fmegm8r” PacificStandard. Betsy Freed, David Freed. 25 Jun 2012. 11 Nov. 2016.

Allmers, Gary. “Employee Assistance Programs.” Personal interview. 11 Nov. 2016.

3 thoughts on “Rebuttal-Philly321”

  1. You do a lot well here, Philly, but you make a common error, risking your readers’ attention by avoiding your own thesis. Your primary claim is that, despite the existence of Employee Assistance Programs, at-risk police officers suffering from traumatic stress receive too little support for their mental health. Why bury that for the entire first paragraph when there are so many opportunities to make your point?

    Police WHOSE lives are under constant stress may look for ways to help cope with their physiological complications.

    Here it would be SO EASY to say: Police whose lives are under constant stress, DO NOT RECEIVE the help THEY NEED TO cope with their physiological complications.

    Police OFFICERS are constantly exposed to people suffering distress or pain, threats to their safety or health, the inconclusive nature of police work and so much more.

    Here you dilute the power of your evidence. The threats to their safety are the TRAUMATIC events that threaten mental health. The exposure to suffering and the inconclusive nature of their work contribute to their stress, but wouldn’t break them. UNLESS: they SEE THE SUFFERINGS of innocents, are THREATENED by their assailants, and then watch the criminals GET OFF. That combination would be stressful beyond belief.

    A study conducted by Badge of Life in 2016 found that there were 51 deaths by suicide of law enforcement officers in the last six months of 2015.

    51 is just a number, Philly. Most likely 52 dentists committed suicide between July and December, 2015. Without context, your number is not persuasive.

    That would indicate that approximately 102 law enforcement suicides occurred last year.

    Maybe. But it could mean there were a total of 51 suicides in 2015. Careful readers will resist your arithmetic.

    The pressures of law enforcement have led to the development of high blood pressure, insomnia, increased levels of destructive stress hormones, heart problems, Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder, and suicide.

    If we already believe in a significantly higher suicide rate, these naked claims will carry some weight, but if we’re dubious that cops kill themselves inordinately often, we’ll resist these claims too.

    How are they to be brought back to their original self?

    What is the value of this rhetorical question, Philly? If you’ve made your case that officers need and deserve help to regain their mental health, you can make a compelling declarative claim that we owe it to them: They deserve all the help we can give them to regain their original selves.

    AMERICANS have grown so dependent on law enforcement that they fail to acknowledge an officer’s signs of distress, which is mind boggling considering we live in a country that is so fixated on improving our overall health.

    Maybe you’re trying to emphasize the counterintuitive nature of our disinterest in police health. But why? Your long essay may need to prove a counterintuitive claim, but in your rebuttal essay your only obligation is to refute the best argument to the contrary.

    It is inexcusable how many lives have been damaged and/or taken from the lack of support for people who sacrifice their lives on a day-to-day basis to keep us safe.

    Your moral outrage is admirable but premature. You haven’t demonstrated yet that officers don’t receive the help they need. Readers will resist feeling bad for officers who place themselves willingly into dangerous situations.

    In response to growing physiological problems in law enforcement, police programs have been developed to defuse these high levels of stress. These programs are said to help police OFFICERS manage their stress and prevent suicide in law enforcement.

    There is no place for these claims in your first paragraph, Philly. The job of this Introduction is to demonstrate that (allow me to quote myself/yourself): “Police whose lives are under constant stress, DO NOT RECEIVE the help THEY NEED TO cope with their physiological complications.” A good second paragraph could acknowledge that departments have made efforts to help their traumatized officers. Not your first.

    Yet, they are loopholes in the system.

    Save this until you’ve shown that the need is there.

    Police OFFICERS are still committing suicide, which leads us to believe that Employee Assistance PROGRAMS are failing.

    This is not persuasive unless police officers are committing suicide at rates much higher than dentists.

    The system to help police OFFICERS cope with their stressors can be improved.

    If you’re going to express your moral outrage in your first paragraph, this is the place to do it much more strenuously than you do in this sentence. You said earlier: “It is inexcusable how many lives have been damaged and/or taken from the lack of support for people who sacrifice their lives on a day-to-day basis to keep us safe.” That’s a beauty, and you can use it to close your Introduction IF YOU HAVE PROVED that 1) Cop jobs are ridiculously dangerous, 2) exposure to life threats PLUS human suffering PLUS the exoneration of evil is terribly traumatic, 3) support and therapy could mitigate the mental health damage caused by this trama, and finally, 4) they’re not getting the help they need.

    Too much criticism?
    Helpful?
    Holding you to too high a standard?
    Lost my mind?
    I would appreciate your reply.

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    1. Your feedback is very helpful. The more the merrier. I sincerely appreciate all the time you put into my posts. There is certainly room for improvement and I cannot wait to dissect this paper. Let’s do this!

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      1. LOVE your attitude, Philly. I find your enthusiasm impressive and inspirational. Please note that in addition to making notes on your argument I have capitalized certain words when quoting your own text. In most cases, the mistakes you have made on those words involve apostrophes, plurals, and possessives. Read those sentences carefully to discover why the capitalized words are corrections.

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