Stone Money Rewrite—tiggs18

The Importance of Money

What really is money?  People nowadays work their whole lives trying to receive some pieces of paper at the end of each week in which basically runs our world.  We hear people talk about the american dream in which, is a term that can have many definitions, in which usually, results in you having enough of these pieces of paper to be financially stable.  If we think about it deeply we will realize, that we receive these pieces of paper in which are called money and then from there, we base your whole life off of them.

People trade these pieces of paper for anything from food to fuel themselves to boats in which they can have travels out in the sea with.  It is strange concept to think of because to some people, money really doesn’t exist.  In a way, we are alike the people in the island of Yap.  They had the limestones in which they did not have actual possession of, and they used it as “money” in which they traded someone in return for say, a cow or anything worth value.  These people never really had the limestones in possession, they just said they were theirs, but they sat in the same spot.  This is a great example of how that is also a way we live off today in our world.  At the end of each work week, peoples bank accounts go from a number to a higher number, in which they receive no money, just a lift on the number that it says in their accounts.  From there, some have to pay bills in which their number that just got raised, gets lowered right away and the account of the company they are paying a bill to, gets higher.  This is crazy because in both stories, there is no money that actually sit in hand of a person.

The idea of money not being in actually possession makes sense with the article of how fake money saved brazil.  Years ago, Brazils economy hit an all time low and there needed to be a way to save it.  They thought of a new way in which help save the economy by the next day.  Again their money was all based of accounts, no one had the money in actual possession which relates to how we are today and also to the island of Yap.  These people somehow fixed their economy from this method and also got a grip on how money will actually work.

Money is an adroit concept in so many ways.  The goal right when one start’s school is all played out in a long run to make more of these pieces of paper to make your life more fun and acceptable.  We start by giving these pieces of paper or numbers in an account away to go to school in which we get another piece of paper in return from that, and then this helps us get jobs and which from there, we receive more money again from ones job.  So maybe this world just revolves around paper.  Some people say stop wasting paper because it ruins our world but does it actually?  To some, it ruins the world because we need trees but also, it runs the world because everyone works everyday to get some.

There is a saying that usually parents use that goes, “does money grow on trees?”  If we really think about it, yes it does.  Its all paper which comes from trees.

Works Cited

Joffe-Walt, Chana. “How Fake Money Saved Brazil.” NPR. NPR, n.d. Web. 25 Sept. 2016.

Goldstein, Jacob. “The Island Of Stone Money.” NPR. NPR, n.d. Web. 25 Sept. 2016.

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  1. Just a quick note, tiggs18. I was fixing your categories and title when I noticed how very many times you’ve used the Banned Second Person. Each instance violates Rule 12. See the “Fails For Grammar (FFG)” post in the Syllabus Menu.

    For those of us who use you unconsciously, eliminating the Second Person can seem daunting, but can be done, usually by substituting we language for you language.

    EXAMPLE FROM YOUR WORK: There is a saying that usually parents use that goes, “does money grow on trees?” If you really think about it, yes it does. Its all paper which comes from trees.

    FIXED: There is a saying that usually parents use that goes, “Does money grow on trees?” They think it doesn’t, but it does. It’s all paper, which comes from trees.

    Notice also in the example above I’ve capitalized the Does. I also fixed your Its to It’s. And I inserted the required comma before which.

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