A05: Proposal+5 – Baritonemusicman

For my research essay I will be claiming that music educators are the best therapist the school system doesn’t know they have.

School Counselor Careers

careersinpsychology.org  go to careers then click counselors then scroll down to school counselor careers

The Essential Content of the Article: In order to truly know what it means to be a school counselors its important to know what the job description is as well as what it takes to be a good one. This article devotes its entirety to just that from paragraphs on what is a school counselor to what it takes to become one. It also discusses their importance why they are necessary to the school system. 

For my research essay I will be examining Music Education in the public school system, its importance to the development of students and how it is actually detrimental to students to remove music from the school curriculum.

The Importance of Music Education In the Public Schools

http://search.proquest.com.ezproxy.rowan.edu/docview/304823828?pq-origsite=summon

The Essential Content of the Article: This article devotes entire chapters to the cognitive effects that music education have on students. Each are backed by research and test done to prove how music is able to do so. As well as discussing why it is that we are losing these programs and how we reclaim what has been lost.

What it Proves: I plan to use this information to pull concrete examples of how exactly music education actually aids the school system and how getting rid of it we show bad results across the board.

Balancing the scales of music: A quantitative study of music education and academic achievement in a southeastern state public school

http://search.proquest.com.ezproxy.rowan.edu/docview/219970788?pq-origsite=summon

The Essential Content of the Article: This article is a dissertation of findings of the differences between students who had music education and those who didn’t showing how they differed in scoring on standardized testing and the learning advantages.

What it Proves: I will using the findings of each study to make my case of how removing music education is going to cause adverse affects to students.

The Importance of music Education in public schools

http://www.cnn.com/2011/SHOWBIZ/Music/05/31/music.education.cake.difiore/index.html

The Essential Content of the Article: This article gives a first person view of how music education experiences were able to be manifest in real life situations. By bringing this article in its less about the numbers and brings in real life perspective from someone who has experience with music education.

What it proves: By using this article I will be able to draw from the real life perspective of students who have had thru the music education process. By having first person recollection its creates more reliability giving a face to the studies.

The Consequences of Curtailing Music Education

http://www.pbs.org/wnet/tavissmiley/tsr/dudamel-conducting-a-life/the-consequences-of-curtailing-music-education/

The Essential Content of the Article: In this article it discusses the adverse effects that are occurring due to the cut of music education programs. It also delves into how in most cases the programs are lost by lower-income or urban communities due to funding. And those who are on the higher bracket are less likely to suffer due to being able to put their kids in private study but that isn’t always an option for those in a lower-income bracket

What is Proves: In using this sources I’ll be able to delve into the adverse affects that taking away music education will create further differences between brackets of income. By taking away theses programs those who live in lower-income brackets are less likely to be able to continue their studies meaning they wouldn’t be receiving the same advantages those whom continue on are able to receive. Creating inequality in learning styles because a source has been taken away from them.

What if every child had access to music education from birth? | Anita Collins | TEDxCanberra

The Essential Content of the Article: During this Speech Ainta Collins discusses of findings of neuroscientist of how music is able to have so much of effect on children growing up. Giving visual understanding to how much brain activity music education is able to accomplish all at once.

What this Proves: I will be using her finding for giving a visual outlook on brain activity as well as giving in-depth examples of how musicians have highly developed memory when put against those who didn’t have that musical advantage.

 

 

2 thoughts on “A05: Proposal+5 – Baritonemusicman”

  1. As an example of how to improve a work of this type, Baritone, consider how LITTLE your paragraph says compared to how MUCH it could and should say.

    BEFORE:
    The Essential Content of the Article: This article devotes entire chapters to the cognitive effects that music education have on students. Each are backed by research and test done to prove how music is able to do so. As well as discussing why it is that we are losing these programs and how we reclaim what has been lost.

    AFTER:
    The Essential Content of the Article: This article devotes entire chapters to the cognitive IMPROVEMENTS that music education can have on students. Examples include students who SCORED HIGHER on object-assembly tasks after singing lessons; first-graders who INCREASED THEIR MATH PROFICIENCY after special music classes; second-graders who IMPROVED their Stanford 9 Math Test scores following piano keyboard; and students whose READING COMPREHENSION IMPROVED when background music was played in their study halls.

    I hope you see the obvious difference, Baritone. Your version merely indicates EFFECTS, while your thesis is best served by evidence that music in the curriculum IMPROVES students’ performance in a variety of intelligences.

    Notice the same problem in your last entry:
    The Essential Content of the Article: During this Speech Ainta Collins discusses of findings of neuroscientists of how music is able to have so much effect on children growing up. Giving visual understanding to how much brain activity music education is able to accomplish all at once.

    There’s no indication AT ALL that music BENEFITS children growing up, or HOW, or WHY.

    Thought Experiment. Consider the case of Alex, the anti-hero of “A Clockwork Orange.” Alex was a thug who, with his droogs, broke into people’s homes, tortured and beat them, sometimes fatally, and robbed them of their possessions, usually to the sound of Beethoven symphonies playing at full volume.

    The Essential Content of the Novel: Alex and his mates were profoundly affected by the genius of Beethoven, performances of whose symphonies enhanced their group activities and contributed to their sense of purpose. The music contributed to their concentration and, especially when blended with the outcries of their unwilling participants, altered their enjoyment of their extracurricular activities.

    Like your own “Essential Content” paragraphs, this one is so VAGUE and noncommittal that readers have no clue we’re describing brutal beatings done to musical accompaniment.

    Furthermore, there’s nothing at all counterintuitive about your thesis, it seems to me, Baritone. I would think it’s well established that a broad curriculum that includes exposure to multiple modes of experience and learning is the best way to educate children. You’ll need to state your thesis in VERY SPECIFIC terms to emphasize its counterintuitivity. For example: “Musicians Make Better Physicists.” That might not seem obvious, and proving it would be a triumph.

    Am I making sense? Reply, please.
    Coded Grade: Q

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